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"The Frozen Ground (poem)" by James Andrew Bowers

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This is one of my more recent poems. It keeps popping back into my mind now and again for some unknown reason.

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The Frozen Ground


the November moon closes its eye
bathing your face in the darkness
the leaves that have fallen from the trees
make you cry because they remind you of me

you dig at the frozen ground with nail now broken
clawing at the earth ‘til your fingers bleed
while I, the frozen ground,
doubt you will ever break the surface

but I beg you,
walk all over me



- James Andrew Bowers

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Date	Name	Comment
5 Jan 2001	Shelby Kristen Irons	Loading... I don't think you should change the last line at all. She may not be able to break the surface of the frozen ground, but he doesn't want her to. That's why she won't be walking away. Perhaps he needs the attention she brings. He's begging her to stay and keep trying...
17 Feb 2001	Emily 'Samirine' Veit	Loading... This makes me think of smiling through tears. (don't ask why I'm not sure myself) You can really feel the emotion and ache in this poem. It seems to be saying "Don't forget me, don't forget, but don't harm yourself on the memories either."
9 May 2001	Squipmunk	Loading... i like the imagery i guess it's called maybe not. sorry i'm not a poet, just write mushy stuff. it seems to have a deeper meaning. like someone getting dumped on.
9 Oct 2001	Sarah E. Loch	Loading... I realize I'm reprising previous comments, but I really do like the metaphors you used here. And it's frightening how much this reminds me of one of my friends and his relationships. Very deeply moving.
8 Dec 2001	Josu Perea Martin	Loading... Plese answer this question. Does this poem mean to say that people may walk all over you but they'll never break you? Please E-mail me.
12 Nov 2002	Jaenie Thompson	Loading... My favorite so far. It reminds me of me. I won't ask you what this poem means, however, because I believe poetry can be whatever the reader wants it to be. Lovely work, Andy.
4 Dec 2002	Sarah Child	Loading... Huet it a terrible thing, and I bet that you were hurting when you wrote this. It is wonderfully written. I think that I like it so much because I can relate to the feelings that I felt while reading this poem. Then again it might mean something entirely different than I am taking it for, but I like it.
13 Dec 2002	Josan	Loading... Good work done! I simply love poetry.This is true that everyone has its own way of interpreting things.Wat i feel is that in the depth of "the ground" her love lies who dont want her to hurt herself just to feel closer,but at the same time he wants to listen to her footsteps from the very depth.Dont change the last line.It will change the whole meaning.Do keep writing.
28 Aug 2005	Emma-Jane C. Smith	Loading... Lovely... smiles gently
4 Dec 2005	Dan Shevock	Loading... Great poem. (I got here via your father's site, also an excellent poet, must be hereditary) I love the last line. I don't know if it was meant to be sado-masichistic, but that's the part of it I love the most. (ok, that sounded weirder after I wrote it) Very emotionally moving poem. I like your, (could I call it raw?) style in this too.
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