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Keri Ann: Keritsubo

"No Idea" by Keri Ann: Keritsubo

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The title should probably read 'Untitled' because I have no real idea what this is. I wrote it after writing 'A second Jennara's Poem' and 'To Patrons of the Red Dragon Inn'. I guess I was just kind of on a roll and I really don't know where this came from. But, hey, who asks the muse for something better when they've already given you something you can be satisfied with? I wouldn't... you might end up with something worse.
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←- New Master (Kellia) | To Patrons of the Red Dragon Inn -→

Darkness, a blanket of night as fallen

But not stars nor moon light it

For it is no the sky I behold.

Tis shadows of my sorrow

Of my confusion that's washed over

More sudden than the tide

Yet threatens to drown me just the same.

Despair seems to leave no room for hope

Only a bottomless pit of lonliness

From which my bitter cries do not rise from.

They are engulfed in this depth

These churning waves that create my prison

Of solitude where only question keep company.

Ponderings that do nothing but pass time

Seconds that no longer exist.

Mindless daydreams of why

Did my own causes throw me here?

My own actions dig my grave

And my musing etch my name upon its stone?

Or did some betrayl force me down

For fear of some retaliation?

Is my thinking as useless as my calls?

Will I never answers to these wonders?

←- New Master (Kellia) | To Patrons of the Red Dragon Inn -→

24 May 200145 Hoa <Ice-Hoa@Hom...Com>
I think it's great, but I prefer poems that rhymes. However, it's deeply emotional and I'd title it either Despair or Netherworld. I liked it especially at the beginning since I'm into astrology and it sort of mentioned the stars and the moon. To go on, I like the feel of confusion it gives and how it describes the despair whoever is in. I also like how you use your vocabulary and your poem, if I may call it that, show that your vocabulary is probably very expanded. I can't believe there aren't any comments.
8 Oct 200245 Kolton D. Berry
I agree with that! This is another great work. As I go through them, I see nothing but greatness and a very large talent I couldn't even begin to compliment. I would, though, assume you are at your peak at writing this? Or having a 'good day' of writing? Or do you not have those? Many have a "Steady Medium" so great that it crushes the talents of others' on their 'good days.' Finally, I must say merely this: I love it. Keep up the excellent work.
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'No Idea':
 • Created by: :-) Keri Ann: Keritsubo
 • Copyright: ©Keri Ann: Keritsubo. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Despair, Lonliness, Questioning
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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