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"Legend of the Whisper Wood, Ch. 1.1" by Jon Midget

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The Whisper Wood is my dream world: the people fly, dragons rule the mountains, music and dance are wild and intoxicating, and heroes arise because of the quality of their character — not because of their swordsmanship or magic skills. Chapter 1 of this legend introduces us to the two protagonists: a farmer named Paladin and a princess named Fauna. Oh my! That was painful to write. Suddenly everything about the story seemed like a cliche. Hopefully you'll read on and I've written well enough to persuade you otherwise.


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Paladin looked out the window, even though he knew he would see nothing but the giant branches twisting up and up toward the giant canopy of the Whisper Wood. Shadows, from the leaves far above, shifted and swayed across the bark. Insects chirped, birds called, and somewhere in the distance a squirrel was cracking nuts.

She might as well not even be here, Paladin thought.

But, of course, she was. Even if she hadn't stayed in his cottage for more than a few hours. Even if she was far, far below, sitting or dancing or wandering along the forest bed.

Fauna had arrived two days earlier. As was always the case, she had not let him know she was coming, but Paladin had somehow known. He had made tea and set out an extra cup for her. It was still warm when she had burst through his door.

Her unannounced visits had not really shocked him in years. They just made him unable to concentrate on the task at hand, which right now was stirring the herbs and roots and leaves boiling in the kettle over the fire.

But no matter how strongly he intuited her visits, no matter how well he planned their upcoming conversations, they never knew what to say to each other. What does a farmer say to a princess? Paladin had often chided himself. And then, when the long stretches of anxious silence became unbearable, she would be gone. Down to the forest bed, thousands of feet below. And there she would stay until she was ready to come back to the cottage and the highest branches of the giant mallorn trees.

And after a few more words the silence would return, and they would spend another day trying to fight off the awkward quiet with mundane words — both of them afraid to say anything that really mattered — until she would say goodbye, stand at the edge of the branch outside the cottage, spread her beautiful wings, and launch herself into the air. To the sky above the giant leaves a hundred feet overhead, where the winds would carry her back to her city and her people and her palace and her father's empty throne.

The boiling mixture splattered on the wall. A small bit of root slid down the kettles edge into the fire and popped. Paladin hadn't been stirring consistently.

He tipped pot away from the fire and squinted into the steam and smoke. It was done. Which meant there was no more putting it off — the merdona vines had to be salved before the mixture fermented.

It doesn't even matter that she isn't here, Paladin thought. Even if this had been the one visit that she wanted to really talk, he couldn't. If he didn't spend the day salving the vines he could lose the entire crop to the late-summer crickets.

He pulled the kettle off the fire and placed it on a wet cloth outside the cottage. Inside, he put out the fire and wiped the splatters off the walls. What was she doing right now? The sun had risen about two hours earlier, and Paladin had always heard that the dryads disappeared with the sunrise.

So Fauna was probably alone. Probably sleeping. Maybe she hadn't come to run away from her duties at the palace. Maybe she hadn't come to lose herself in the wild, late-night, frenzied dances of the dryads. Maybe she had simply come for a tuft of grass on the forest bed and the chance to sleep, alone with only the still air for a blanket

Paladin had watched her sleep once before. She had arrived early in the evening, her eyes red and glazed over. She had been unable to walk without bracing herself against the door frame. It had been the only time Paladin had ever seen her slouch — her movement was usually so precise, so strong, and so crisp. And her eyes — her icy green eyes were usually so intense and fierce.

But on that evening, nearly two years earlier, she couldn't even stand without help. Paladin didn't try to speak. He took her by the shoulder and led her to his bed. She had been asleep even before he had laid her down.

Her eyes and cheeks had been wet, and he had reached to her face to dry them off. But, just inches away from her, his hand had stopped. He had held it there, had felt her deep, even breaths push against his skin. And then he had pulled away. At the bedroom door, he had paused, but it had only been a pause. He had never turned back.

And so, as he pulled the pot of salve toward the merdona vines, his memories told their stories again and again. The chore was an ordeal &mdash so much so that nobody within a day's flight grew the crop. But the fruit was a delicacy, and it fetched a good price. There were few delicacies in any village along the foothills of the great northern mountains. Not since the dragon attack six years earlier. So many had fled to the towns further into the heart of the Wood, and those who remained had little time for anything besides necessities.

