|11 Jul 2005|| Katherine L. Burt|
Heh... More like Siryns, hm? Dragging humans to the deep. Interesting to have the human become a mermaid- I don't think I've seen that one done before. Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner
replies: "Sirens? Well kind of though they seduce the person before they take them away right? i wasn't going for that. Thankyou for the compliments though "
|21 Jul 2005|| Matthew J. Hillary|
Kind of a cool, dark little tale. Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner
replies: "Dark, yes that was kind of what i was going for, contrasting the opening lines with how it ends and so what. Kind of like a nightmare. Thanks for reading!"
|31 Jul 2005|| Micah A English|
Actually mermaids, in folklore (not disney), were rumored to drag people under all the time. Lots of things that live in the water are supposed to drag people down for various reasons, actually. Nereids (water nymphs)from Greek mythos kidnapped cute guys, if I remember right. Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner
replies: "i am not sure if i was influenced by folklore or not. usually with such poems its the feelings that i am writing about... but maybe i was. hehe thankyou for your comment"
|17 Aug 2005|| Emma-Jane C. Smith|
I love it!!! This was excellent! I never thought of writing something like that. It certainly gets the imagination going! Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner
replies: "ah and thats what i wanted, the imagination to go go go. But i used to get the creepy crawlies when i was a kid hehe about things coming from deep down and eating me... something to do with being an australian living onb the coast and the whole shark thing i think..."
|20 Aug 2005|| Julia Anna Rill|
i'll never go bathing in the ocean... well, maybe i will...
honestly, i like the poem and the way it changes from peaceful description to horrifying action! Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner
replies: "Thankyou for your comment, i believe that was one of the things i was going for in this poem, to change it from the beauty of the sea to horror. THanks a lot for your lovely comment"
|18 Sep 2005|| Keith D. Brooks Jr.|
This was an interesting concept. Man becoming their worst nightmare has been done before but never the way you have portrayed it. I like how you took the concept of the mermaid and made it your own; I love doing that in my writing, whether it be the unicorn or the dwarf--it adds a little of the writers own soul in the writing. I really liked it! Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner
replies: "Thankyou ever so much! Its not like i set out for this to be different its just what i wrote... sometimes unplanned stuff is the best. I also enjoy putting a new spin on a certain creature that has been portrayed one way for a long time... it makes it more fun. Sorry i took so long to reply to this and thanks for commenting!"
|10 Dec 2005|| Dan Shevock|
Wow, great idea. I loved it. Excellent writing. Does he now have to kill someone to let them become a merrow? Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner
replies: "Um who kill what to become a merrow? whats a merrow? thanks for the compliment all the same however!"
|14 Dec 2005|| Clarence Likness|
|25 Jul 2006|| Laura Lee-Anna Looney|
Wow this is hauntingly beautiful. I love how you protray the beautiful mermaid that every one loves as an evil creature from the deep. Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner
replies: "*laughs madly* that was the general idea... to portray the mermaid as something different from the norm... something scary not beautiful and... well disney."
|1 Jul 2007|| Dragonsluver|
*laughs* This is so twisted! I LOVE it! *likes twisted things* Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner
replies: "Heh! Thanks very much... twisted... i liked that description of it! "