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Kate ´The Pirate´ Riley

"Omega Prologue" by Kate ´The Pirate´ Riley

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So this is my mainstream story se ti in the world of Cretia, where Felidae reside (cat/dog people). I wouldn´t advise paying any attention to this prologue with the rest of the story soon as it will be revised due to the fact that at the time I had no idea that Kiah was going to be featured in my prequel ´The Lost Princess`. Go to Chapter One for a better read. Trust me lol
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Omega ;

Quest To Nowhere

prologue

Amidst a starstruck deep blue glaze, a fiery amber hissed and blazed over the once beautiful city. Blood stained screams still chimed fresh in her ears even though silenced a while before her whole world stood still.

Bruised and torn the tiny child had suffered no wounds, but for a moment whilst smothered and intoxicated, she believed she would soon be in the arms of her beloved mother once more. No cry, scream nor tear had passed neither her lips nor her eye. Every muscle in her tiny body stood still-as though in a trance. Gazing at the beatiful streaks of gold, red, orange and red, as they danced around her, she could not have known they peril they cradled. Not even when they leapt at her, angry and unmerciful.

No need to fear-Mummy would protect her.

She'd said she'd always be here, that she'd always be with me whenever I needed her.

But the pain she felt when she writhed upon the alter soon dispelled all hope of that ever happening. There was not a force on earth that could stop this now if she stayed-she would die here tonight. Then the moment came when, as if from nowhere, a hand reached out and pulled her, coughing and wheezing, from the flames and out onto the harbour. Away from the church, away from the city and away from her home. Away from her world.

The little girl thought of the priest, now, as she drifted away.

He was gone now-died in his temple as he thought it was ' proper'.

She had held his arm fast as he led her to the dock, pleaded with him to come.

His words had sounded empty, complicated and stupid. Even as he kissed her forehead and bid her farewell, she had hated him for staying. Hated him for being so calm. Hated him for leaving her. Why did he save her life only to give up his own ?

She whimpered softly as her salty tears contributed to the ocean.

The waves looked angry as they threw themselves against the nearby cliffs. The sea was a deep, crystal clear blue-so clean that you could almost see down to the bottom had it not been so deep. Slowly, she pulled herself up. Her body had become a burden, plagued with exhuastion from the anxiety of the night's events. Still she refused to rest. She had to see her home one last time, say goodbye-even from a distance.

So, sqauring her shoulders, head held high, she turned suddelnly to take one last look at the organic bonfire. It glistened from afar, sporting the most beatiful colours ever graced to grace the naked eye, whilst her land burned, the reflection of an untold disaster. Only two boats had been salvaged from the wreckage down at the harbour. Only thirty people out of five hundred had survived.

And so it was, as this tiny child silently sent her love, with a tiny whisper and an airborn kiss to all she loved, the people screamed and cried out to their dead, begging their God to bring them back. It wasn't fair, they would weep, over and over. It couldn't be, it was too horrible. Words said a million times before, replayed over and over. The pained, anguished wept at the destruction of their land. People of all ages, canine, feline, male or female. Some howling their sorrows, others throwing themselves overboard, in a futile attempt to return to the city and search for their loved ones, regardless of whether or not they could swim.

Others just sat still, quiet. Shocked and bewildered or in disbelief.

Even after their escape, many had been lost to their own hearts, dying by choice or trying to save their dead back on shore.

And they where dead. The little girl, even at such a tender age knew it, so why didn't they ?

She just stared, even now aware of so many painful emotions that most people never have to feel more than but a few times in their lives.

Gazing deep into the depths of their saviour, the little girl now wondered what love really was-she could feel it, but only now it hurt her.

She could never look back now, it hurt too much-but she would return here someday, her heart told her so-and when she did, this time her mother would be waitng for her. She was sure of it.

Kiah felt a sudden shudder as she awoke from deep sleep. Upon rising, she found herself bathed from head to toe in a cold sweat. She jerked herself bolt upright as another more violent shudder cursed through her veins. Excrutiating pain ran through her arms and legs almost as if something was tearing it's way through her very self.

Familiar pain. All too familiar.

Her stomach lurched and she nearly toppled over with dizzyness when she stood.

'It can't be !' she exclaimed, as she stared in horror at the woman who stood in the mirror opposite.

The feline there smiled with Kiah's own charm, grace and beauty but did not reflect it's owner's actions, as a reflection should. Instead she seemed to leer over Kiah, with a certain look that said ;

It's over.I' ve won. The gatekeepers are no more…

The spirit was speaking to her through her own heart. Through the same body that they had both shared, fighting the same battle but on opposite sides.

Turning suddenly, Kiah switched the television on. If the Gatekeepers really where gone, then the media would surely have found out…

' Now for today's top story,' a stony faced reporter burbled on, ' The nation is in shock after a mysterious fire burst out last night, on Giah Island, killing nearly all of it's inhabitants. Out of the five hundred known to have lived there, only thirty escaped to shore safely. Amongst those only twenty three still remain, after the others died of fatal burns or smoke inhalation. It is not yet known what caused the fire and rescue crews cannot reach the island due to bad weather conditions-'

Kiah switched it off. She had heard more enough.