But Paladin always found time — time for the merdona crop, time for day-long flights to the magnificent gorges and waterfalls in the nearby mountains, time for long, quiet nights composing poetry and music. And time for entertaining a princess who dropped by every six months or so, unannounced and without explanation.

Time, he supposed, comes from living alone. From having nobody else depending on you.

He reached the merdona crop, a mass of yellow-green vines clinging and twisting around one of the merdona branch offshoots. Holding the pot of salve with one hand, he started applying the salve. He wondered if Fauna would have kept coming if his parents and sisters were still alive. As always, he quickly shook the thought off. It made him uncomfortable.

Instead, he wondered what color the meadow flowers at Fauna's feet were. Like nearly all the People of the Wood, Paladin had spent his entire life either in the giant branches thousands of feet above the ground or flying above the trees. He had never been to the forest bed. The risk of falling in love with the dryads' realm was too great. Were there flowers there as beautiful as the violets that grew in the bark of the younger mallorn branches? He would have to ask Fauna when she came back up.

The sun was high overhead, and sweat beaded at the roots of his brown head-feathers. Nearly half the vines had been taken care of, and despite the ordeal — he had to crawl and climb along the vines in order to ensure all the nodes were salved — the morning had passed quickly. He rubbed his arms, now covered with almost as many scratches as brown, downy feathers. He let his wings stretch out for a few moments. It was never comfortable keeping them so tightly pressed against his back so he could climb easier.

"You look worn out."

Fauna stood next to the front door of Paladin's cottage, leaning on a twisting branch that rose from the base to far above the roof. Paladin had grown used to her appearance, but it was still always slightly jolting to see her — light skin, white feathers with streaks of green, green eyes. Her dress &mdash short, light brown, and sleeveless — rustled with the breeze, and her wings drifted slowly back and forth Like sunlight passing through a fern, he thought.

"How long have you been standing there?" Paladin asked.

Long enough to have seen why you look worn out," she said. "Do all farmers have to do that? Climb up and down the branches, letting the bark beat your body up?"

"Only those that grow certain crops."

"And why would anyone want to grow those crops?"

"Because merdona fruit tastes so good that people are willing to pay me enough to make the ordeal worth it. There's enough money growing right there," Paladin said, pointing to the vines, "to pay for my trip to the Harvest Festival in Lamorra. Nobody offers to me the chance to stay at an inn for free. And nobody gives me free meals every day."

Fauna ignored the taunt. She walked toward Paladin, hesitating between each step and looking straight into his eyes. A few birds flew overhead, landing near a cluster of nests they had built on the roof of Paladin's cottage. She reached out and held one of Paladin's arms, hands grazing through the brown feathers and over the scrapes.

"You should probably have these dressed," she said. "Or at least wash the blood off."

"And ... do you know how?"

"Well, no," Fauna admitted, shifting her eyes away and laughing softly. "We have servants to take care of that sort of thing." She let go of his arm and took a step back.

"Who knew there were such different worlds in one small forest," he said, stepping past her, brushing against her wings, and walked back toward his cottage.

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29 Mar 2007:-) Kelli Armstrong
Oh I didn't mean to just point out flaws!! *panics* I love the story! It's just that personally I get frustrated when people say "I love your story" when I want more advice. You know? I don't tend to believe that "it was great!" unless there is a bit of: "but you could fix this!" If I get a "it's great" then I think they didn't really read it! heh... Hope I didn't offend you!

