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"Daydream Mist (poem)" by James Andrew Bowers

SciFi/Fantasy text 3 out of 6 by James Andrew Bowers. ←Previous - Next→

This one has actually been published before in an amateur anthology.

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Daydream Mist


with her wings
she could carry me
to the sky
(skin like milk, they say)
but not today
not in my hand
- the west wind blows,
the reason, she knows -
ebony hair
softer than sleeping death
an unholy dinner
(a grinner, they say)
she’s gone from my way
a lost supper
- the west wind blows,
the reason, she knows -
with her wings
she could carry me
to the sky



- James Andrew Bowers   Feb 27, 1996

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Date	Name	Comment
28 Jul 2000	Crissy Gottberg	Loading... I like this one... the imagery is wonderful... reminds me of a dream i had a couple days ago....
30 Sep 2000	Tansy A. H. Pye	Loading... The imagery here is very beautiful. The cadence of the poem needs a little work. By which I mean the flow or rhythm of it. I am not one of those people who belives that poems should rhyme if you read different dark you will see that is true, but a certain tempo does make it feel more like a poem and less like a stream of conciousness. I hope I am making sense. I'm tired. These are almost lyrics I think.
10 Nov 2000	Emily Kirsch	Loading... I really like this one. Easily seen as a published work... or so I think. It reminds me of something I read very recently, maybe a lead-in to a book... sounds something of a legend. This really caught my eye - again - nice.
29 May 2002	Anastasia I-Morn-Gwathren	Loading... This is very original. Ah, the figures of speech. Have to learn sometimes how to use them...
12 Nov 2002	Jaenie Thompson <i_na	Loading... This would make a lovely song.
4 Dec 2002	Sarah Child	Loading... This one is very nicely illustrated, but, and i think someone else touched on this subject, it needs to have a better rhythmic development. I do like that way that you display imagery in your writing. I noticed it in one of your other poems. You like to make thing very dreamlike and flowing.
28 Aug 2005	Emma-Jane C. Smith	Loading... O.o Mee likes.
6 Feb 2007	Stephanie R. Schauer	Loading... Like the others, I like the imagery it has. I think it's a little softer comapred to the other pieces you have, they have a lot of emtion in them. But, as someone else said, it has a wonderful dream quality and congratulations on having it published!