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Samantha I. Hosea

"Luna" by Samantha I. Hosea

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Just something I did...dunno why, just felt like writing it down.
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Luna

As she let the door fall behind her, a beam of brightness caught her eye. It was the moon, hanging over the sight of the earth so silently. A yellow, round circle, able to see everything the world serves as a scenery for, with a color that seemed so strange, that it could hardly be of this reality. She approached the window, pushed her face to it so she could be as close to the round brightness as possible, and breathed with an inexplicable kind of excitement to the window, leaving a print of her face, existing of condensed particles onto the cold window. She felt this was an intense moment and wondered if something will happen. It was the perfect scene for something to happen, though she didnít know what. Observing the absolute darkness over the city, with that one ball of light disturbing it, blazing, as if it were hostile, so present it almost scared her, she waited for something to happen. This moon had a different feeling from the one she always had when thinking of it. The moon for her always was this friendly, pale, yet bright, appearance that will always be there when you need it. But this one was different, fierce in its brightness, deliberately alone, with not a single star accompanying it. So different, something just had to happen.

But nothing did.

Well, except for this little writing.

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15 Jun 2001:-) Mikhail Shvyryev
Such beautiful imagery leaves the reader feeling cheated. *chuckle*
24 Aug 2001:-) Christopher Robin Regan
I guess something DID happen. And there was indeed a Star after all. Thanks for your comments on my story. I enjoyed your piece as well.
6 Nov 2001:-) Tristan Bronkhorst
came here first cos 'Luna' is one of my favorite names (it's from a song by Smashing Pumpkins, and a dog i know in Big city Madrid who loves to bite socks) enfin...
Whenever i see a full moon it always puts me up in some kinda mode, hopeful, maybe waiting for something to come maybe it's like what the feeling you've described...
4 Jan 200245 Rose
I still like this piece, just the way it is. It's exactly how I would have written it (haha, with that last sentence 'But nothing did'). Cause if something would have happened..then it would have never been something more exiting...then when nothing happened. (complicated, but I think you get what I mean).

groetjes,
Rose (the one and only )
22 Feb 2002:-) Oliver S. Nothers
I had to think of a few events when I read this... first, I thought of the events when I sometimes see a blood moon, or when she looks like a narrow eye-slit...
And then, it reminded me of a pretty old metal song by Axxis, "The Moon" - "Full moon, I'm watching you, your light touches my face... you seem to be so great tonight, I wonder if you'll change your light..."
1 Mar 200245 Some person
i STILL think the moon should've winked.
1 Mar 200245 Some person
The moon should've winked... a face should've appeared on it and winked at the girl. then she could rant about it to everyone else who ALL happened to NOT be looking at the moon at that particular time, therefore, missing the face thing. since no one believes her, she could then be comitted into a nice facility where she can drink tea with bunnies and stars and play golf.
30 Mar 2002:-) Cissy N. Nimbita
Hi Sman! I liked this one. While reading it, I just could see every scene in my head. In cartoon style of course 2
Funny thing: the whole scene you described, was really recognizable to me --> the moon seeming different and waiting for something to happen and stuff... Maybe we could stare at the moon together sometime 2 <p>p.s. Oh yeah, almost forgot: I'm online! JEEEEEEE! (that's 'YAY!' for you 2 </p>
8 Feb 2004:-) Alice Douglas
oddness
20 May 2009:-) Silvannen Mystic Dragonrider Gerrard
I think it’s really ironic how both your story and Christopher R. Regan’s refer to almost the same thing! Great piece of writing!
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'Luna':
 • Created by: :-) Samantha I. Hosea
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 • Keywords: Moon
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