:-) Jon Midget replies: "Yikes! I guess I sounded rather gloomy in my response earlier. I'm definitely not offended by the suggestions you made. That's one of the points to Elfwood. And you made it very clear that you liked it—like I said, to hear that you want to read more is high praise and very gratifying."
10 Apr 2007:-) Carly ´Lhena´ Silverton
Oops, my other comment on the second part of this chapter was a mistake, i didn;t realize it was the second part until i had posted the comment, sorry.Your mistake is completely understandable. Most people aren't as ridiculously obsessive about readability and formatting as I am, so I doubt you ever expected someone to separate a chapter into different parts in order to reduce scrolling. Oh, man, just typing that made me feel a bit ludicrous. Oh well.Anyway from what i have read, im still alittle confused, but things seem better. I really think this story idea has potential, yet it seems to be moving a bit slow. Nonne the less i dont write very much for one chapter and so i make it go much afartther and faster, so don't pay attention to me. This is a fine story, keep writing!You have joined the ranks of readers who get mildly aggravated by my tendency to move along sllooowwwwlllllyyyyyy. It's a constant battle of mine: keep a pace that satisfies both myself and other readers.I'm glad you liked the story, even despite the pace. And you can be rest assured that I, like most Elfwood writer's I expect, will certainly keep on writing.
15 Apr 2007:-) Patricia M. D´Angelo
I'm never sure if my comments prove very helpful so I always add that the comments are personal preference only.Rest assured, comments are always enjoyed. And they are always helpful. What could be better than finding out how readers react to my story? I can't think of many things more helpful. The word salve and dealing with plants seems so foreign that it kind of threw me out of the story. It took a read over for me to go oh, he's an organic farmer. I know you want to keep that strange and foreign feel to the story, to let us know it's a place we've never been before, but it might not hurt to refer to his concoction as repellant, insecticide, (some old family recipe handed down for generations), and it might be clearer by not just using the word salve.Hmmm... I see your point. When you add the fact that "merdona" is a schmeerp of the Whisper Wood, salve is confusing. Unfortunately, "repellant" and "insecticide" somehow strike me as disgusting words and totally out of place, so I'm going to have to put some major thinking into how to solve the problem. I appreciate you pointing it out, though, because nothing is worse than something like this getting in the way of your ability to simply follow the story.Example:

the merdona vines had to be coated with salve before the mixture fermented.

If he didn't spend the day painting a thick layer of his homemade repellant over the vines he could lose the entire crop to the late-summer crickets.

You do indeed have a wonderful story going here, one I'll be back to read more on. Fantastic job of letting their words or thoughts give us a feel for their personalities. Thank you. I am always apprehensive about how well my characters come across, because rely almost exclusively on literal thoughts, conversation, and actions to build character. I don't mosey into their heads and summarize their feelings or attributes very much.Time, he supposed, comes from living alone. From having nobody else depending on you.

"Well, no," Fauna admitted, shifting her eyes away and laughing softly. "We have servants to take care of that sort of thing."

Very well written.Again, thank you for your kind words and for showing me the issues with salve. All is appreciated.
27 Apr 200745 L. Shanra Kuepers
*smiles* I do like this immensely, although my immediate question would be "what's a princess doing with a farmer?" It's a two-edged sword that. On the one hand it's a hook and on the other it's not something I found myself accepting. The same goes for the names, but that's due to my expectations as a reader. They don't (seem to) fit with the language you've created for this world and, because I'd expected them to, they irked me. Uhm, I'm not explaining that right, am I? Warn me if not and I'll try and elaborate. ^-^ Explanation Alert!!! I've always thought it to be a big sign of problems if stuff needs extra explanation to make sense, so this may mean heavy revision time: The names are important to me. In my little Whisper Wood, Paladins, special knights called by the gods rather than trained by a staff sergeant, will be named after this Paladin. He's the first (I say this very hesitantly, because don't expect him to challenge demons in single combat at any point in this story. His role is VERY different). But that's really just information for me—something that helps me understand him and this little Fairy Tale a little bit better. I really don't want to go into this explanation in a prologue or something like that. Egads. Disgusting prospect. But maybe I need to do something if their names feel so wrong.As for the fact that she's a Princess, yet hangs out with him (kind of) every now and then at his godforsake little farm off in the boonies by the mountains ... I'm not so worried about that feeling odd. The next chapter will really get into that (I'm banking on readers letting the oddity slide at least till then). However, if after reading the second chapter, it's still too unlikely, then I'll have some work to do.Beyond that, I really, really enjoyed this. I love how you don't outright state how people feel, but let the story convey it. (I'm still learning to do that, but you make it seem so easy. ^-^)Very kind of you to say so. Honestly, it's something my favorite authors do very well, and I've literally been working on that quality in my fiction for years. That I'm getting some success in that area is gratifying. Now if I could just edit well and move in and out of past and perfect past tenses smoothly; if I could transition between individual scenes easily and without so much clunk, I'd be rather happy with myself. Alas, I don't. I need more years. I loved the ideas in this, living in treetops, the dryads below, the mention (and presence) of background story, both historical and 'there is a world outside this small neck of the woods'. I loved the execution. You have a gorgeous balance between your words, you know that? I love reading your descriptions. They're so delicate and well-worded.

