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Jacqueline ´Jac´ Tanner

"The Last Guardian Angel" by Jacqueline ´Jac´ Tanner

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This story started off with the inspiration of words that 'Everybody needs a Guardian' I was in the car on the way to the city and i kept repeating that first line over and over because i knew that this story could be a good one to write. This is a story set in a time like now but with Guardian Angels. Unfortunately this is only the first part, i only wanted one story but i like how this ended so i thought i would leave it there. Enjoy! Edit 5/12 Just made it easier to read... i didnt check for mistakes though!
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The Last Guardian Angel

The last guardian angel was sent down to earth to be protected. The attack had come without any warning. The angels know nothing about war and soon were being destroyed. Guardian angels cannot be truly killed, as they are already dead so to speak. But they can be destroyed. Sometimes they can come back. Sometimes they need to be willed back into existence. That is why they sent her to earth. She was one they knew they could trust, and one they all loved. She also was just, in human terms, a child. Protecting her was protecting the entire guardian angel communion.

They didn't know where they were sending her on earth in the haste of the moment but the only safe place for her was earth. The angels didn't think that the guardian angel communion could be penetrated by other species. The Devilish Ones had come with no warning, and the guardian angels had no idea that they could have gotten in. Soon the guardian angel communion was ruined… all that remained was one 'child' who was now on earth…

She skipped happily along the very busy Lygon Street in Melbourne. Lygon Street was a bustling, busy street, with people wanting food, going shopping and going about their day. This was the first time ever Mwella had been in Australia and it was all just a little exciting. She didn't really know how she got here. Before skipping she couldn't really remember much. Frowning in concentration her silver eyes squinted as she tried to remember where she was before. She remembered pain, she remembered suffering and betrayal, and she also remembered she had been sent away to be protected. But sent away from what? Shrugging her shoulders she continued skipping, managing to dodge a hurrying businessman, a fat looking shopper eating food and a girl with her arms full of bags. Her blonde hair flowed out behind her as Mwella skipped, and her bright silver eyes shined with the happiness of being free. This thought startled her… she was free? But what was she free from. She came to a stop then and almost sat down in the middle of the path wondering how she could be free now… what was she before? She was obligated to help, but who and what? She was something important; she had to do something important but what? As she stood there thinking someone behind her pushed her over and she felt tears well up. It was then that she remembered Gwain.

Gwain was an elderly looking man but he had so much to give. He was always helping others and looking after Mwella. Gwain had sat her down and taught her a lot about… What had he taught her? Shaking her head with jumbled thoughts she couldn't remember. But she remembered Gwain's gentle kindness as he would speak to her about how to care for others. How to make sure that the human's on earth had someone they could talk to and someone that they knew they could rely on. But some human had just knocked her down, that wasn't nice. Again she was shocked by her thoughts but all this thinking of Gwain and she could practically see him in front of her. In fact, HE was in front of her. A businessman standing right there and smiling at her.

"Hello Mwella, thankyou for remembering me. You have begun your task already and you are doing fantastically" He smiled his kind smile at her and took her hand. "I think it is time to go home don't you?"

Mwella looked at Gwain uncertainly. How had he appeared out of nowhere? It was then that she remembered her task. She was to will the guardian angel communion back into existence… but that would make her… a… a… Her eyes widened as memories flooded back into her head and her jumbled thoughts again became coherent. She was the last guardian angel, saved by the others, like Gwain, to help save them all. She stared up at Gwain and smiled a huge smile with her soft red lips.

"Yes Gwain, I am ready to go home. Are the others going to be there too?" She asked in her small shy voice that was like the sound of music playing, it was a soothing voice and was a reason the others loved her so much.

"Not quite yet child. You cannot go home until you have finished your task. But I can, I can start fixing what was destroyed. All you have to do is remember each one of us." Gwain looked around and clicked his fingers. Mwella also looked around and realised that Gwain had made time stop so they could talk. She wondered if she could do the same thing. Seeing Gwain smile at her she guessed that she could but didn't really want to try until he had gone back home. Gwain knelt down so they were eye level and smiled at her.

"I think you need to go somewhere a little more quiet to regain your memory" Again he clicked his fingers and they were in the Botanical Gardens. Beautiful plants surrounded them and there wasn't another soul in sight. She was sitting on a nice chair that was made completely out of wood. She almost felt at home here. Gwain smiled at her. "That is because home looks a lot like this my dear child. Now I must be off… I need to figure out how the Devilish Ones got in before you remember too many of the others. You will know when you can return, and you will know how. For now I say goodbye and thankyou for letting me come back."

"I am glad I remembered you first Gwain, you are like a father to me and I love you" with those words Gwain smiled and disappeared back home. Mwella smiled and then sighed looking off at the plants and resting her light little head on a arm and began to remember.

