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Meg J Milano

"Where Fools Walk Freely: chapter five" by Meg J Milano

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Ahh well. Win gets to know the crew a little more. I'm still a little fuzzy about this part.

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That evening at dinner, Win reluctantly spoke to Max again. Sitting across from someone made it particularly difficult to ignore them, when they struck up a conversation.

 

They discussed the benefits of being able to count, and to be able to read. Naturally, Max had been the son of a wealthy merchant who sent him to school, and that was where he learned

"Does your father know you"ve enlisted in the Zayn games?" Win asked him.

"No." Max replied, "I ran away." He looked uneasy, like something was confusing him. He shifted back and forth on his seat, and bit his lip.

"You ran away!" Win was shocked,"Why? Its seems as if you had a good life ahead of you"

"I did, it just seemed too good you know? And things with my father were bad. Very bad. So I ran away, and then I ran out of money."

Win was curious, why, would a wealthy merchants son run away, and then join an organization that provided fatal obstacle courses as employment?

When he asked Max this question, the man just said"So?"

"So? So, aren"t you worried about not making it?" Win asked.

"I think I can handle anything they throw at me" he replied, smirking. Max didn"t seem very interested in talking about his past, but, Win was becoming annoyed, and angry, fast.

" You don"t know what they"re going to "throw at you", Max."" he said exasperatedly. The newbies were always so confident. It"s what got them into trouble.

 "So you better wake up soon and realize that these games are deadly. And you are not going to survive just because you have a good attitude." Win was shouting now. His temper continued to rise when Max just laughed.

"You better think, when your in those games, or your gonna be sorry." Win"s voice shook with anger. Then he walked off to his cabin, and still fuming, dressed for bed. His anger had exhausted him, and he quickly fell asleep. He did not dream at all that night.

 

 

The next day Win did not speak to Max. He led his unit in duties, and went straight to bed after dinner. Unlike the last night, Win found he couldn't sleep. He waited until all the other challengers were dreaming, so he wouldn"t disturb anyone. As soon as he was sure no one else was up, he went on deck to look at the stars. Not long after, he felt some one standing next to him. It was Max.

"I thought about what you said, and you were right. Attitude wont win anything. But, I think it was wrong to assume that I was incapable of thinking." Max stated calmly.

"What! Of course you can think, You always need to think. Sadly, in your case, You just .. don"t" Win explained sadly."Not thinking is how you get killed."

 

"I don"t think so." came the response

Win could feel himself clenching fists"Okay, so tell me master of all knowledge," Sarcasm was Win"s best subject, "How is not thinking going to help you survive."

"Don"t you think that sometimes, instincts, are better resources?"

"You"re mad!, If you don"t want to be here then GO HOME. You have a fortune waiting for you."

Now it was Max"s turn to get angry. "You don"t know what I have waiting for me Okay? You don"t know anything about whats back there, so just SHUT UP."

 

With these last words he shoved Win, and his temper flared. He had been known to make stupid decisions when he was mad.

 

And Win did not like it that Max thought he could just push him around.

 

He was the face of the Zayn games, he was a god to the other challengers. How dare Max even touch him.

In retaliation Win punched him in the face. Got to love rash moves right? He thought. Win had just enough time to notice, proudly, that Max"s nose was bleeding. Then, the other man"s fist connected with his stomach.

"OOF!" Win was doubled over in pain. Max punched him again, in the jaw this time. The hit was so hard Win saw stars.

 

He kicked Max in the groin, and while the man was preoccupied, Win kicked his legs out from underneath him. Thud!Max fell to the ground with a thump, but manage to grab onto Win"s shirt and brought them both down. The two men were causing an unfathomable amount of noise, and woke up Borka.

Borka, upon seeing the fight ripped the two apart. Win was suffering from a cut above his eye, inflicted by a loose nail Max had found. He thought he also had a broken nose and at least one cracked rib. The pain was immense and Win found it hard to breath.

Win gave what he received through. Max was bleeding from his nose and lip, and right eye was beginning to swell. His wrist was twisted the wrong way around too.

Borka put the two down but stood between them. By now, the whole ship was awake, and waiting to see what he would do.

"THERE IS ABSOULUTLY NO FIGHTING ON THIS SHIP!" Borka screamed,"IF I EVER CATCH ANYONE FIGHTING AGAIN THEY GO OVERBOARD!" the first mate was mad with rage.

Win sneaked a peek at Max, he wanted to make sure that the other man was in as much pain as he was. He leaned backward a little in confusion. Max was shimmering. Sort of. A prickly sheen surrounded him, like an aura.

 

Win wasn"t sure what, but something was defiantly wrong with this guy. Before he could look again, Borka shouted "To your rooms, ALL OF YOU!", and Win had no choice but to obey.

←- Where Fools Walk Freely: chapter eight | Where Fools Walk Freely: chapter four -→

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19 Jun 2009:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed
-first comment... parade?- so, why could Win see Max shimmering if the others didn’t seem to notice at all? I know I’d notice if someone near me just started shimmering for no apparent reason. Unless, of course, only those magical beings can see magic. Then it makes perfect sense xD I feel like when the entire crew is on deck for the last bit that they should be a little more...active instead of props. When Borka was screaming about people being thrown overboard, wouldn’t some of the newer crew members be at least a little freaked out by that? I know I would be!

:-) Meg J Milano replies: "Your totally right... and on to something. haha.
Thanks for the insight. I’ve got my work cut out for me."
21 Jul 2009:-) Lena V. Bazhenova
*gasp* Max is Scream in disguise!! Am I right? Am I right?
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Story’s going good so far, but I agree with the comment above. Also, you have your/you’re confusions. That’s one of my biggest writing pet-peeves. And I’d suggest looking up proper uses of commas.

:-) Meg J Milano replies: "Thanks for the comment! I really appreciate it. You are indeed on the right track- i’ve got chapters 9-16 on the way.They should be up in a few days. I hope you’ll check them out. Your opinion means a lot to me 2
thanks again
-meg"
26 Jul 2009:-) Justine Lim
I did enjoy the "semi-truce" that Win and "Max" come to at the beginning of this chapter; the building tension between them, and the final, violent confrontation is nicely done.

Just two questions/issues:

1.) I was kind of surprised that Win was taken out so easily, given the background of his that you provided us with in previous chapters. Unless Max/Scream has certain fighting/martial arts skills that we are not privy to (or unless I forgot something from an earlier chapter)?

2.) Win seems like the kind of person who has been places and seen his share of things. I would think that the idea of the son of a wealthy merchant running away would intrigue him, but not necessarily *shock* him to the extent that it did (in the opening of this chapter)?

Great job! I really enjoyed reading.

:-) Meg J Milano replies: "Thanks for your comment. You made some excellent points, and given me a lot to consider. Haha thanks again "
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About 'Where Fools Walk Freely: chapter five':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Meg J Milano
 • Copyright: ©Meg J Milano. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Ship, Rose, WhereFoolsWalkFreely, Max, Win, Red
 • Categories: Dream Imagery, Faery, Fay, Faeries, Lycanthrope, Were-folk, etc, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Man, Men, Romance, Emotion, Love, Royalty, Kings, Princes, Princesses, etc, Celtic, Self made up Fantasy/SciFi Animals
 • Submitted: 2009-06-10 03:12:50
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