' You did this !' she whispered, hoping her ' other self' might hear her.

No,came the unspoken reply, your kind did this, not I. They have damned themselves to an eternity of pain. I shall relieve them of their fate. I have passed judgement…

Soft tears trickled down her face as the words echoed clearly in her heart. Her barbarian cousins had failed her and their own kind.

Soon, they would all perish at her own hand, whilst the spirit led them all to extinction. She gripped a picture that she stood on her bedside table, and stared hard at the sweet girl that smiled back at her in the photo.

' I can't let you,' Kiah wept, replacing the photograph, and taking her pocket knife from her pocket.

She always carried it, just in case an occasion like this should come, and she would be forced to-

Banishing all thoughts of the spirit for a moment, Kiah wondered off into her daughter's bedroom, across the hallway.

The little girl was sleeping soundly, in her little bed, cocooned in a mass of teddybears, sheets and pillows.

Brushing her hand against the girl's rosy cheeks, Kiah kissed her smooth soft skin and knelt beside her, just to have that feeling once more.

To care for someone, to be close to them, listen to them breathe or watch them sleep. To feel love, to be loved and to have someone to depend on you or come to you with the smallest of problems.

' I'll never leave you,' she whispered in her ear, ' But I have to go now. Please forgive me. I love you too much to hurt you.'

The girl stirred then went back to her peaceful bliss, just as Kiah's heart ached with sorrow and the painful hatred for both herself and the spirit.

She would orfan her own daughter now, and possibly betray her by leaving her at such a tender age. Would the girl ever forgive her ?

But if she stayed the little girl would die anyway, and nothing could be more cruel. For the love of the little girl she would not condemn her to death along with her own world.

Her daughter would hurt, but only for a while, then she would thrive and live a full life. She was a strong child-nothing could take that from her.

Not even destiny…

←- Omega Prologue: Revised | ~The Lost Princess Two~ -→

DateNameComment 
19 Jun 200345 Kookie
Kool! I like this but the page looks a little lonely. U should try considering the order of your stories as it's confusing to see kiah in the middle and omega either side.

7 Kate 'The Pirate' Riley replies: "Yeah I know everyone's taken with the Lost Princess story lol! Nuttin I can do about the order right now but thanx for dropping by and saving my prologue page from being completely desolete!"
13 Jul 2003:-) Alice Muffin Girl Smith
Run for your life! Shut your eyes! Skip down to the real comment! Typo hunting results are in!!!
~ “Gazing at the ***beatiful*** streaks of gold, red, orange and red, as they danced around her, she could not have known ***they*** peril they cradled.” << I liked the descriptions o the flames here. ^_^
~ “So, ***sqauring*** her shoulders, head held high, she turned ***suddelnly*** to take one last look at the organic bonfire.”
~ “She could never look back now, it hurt too much-but she would return here someday, her heart told her so-and when she did, this time her mother would be ***waitng*** for her.”
~ “***Excrutiating*** pain ran through her arms and legs almost as if something was tearing ***it's*** way through her very self.” << No apostrophe, dear.
~ “The feline there smiled with Kiah's own charm, grace and beauty but did not reflect ***it's*** owner's actions, as a reflection should.” << Ditto.

To be honest, I’m confused. You stories... are they all supposed to relate together? If so, then the execution of that has been simply haphazard... At the very least, you should put up a recommended reading order in your bio so as to minimize the confusion of simple minds like mine, who see absolutely no connection between this and the other tale bearing the same name (which is a point of confusion in and of itself, mind you.)

But about this part... I didn’t like it as much as some of your others. Which was probably because I was trying to draw connections while I read it, and failing miserably, thereby allowing myself to get confused.

Sorry, this isn’t helping anything. I’m just so... confused... *tear*

12 Kate 'The Pirate' Riley replies: "oops think I failed miserably there lol. Ah never mind. This bit is a wee bit edging on the crap side so don't worry about it. They do connect actually this one is about how kiah (the Lost Princess) actually ends up although I'm not entirely happy about it myself cos I didn't know at the time that I was ever going to be bothered with a spin off. thanx again for commenting 12"
13 Jul 2003:-) Gabs Béland
Oh, lol no wonder i didnt get the full sense of it...I read the second part first! Ugh. Sorry. Its early here lol. Anyways, its great, and makes much more sense now, lol. I hope that theres more, cause its great 2
you have a wonderous talent, and i see no reason why you couldnt make it in the publishing world, with your wonderful tales 2
great job 2
~snuffles

11 Kate 'The Pirate' Riley replies: "Stop you're embaressing me (head goes larger). Nah seriously this bit is rather rubbish. but ah what the hey I'm young free and stupid I'm allowed to make one or two mistakes lol. thanks for commenting again! I'll be over to read more of your millions of stories later 12"
9 Aug 200345 Travis 'Costume' Kirby
Hey neighbor...saw your comment and decided to come over here...Good story though I dont understand what happened to kill everybody except that a gate keeper left anyway...u look kinda new also cuz u only have 3 things up where as when my next ticket is posted i'll have 4!! Haha so superior...the next ones are better though...have a stop by if u want...

