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"Bread and Snakes" by H. Coyne

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A poem about a different kind of magic.
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The voodoo witch

Absorbs the static

On night-time radio.

She's young

Still like fruit flesh.

 

In the winter

She walks mutely

With the white queen.

The voodoo witch is

Afraid of many things:

A life ill lived.

Mancy of all kinds.

Water too deep.

 

She dwelled

In the sweet recess

Between blanched dawn

and serpentine nightfall

And all she had was hope magic

Which is no spell at all

 

She was part morning and flour

Part green evening light

So on the brimming hour

There he left

A plate of bread and snakes

On the rotting step.

 

And she perused

pictures of the dead

Seeing what they

meant to say

but never said.

Apologizing like an undertaker

shifting bodies to the table.

 

And whenever able

She coaxed the birds

But they never came

And never sang,

Distracted still

by the wrist of

something beautiful.

 

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25 Jan 200645 Larissa Image
First of all, welcome to Elfwood! I hope you have fun here!

Wow, what an intriguing poem! I love the language you use, how it flows. I also like how unique the voodoo witch is too, particularly the "water too deep" part which (coming from someone who doesn't like deep water especially) is rather unexpected from a witch. And 'serpentine nightfall' sounds really pretty, I don't know why, it just evokes a pretty image.

Usually I try and give some constructive criticism, but I can't think of any for this wonderful poem!
28 Jan 2006:-) Kaeli Grotz
Absolutely magical. So few poets get free verse right, but you have carried it off perfectly. It flows beautifully and the imagery is so vividly tactile and wholly original.

Wow!
1 Sep 2006:-) Beth Alice O´Leary
Wow. Kaeli's right, you pulled off free verse to perfection. This poem had me intrigued, and I love the title too, somehow.
18 Oct 200645 J.M. Avery
Ah...this is the second piece of poetry I've found today that I like...it makes me happy...it's so well written...flowing but not with constant semi-retarded rhyme schemes...it's so interesting too...makes me want to write...or read a story with more detail and in the same vein...
1 Dec 2006:-) C. L. Corbin
Wow, this was really good! I loved the whole thing.
5 Dec 2006:-) L. ´Frog´ Janas
Wow! I think we need to see more poetry out of you. That was great. Brilliant use of language. And the rhythm was great. Good job. ^__^
7 Sep 2007:-) Catherine Raven
Wow! I am always jealous of poets like you! Great work!
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About 'Bread and Snakes':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) H. Coyne
 • Copyright: ©H. Coyne. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Voodoo, Magic, Woman, Witch, Snakes, Poem, Poetry
 • Categories: Angels, Religious, Spiritual, Holy, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Romance, Emotion, Love, Wizards, Priests, Druids, Sorcerers...
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More by 'H. Coyne':
Academy Chronicles Ch.1
Academy Chronicles Ch. 2
Palace Macabre Ch.3
Palace Macabre Ch.4
Strange Law Offices
In Search of Paradise
In Search of Paradise Ch.3
Palace Macabre Ch.5

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