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"Figures (poem)" by James Andrew Bowers

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Of my friends that have read my poetry, most tell me this is their favorite... go figure...
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I see the blood trickle down, then off her heel
she’s hurt herself again,
“It’s all becoming clear,” she says
“Like the bright sun after a heavy rain.”

I look over the flat plains to the center
on top of a hill is one large tree.
“I can climb that,” she says.
“The tree?” I ask.
She shyly smiles, “no, I meant the hill.”
smiling back, I reply, “but wouldn’t be greater to climb the tree?”
“I guess that it would,” she nods.

Then she stops and looks at the blood on her leg
“I hurt myself again,” she says
Her eyes seem to be looking at something I cannot see
“I noticed,” I said
Just then, a lock of hair that she had tucked behind her ear
fell down and brushed against her cheek.
As it fell, she tilted her head to one side
as she often did when my hand touched her face.

“You know I love the way your had caresses my face.”
As she said that,
her eyes seemed to focus back to reality
just long enough to grab mine and leave again.
“That was your hair that just touched you, not my hand.”
“I know that, but it so much reminded me of the way your hand feels.”

“Let’s go sit under the tree,” she says.
“Why not up in the branches?” I ask.
I see her looking out if the corner of her eye
and hear her try to suppress a laugh.

So, foot over foot we went,
and after a brief look at the sky,
she turns her head towards me.
“Do you know what I’ve been
thinking about?” she whispered.
I shook my head to tell her no.
“I’ve been thinking about laying down,”
and as she said that, her voice began to rise to its normal volume,
“under a stampede of pearly white horses
with hooves like biting teeth.”
“Sounds painful,” I laughed.
Glaring at me, but with a smile still on her face, she says,
“About as painful as me falling out of that tree
and hitting all the branches on the way down.”

“But still, don’t you think it would be fun to try?” I persisted.
“What, laying down beneath a stampede of pearly white horses?”
the way she asked, I could tell she knew what I had meant.
then we both glanced at the blood on her leg, and back at each other.
“And since you’re not going to ask how I hurt myself,
I’ll tell you.  I tried to climb that tree while you were napping.”



- James Andrew Bowers  Jan 11, 1996
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15 Sep 200045 Kimberley M. Nohr
*laughs!* Playful. Very playful. It's different from other poems I've read at Elfwood. I like the use of randomness and prose to make your poetry different and refreshing. Thanks!
30 Sep 2000:-) Tansy A. H. Pye
I was expecting more of a twist i think. I was expecting a hint or revelation of who these figures are. I imagined them to be death and dream perhaps or seasons incarnate. There is something otherworldly about them. Are they dead already perhaps. And the blood on her heel? I want to read more into this than perhaps is there. I could see this expanded into a short story. You could easily write a story in exactly this style. I would like to read it if you do.
26 Oct 200045 Johanna Oakes
Halloo...I absolutely LOVE this poetic mini story! It reminded me so much of my husband and myself. The ending was a pleasant and unplifting surprise! Am going to continue to read more of your work! Bye for now!
10 Nov 2000:-) Emily Kirsch
The beginning was so random, like she simply spurted out the words to whoever happened to be listening... it fit in very well with the rest. I couldn't tell you if it's my favourite, per se... but is most certainly quite good.
5 Jan 2001:-) Shelby Kristen Irons
A poem doesn't have to be the way stuffy text-books in college's say they should be. They are they way a poet writes them, rhyming or free verse. This awesome poem combines aspects of a story and a poem and puts them together. Very coy and very impish. The ending was subtle but surprising at the same time. I like it.
26 Oct 2002:-) Chyaz Samuel
Talent must run in the family!!!!!
12 Nov 200245 Jaenie Thompson
This is a sweet piece. Classic, even.
4 Dec 200245 Sarah Child
What can I add to this that hasn't already been said? So far I think that this is my favorite. It is so sweet and the ending is wonderful. Yes, this one is my favorite.
13 Dec 200245 Josan
Ending was amazing!!!!!!!
28 Aug 2005:-) Emma-Jane C. Smith
*beams a smile at you*
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'Figures (poem)':
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