Well-done! I look forward to reading more!Thank you very much for the compliments. Honestly, I obsess about specific word choice far, far too much—and I worry about the feeling generated by imagery and rhythm ad naseum. But the reality is that sometimes such obsession is worth it. I'm very excited to see that, despite the story's flaws, plethora of grammatical errors, and such, at least the feeling I wanted to come out was successful. Thanks.
27 Apr 200745 L. Shanra Kuepers
Shadows, from the leaves far above, This is kind of exciting, because this is one oddity that I actually do have a deliberate reason for. I phrased it this way to kind of get into how the characters think about their own world. The shadows, constantly dancing on the branches, are what they really notice, but the narrator puts in the "from the leaves far above" to help us poor humans understand their world. It's kind of like noticing flowers in a garden but not the dirt. Imagine, "the flowers, growing in dirt, were nifty." You may say, "Of course their in dirt!," but the reality is that we don't notice it. It is secondary to the flowers, kind of like the leaves above are secondary to the shadows. I hope that makes sense ... *wonders if it makes sense to myself*but Paladin had somehow known. Sometimes I mess with grammar on purpose, sometimes I use commas to show voice inflection. Sadly, this is not one of those cases; this is absolute, sheer grammar heresy. Thanks for pointing it out. It needs fixing.He tipped pot away What was she doing right now? You are absolutely right it's weird. I'd add some other adjectives though: clunky and gloppish. Your suggestion to make it simply present active makes perfect sense.That feels like it should be in the narrative instead. 'Would' would be a different matter (and imply that she's dead at that). I've noticed that you do it more often, so it could be just how Paladin thinks, in which case you'll want to ignore me, but I thought I'd mention it in case it isn't. alone with only the still air for a blanket[.] There were few delicacies in any village along the foothills of the great northern mountains. Could I pressure you into giving it some more thought, because "any," at least to my ear, gives it the implication I want. But, I could easily be wrong, and I'd like to know why it feels awkward to you.he started applying the salve Thank goodness you were okay with it. The last thing in the world this story needs is a bunch of people talking about Cricket-be-Gone. I've actually given this a lot of thought since it was pointed out that it felt odd, and I couldn't think of anything that would make sense except "salve." You've given me hope!so tightly pressed against his back so he could climb easier. Yikes, all those "so" 's so make me sound so like a Valley Girl. What an embarassing little phrase for me to write
6 May 200745 L. Shanra Kuepers
You know, I'm always a little hesitant to reply to comments because I can never be sure it's entirely clear which ones I'm replying to, especially if it turns out to be long. (You'd think I'd have the wisdom to copy/paste bits, really. Or at least the activity level. ^-~) You can pressure me, but that doesn't mean it'll help. I think if I explain it, it'll mean exactly what you want it to me. But we'll see. The way the sentence stands right now, it implies to me that there are no delicacies in existence. Not because they can't be made, but because their cuisine doesn't have them. Mmmhhmmm... I hope that does clear it up, or that that was what you intended to say. Not sure I can explain any clearer. It could just be a dialectal difference.*perks up* Ooooh. ^-^ I really like that idea of the names, to be honest. It seems to be just me who found them a little awkward at first, so I wouldn't worry too much about it. If worst comes to worst, you can always say they're perfectly plausible names in the language you created. 'Paladin' would fit perfectly into the Japanese system, for example (yes, okay, ignore the fact that 'r' and 'l' are allophones), but that doesn't mean that it does. Much like how 'sprel' follows all the English rules of sound combinations. Doesn't mean it exists. I had a few better examples of unrelated languages coming up with the same sounds for different things. There's Japanese 'Nao' (it's definitely a name, but don't pin me on meaning. My Japanese was never very good and getting rustier every day.) and my dialect's 'nao' (that's a preposition with about half a dozen meanings depending on the context). Germanic and Japanese are unrelated languages, but the same string of sounds exists. ^-^ There's no reason why Paladin and Fauna wouldn't be plausible names. (It does require a bit of thought on the phonetics of the languages, I admit.)