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Iris ´Raven´ Joyner

"Winter Garden" by Iris ´Raven´ Joyner

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This is a little poem I wrote while drawing a picture for my character Talis. He's an elf that was an orphan, walked into town all covered in blood, rejected by everyone except a rich half elven woman who hands him over to a kind old lady. Later he freezes the town as well as the WHOLE 5 thousand acre countryside. The poem mainly relates to his past and the garden he owns in memory.
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Winter Garden

Twinkling and sparkling,
Actors of light play their games.
Among the winter gardens,
Ice roses sit and defy their names.
Crystalline fairies rest on icy blooms,
Birds of snow tend to their gracious plumes.

In the garden, dancing, playing,
Light flows with joy in simple ways.
An icy swan maiden sits and passes the days,
Watching the life of icy blooms, sparkling in splendor.
New and old, songs are played with the crystal chimes,
Fairies and light dancing playfully at all times.

Twinkling and sparkling,
Foxglove, lilies, gladioli, and rose,
The gardenís beauty flower true.
Dancing, playing, memories past never slows,
In the great garden, great wonderland of winter blue.
A gift of love and tears, itís all a memory of joy and pain.


 
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25 Sep 200045 Madeline Jane Quirk
I first saw the first part of this in your lothlorien gallery and thought I'd have a look at the rest =) Although it seems to lack structure over the three stanzas, just looking at the length of each line, it has wonderful descriptions and a very magickal feeling about it. I'd love to read about your character Talis *nudge*
26 Oct 200345 Bryn *Stardust Faery* Lepley
I think that this is a beautiful poem. And I have to disagree with the last comment that was made here... oh yeah... *second comment dance* the first person didn't do a dance, how sad... anyway, your poem DOES have structure.

The structure of it goes ABABCC, the only problem are the 3rd and 4th lines in the second stanza. I think that the two lines

'An icy swan maiden sits and passes the days,'
and
'Watching the life of icy blooms, sparkling in splendor.'

should switch, cause then the whole pattern is kept thoughout the whole poem. I like the actual idea of the poem, very magical. Keep writing!
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'Winter Garden':
 • Created by: :-) Iris ´Raven´ Joyner
 • Copyright: ©Iris ´Raven´ Joyner. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Fairies, Fantasy, Garden, Ice, Poems, Winter
 • Categories: Faery, Fay, Faeries
 • Views: 600

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