12 Kate 'The Pirate' Riley replies: "Ouch! You read my worst story lol! Yeah I am kinda new but I have seven new stories and poems waiting to be edited and posted! Haha! Nah I'm just kiddin....it's more like five lol anyway thanks for dropping by and I'll be sure to keep up with your stuff 12"
15 Sep 2003:-) Leigh *Shwin* Erickson
Couple more typos I picked out... "they where dead..." should be were... and I don't know if it's British or not, but "would she orfan her child" should be orphan... at least american english would dictate that... indeed... yeah... what story is this part of? *is confused* It's not a bad read... your details are very vivid here... I quite liked it... just needs to be more clear it seems... sorry I can't be more specific on that!! But not bad!

2 Kate 'The Pirate' Riley replies: "yeah I personally hate this prologue. It's there basically so that I could post my stuff on elfwood until I get updated. It's meant to be part of the 'omega' (chaz, sophie thingie) but it is actually a little more confusing with Kiah actually being written in as a central character to her own story, The Lost Princess. xx"
16 Sep 2003:-) Becca Lusher
The beginning is very vivid indeed. As a prologue this definitely has potential *will read more in a moment* I like the set up...enough intrigue to make me read on, which is what a prologue is all about.
You don't seem to like this one, (bear in mind i haven't read owt else yet) but to me it seems alright, i think the standard is much higher in the first section though, it just seems more vivid and descriptive.
Also you might want to make a shift more obvious ***** breaks are useful...i wasn't sure at first if the one who woke up was waking from her memories of being on the boat...then the tv came in and then i knew she wasn't the same...anyway...yeppers intriguing...*goes to read more*

16 Kate 'The Pirate' Riley replies: "oops I didn't even think of that!! Ah well. My point of view changes do need a lot of work but I am getting there. Also this was written way way before I actually took the actual story up thanx again xx"
19 Sep 200345 L. 'Shanra' Kuepers
Well... grammar first (best to deal with the bad news first 12...
"No cry, scream nor tear had passed neither her lips nor her eye." In English, a double denial makes a positive sentence. So you're saying she did do those things without meaning it.

Anyways... This is GOOD! I enjoyed this muchly! I regret not knowing enough to fully grasp the reason of why Kiah must die, who this 'other her' is, but I realise that this is likely revealed later on 12

It is very vivid and well written. As a prologue, it makes me curious for more. ^^

1 Kate 'The Pirate' Riley replies: "wow someone actually enjoyed the prologue lol. This is a bit poo so just forget about if you read the rest of the story as it just doesn't really go. Thanx again xx"
23 Sep 2003:-) Beth 'Fork Master' Lewis
This was very nice, and it seems as if Miffy's already done the typo hunting, so I'll pass this time.... (*almost sad look*)

I found this fascinating... really easy to get into. The only confusing part was when you switched from little girl Kiah to older person.... I still don't get it. Was the little Kiah the other Kiah's daughter? Or.... never mind, it's too confusing. Explanation?

2 Kate 'The Pirate' Riley replies: "Oooh I hate doing this but it seems it needs to be explained properly cos it is kinda confusing. So *deep breath* Kiah is Sophie Halliway's mother. The prologue is an explanation of why she chooses to kill herself (there's a bad spirit that lives within her...complicated til right now if it gets out of control she could end up killing everybody). As for the little girl, she is one of the Gatekeepers whose island has been destroyed. She is NOT Kiah's daughter but she is actually a character called Gerra whom you'll come across later. Thats all I can say for now sorry xx"
6 Mar 2004:-) John Ross Gunningham
Ohhh.. I get it. It's about a girl, who's city burns to the ground because of something living inside another girl who has a little girl who happens to be sleeping. Then something about gatekeepers.... that parts hazy, but I'm often confused, so nothing new. On the other hand (and despite a few typos which I think have already been brought to your attention) this story is quite well balanced. good plot with nice imagery and characters. (not sure who pulled the first little girl from the fire though.... should be a ninja, they're always good 12 Anywho, keep it up and we'll be commenting later. It's inevitable. Duh Duh Duh (those are the drums by the way, the eery ones)

1 Kate 'The Pirate' Riley replies: "*waves finger* now do you see why i changed this lol. Hmm you kinda read the wrong prologue but it's my fault for not taking this down yet...I didn't want my library to shrink as my updates are so rare lol. Well good comment all the same and yeah you did get it first off well done clever person ^_^ much appreciated x"
2 Jun 200445 John 'Cymru' Bagwell
I don't know why you put the other prolouge in place of this. Or maybe I do. The updated Omega prologue gives the beginning of Kiah's story, while this seems to

:-) Kate 'The Pirate' Riley replies: "give the end."
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About 'Omega Prologue':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Kate ´The Pirate´ Riley
 • Copyright: ©Kate ´The Pirate´ Riley. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Girl, Holy, Dead, Spirit, Ellenor, Awakening
 • Categories: Angels, Religious, Spiritual, Holy, Ghosts, Ghouls, Aparitions, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters
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