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Cheyenne Kai

"Vamp. 1" by Cheyenne Kai

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WARNING:If you don't like gay love, don't read this series. I know I said I wouldn't write about vampires. But my interest got the better of me, and I came up with this. Will probably be continuing with the story when I have time. Hope you like it.
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Come. Taste my blood.

I will take your soul,

I will damn your life.

You will soar to heights unimaginable.

You will slowly rot. Rot in hell as I once did.

For this is your new life now.

Creature of the night feed on me, and we will rule even the courageous.

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'But I want more,' I whined as my sire gently eased my lips from the beautiful neck of the dead woman lying next to me.

 'Later. you will be sick if you drink too much, too soon. Remember, you are not yet fully turned.'

 I sighed, and looked up at him. I smiled as I licked the last drops of blood from around my mouth and savored the exhilarating rush of drinking such a powerful substance. 

I was happy until I glimpsed my faint reflection in the mirror. It was hard to believe I'd only a couple of hours ago been a depressed fifteen year old, regretting my life and wanting to die. Now I was so much more. My sire had made me that, and I had thanked him. I stared at the deathly white skin, and the red patches around my lonely eyes. Through the crimson coloured lips some more blood leaked, and I hungrily licked at it with my tongue.  Only then I realised my fantasies about seductive vampires were false. I wasn't beautiful. I was a monster. I looked away sharply, disgusted at how good the blood tasted, mingled with my own image of drinking it, playing in my mind over and over. I looked at the women with sorry eyes, no longer seeing her as a meal, watching the veins in her neck pulsing with food, but as a person. Someone with family and friends who would cry salty tears when they found her lying here, in her own blood. My sire had already started making certain cautions to make it look like suicide. I remembered her screams when we first walked into her room. Her petrified eyes that couldn't understand what was happening until it was too late. I had stood there laughing. I didn't want to wait any longer to taste my first change of drinking blood. Human blood. Her blood. The memories of my sire now filled me with hurt when I saw him pierce her flawless neck  once she had given up struggling-to make it easier for me to suck from. I remembered her reaching for me, then going limp from exhaustion. I returned the favor by sucking up her last essence of innocence, like a thirsty dog.

 I was still watching her when my sire put a hand on my shoulder, and spoke softly: 'It gets easier each time. Now aren't you glad you didn't drink any more?'

 The sick joke made me look at him with anger I'd never felt before. Even the anger I'd felt for my life as a human didn't compare to this. He'd made me kill a person. He'd made me kill my own mother. I saw her dead body one last time, and tried to remember her life. Because I had took it.

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16 Jun 200445 Isabel S. Alves
Great start! I'm addicted to vampires. Let me know when you upload, ok?

18 Cheyenne Kai replies: "YaY, me too! Thankyou for commenting. I'll let you know as soon as I update. Thanks for stopping by!"
20 Jun 2004:-) Christa Nopp
A lot of very well described emotions in this. Just one small thing: 'Because I had taken it.' instead of 'Because I had took it.'?
Apart from that: a touching and well written piece

12 Cheyenne Kai replies: "Thankyou, glad you liked it. Thanks for the advice!"
22 Jun 2004:-) April A. Hall
Very cool, i'll keep visiting and i'll change the name of my poem. You deserve that title you want and mine can easily be changed. Keep writing!

2 Cheyenne Kai replies: "aww, thanks. But your poems really good too! Thankyou for the kind comment. I should be writing more now that the holidays are nearly here..."
25 Jun 2004:-) Scott C. Schubert
That was a very nice little morbid piece. I thought the mental conflict of this new vampire was very well done. It's a terrible thing that she had just done, but it is something she has to get used to if she wants to survive. And then you threw in it being her mother! Man was I blindsided by that. Never saw it coming.

Overall, I enjoyed this part quite a bit. And know what? I didn't notice a single comma error! Maybe now I'll stop being such a knit-picking freak 2

1 Cheyenne Kai replies: "lol, YaY, no comma errors! I don't mind you saying, I know I have a problem. Glad you like it! But it's meant to be a boy, should have writtin that, hey? "
29 Jun 200445 Kain
Greetings my fellow kindred.
i´m also deeply addicted to vampires.
and i have tried to get a library site,
but man i have tried at least five times now but i´m
never accepted.
I left my E-mail.
I wonder if we could exchange stories.

1 Cheyenne Kai replies: "I would love to read your stories-please e-mail me! I wasn't accepted at first, you've just got to keep trying I guess. Hope you do get a placement in the future. "
12 Aug 200445 Kyle 'Frozen' Steeves
Well, very intresting. I cant remember if I have read this or not. I love Vampires soo so much.

This was done excellently. I love how he killed his own mother, its a great way to start a life of pure blood lust and beauty. In a way, the sire is now his new mother,father,sybling,and any other person in his life that may matter, and everyone else, once he's fully turned will be no longer even noticible to him except that they hold the sweet red liquid which we..I mean they.. crave so much.

enouph rambling, I'll read you'r other stuff later.

:-) Cheyenne Kai replies: "wow, I finally see it now..."
13 Jan 200545 Stephanie M. Sargent
Oooo, I love it. Big vampire fan here! Though it did ring a little of Annie Rice, I still enjoyed it. I'm new in Elfwood. Been very excited about getting my library up and running. Would you mind if I asked you to take a look?

:-) Cheyenne Kai replies: "I'm a big fan of Anne Rice, so that's probably why. Louis is my hero! YaY. Glad you liked it. I'll go visit your shelf now."
4 Sep 200545 Maja Hĺkenstad
Nice and short! It's a good beginning, because it captures the reader, and introduces the story without to much mishmash. I have to go and read the next bit!
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About 'Vamp. 1':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Cheyenne Kai
 • Copyright: ©Cheyenne Kai. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Vampire, Vampires, Blood
 • Categories: Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic
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