 

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21 Jun 200545 Gwendolen 'Camel' van der Linde
Help, I just read what you wrote as a prologue to the story. No, don't keep it there! I mean, it works and it's a very nice sentence (the beginning to remember), but I just wanna get more on Mwella! *pulls puppy-dogs-eyes* Oh well...
Gwen

:-) Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner replies: "No no you minterpretted. I wanted to write the story all in one hit... i never meant to make it so long.. but that last line of the story i really liked and i thought if i went on it would ruin that line. So i decided to write a second part. Unfortunately the first part of the second part (if that makes any sense) is going to have nothing to do with Mwella. but i will come back to her in the second chapter... just not right away. Mwella is supposed to come off innocent and loving and i am glad you got the picture!"
21 Jun 200545 Gwendolen 'Camel' van der Linde
Uuuuuh, sorry, I took so long, really, really sorry! I honestly had all these things to do (with the writing weekend and so on). I read your stories, but didn't find time to comment. Anyway *phews and takes a big breath* I'll do that now...
So, I really like the idea of this story, it's very original, but at the same time reminds me of something 1 I know Gwain is the name of one of the knights of the round table and Mwella also sounds very welsh. Is that on purpose? Mwella is a wonderful name, whatever the fact!
You bring round her emotions very well. How she starts out skipping happily and with the time going by turns sad and thoughtful. I love all the questions she asks herself, they characterize her quite well, how she's torn between her mission/origin and her own personality of being more light-hearted.
The dialogue between Gwain and Mwella is good, too, esspecially the last sentences of Gwain portrait his friendshippy love towards her very well and how he cares about her.
What I noticed (for critizm, if you want any 1) was that the prologue had a few mistakes and all in all didn't wasn't compiled perfectly. I really loved the personal story about Mwella (now I would have understood you come from Australia 1), but maybe the prologue could be a bit improved - just more explained, I think, because it's all said a bit quickly, and one doesn't get it all. But that's all, hope you don't mind critizm.
I'm looking forward to more of last guardian angel and hope all goes well with Mwella. >_<

1 Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner replies: "Thats ok sweetie, i know you have been busy so thats ok.Gwain must have come outta my memory, because i didn't think of Welsh history, or the round table when i came up with this story. Mwella is a made up name (though it might be out there somewhere) basically all the Angel's names are going to be special... beautiful in some way. I understand how our memory works and things can trigger memories... thats how i had it happen with her. I quite like that part of the story how she was at first skipping and then she would remmeber, and try to skip and remember and skip until she couldn't skip anymore.The way i described the destruction of the Guardian Angel Communion was done partly unpurpose. i didn't want the reader to not understand though. So i might rephrase it when i com to the next part. Thanks for your comment its really helpful and i am glad you enjoyed the story."
31 Aug 2005:-) Matthew J. Hillary
Honestly, this could make for a really good story of some sort. Maybe not let the begining evolve so fast, like she's being raised by a normal family and like at 12 or something the devilish ones start coming after her and thats when she starts to really remember and call back the guardian angels.

Meh, just saying 12

2 Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner replies: "thanksfor the comment on this. I feel sad that this hasnt gotten that much attention as i really like this story and i have been planning (though written nothoing yet) the second part in my head for ages. so this is what will be next up in my new update it hinks."
5 Oct 2005:-) Andrijana Ignjatovic
This was a very original idea. I agree with previous commentens, it does remind me of the Welsh language, and the Arthur-myth, only the names though. The story is lovely, and you have got to love sweet Mwella. Her thought on herself and her mission really describe her as a person. She´s a real cutiepie!

1 Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner replies: "Sorry it took me so long to get back to you. But thankyou for the lovely comment i really appreciate it. I love Mwella... she is this ray of light in this story and the second one. The second one is soon to be uploaded too so please check back soon and tlel me what you think of the conclusion!"
16 Oct 2005:-) Sarah J Kinder
Hmm interesting concept, guess I always thought of guardian angels as being very powerful beings. Anyway nicely written. One typo: "human's on" you mean humans. Also I think the last line of dialogue was a little complex for what seemed like such a small child, it seemed a bit out of place.

-S

2 Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner replies: "Again sorry this took so long to be replied too.. I very much appreciate your comments and as i said before, the conclusion is soon to be uploaded. The thing about Mwella is she is hardly a child *grins* shes a very wise angel, but as shes on earth her memories are clouded and strange. You'll see in the second part. Thanks again for the comment and i will fix that typo soon"
14 Dec 200545 Clarence Likness
lol..wow
My stories (Divine right) will touch on this topic, but not quite in the same way. Thats always been the plan any how... i love the idea of remembering the angles brings them back to life... thats soooo cool.

13 Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner replies: "Good luck with that. I found it a little harder to write about guardian angel's than i thought buut it is so much fun and im sure you will have fun with angel's.That idea just came with the flow of the story. The second part is up and i would love to know what you thought of it!"
17 Dec 2005:-) Stephen D. Westbroek
As has already been stated, very original, I like it. I did notice a few things I'd like to point out though.

"She almost felt at home here. Gwain smiled at her. 'That is because home looks a lot like this my dear child...'" Did he read her mind or was she supposed to say it? It just wasn't clear.

This one is the very last sentence. "Mwella smiled and then sighed looking off at the plants and resting her light little head on a arm and began to remember." That should be she rested her head on 'an arm.'

Overall, very nice story. *Takes off to read the conclusion*

:-) Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner replies: "He read her mind! In my mind her thoughts are very loud becaues she cannot remember how to block them to other people. Yes an arm... thanks for that i need to change that because that last line is really important. I am glad you enjoyed it though 2"
31 Jan 2006:-) Karolien V Burms
this is a very nice story. I never occurred to me that guardian angels could be destroyed. I really like the way you have written it from happy to sad and thoughtful. very well done!

13 Jacqueline 'Jac' Tanner replies: "Thanks"
12 Oct 2007:-) Katherine Bates
This is lovely. It's a really original idea, that an angel could be destroyed and brought back through the will of another. With the introduction and then the view point of the 'child' it makes a really nice contrast. Keep it up.
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About 'The Last Guardian Angel':
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 • Created by: :-) Jacqueline ´Jac´ Tanner
 • Copyright: ©Jacqueline ´Jac´ Tanner. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Angels, Angel, Guardian, Mystic, Heaven
 • Categories: Angels, Religious, Spiritual, Holy
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