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Katherine Nicole ´dys´ VanHoorn

"Rag Doll" by Katherine Nicole ´dys´ VanHoorn

SF&F Picture 11 out of 19 by Katherine Nicole ´dys´ VanHoorn
 
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This is apoem to go along with two pics in my Fantasy gallery. Read it. I like it muchly. Copyright me. There'll be an actual story soon. I MIGHT take this down if no one likes it.
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he's not really a ragdoll
they sewed the stitches in anyway
they giggled at his whimpers
chuckled at his screams
(laughed at his pain)
stretching his stomach up
feeling the needle go in
he feels every stitch
each dark thread
branding his skin
(branding his soul)
feels redness stain his face
his body
(his own blood)
his screams choke off
gasping thru the pain
can't find air
like he's
breathing thru cotton
his eyes feel like glass buttons
he can't feel his fingers
(stitches in them too)
can't feel his toes
his teeth don't feel real
there's blood on his ears
he can't seem to hear
he sees only the black
of glass button shine
so maybe he is
a ragdoll
(maybe he's not)
they sewed the stitches in
anyway

←- Pain | Self Portrait in Words: Despair -→

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8 Mar 200245 Mullins
This poem is rather grim, but that didn't stop me from liking it a whole lot, nice work on the imaginative perspective, keep up the good work.
4 Feb 2005:-) Bloodhawk
Wow. This is amazing, very effective. Yup, I'm liking this too. Go you! *sticks a gold star on your shirt!*
1 Oct 2006:-) Emma Lydia Bates
Considering this is at least four years old, I don't know if it's worth commenting - but never mind, I will do anyway!
This is very bleak and violent - but only in a good way, I really like it! Only one thing - I don't know if the final 'anyway' being on a separate line is deliberate or just due to formatting, but if it's deliberate, then I think it would probably be better if it was at the end of the line above instead. It messes up the rhythm if it's said separately, and also takes away some of the power of what is an impressively powerful poem.
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About 'Rag Doll':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Katherine Nicole ´dys´ VanHoorn
 • Copyright: ©Katherine Nicole ´dys´ VanHoorn. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Rag, Doll, Ragdoll, Sewed, Stitches, Katie, Vanhoorn, Coulrophobia, Disbelief, Dysbelief
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
 • Views: 121


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