*burble* Sorry. I rather like conlangs. *Shakes head at self sheepishly* You put MUCH more thought into phonetics of different languages than I usually do. I suppose this has to do with the up-sides and down-sides of being an American writer. On one hand, I can travel 1,500 miles in any direction and exclusively encounter people that share the same native language; I can write a story in my native language and have half-a-billion people as my audience. On the other hand, I know so little about other languages (I can speak a bit of Spanglish2 ), and there's nothing really that makes learning other languages necessary to ordinary life. Which is a big liability when I write fantasy about other cultures and *gasp* other languages. In that regard, you Europeans seem very much in the advantage.*grins* Personally, I think you do a very good job at all the things you say you have to work on. (You're definitely one of the best writers I've encountered on Elfwood.) But I'll try and keep those points in mind for you when I read more. ^-^ (And if you call THIS a plethora of grammatical errors, I'm amazed you haven't yet fainted over mine. ^-~)You are too kind to me. The truth is, I haven't noticed many grammatical errors in your stuff yet for the same reason I don't catch them in my own stories—I just read blissfully on without mentally registering grammar problems. Which is why I would never, NEVER rely on myself to do copy editing. That would be a disaster.Anyway, hope that helps! ^-^It absolutely helps. Thanks.
23 May 200745 Christopher Heffernan
This was a nice little read.Very kind of you to say so. I did however, find the name Paladin a bit odd, though. Perhaps it's because it instantly brings to mind Dungeons and Dragons. I like D&D as much as anyone, but the name didn't seem to quite fit the story.Yes, Paladin is doomed to be one of those names that clanks off the ears funny when you first encounter it. I don't know what to do about that, since that's his name. I didn't make it up, and he'd be rather annoyed if I changed it on him ^_^.But I hope you don't get too caught up in a possible D&D reference. The title Paladin shows up in lots of fantasy. Of course, Paladins are usually some kind of holy knight, or wizard/knight or something like that, which is not what this Paladin is like at all, and doesn't fit this story very much either. o_O. I'm trusting that the name will fit as the story ensues (since this is only like the equivalent of the first five pages of a book).I certainly liked what I've seen of the world, though. Has a feeling of depth to it, which is very nice.Thank you for the compliment, and for reading. I've taken a quick gander at your page, noticed a stark lack of comments, and I'll be by soon to return the kindness you showed me in reading. I'm glad the world is interesting to you. It's a rather important place to me, and I always hope that feeling gets translated through the story.
30 Jun 2007:-) B. Layne Weaver
hello! you've left so many nice comments on my page, so it's only right that i come over and visit your shelf now that i'm out of uni, rested up a bit, and in a reading mood ^_^ I'm excited to see you here, and I look forward to all you have to say. Hopefully it's good. ^_^mm, right away i like the mood of the setting you create here.you have a wonderful and natural-feeling way with your narrative. you make it seem so easy! long sentences interwoven with shorter ones; subject-verb clauses as well as more complicated creations. it flows wonderfully--i'm so jealous! 1 Very, very kind words for you to say. You're talking about the things I have worked hard at ad naseum. The rhythms created by the different sentence lengths, clause construction, syntaxes, and word choice. It's honestly taken me years to be able to write like this.It all comes from a critique a short story of mine received many years ago from a creative writing professor. He said that while my story was good, he was surprised at how sterile the writing style felt. He told me that he had expected me to write with much more attention to the sounds and music of language (I studied music composition, and my prof. knew this). He gave me some examples, and I realized how right he was: my style was sterile and lifeless. I knew right away that I wanted that to change, so I've spent a long time working on being able to do so."The chore was an ordeal — so much so that nobody within a day's flight grew the crop." is the "—" a weird formatting glitch? i assume you wanted an emdash there ^_^ Yes, that's an HTML formatting glitch. If you add a semicolon on the end of the "—" you get the HTML for the emdash. I accidentally left off the semicolon in several parts of this chapter."Holding the pot of salve with one hand, he started applying the salve." -- i'd try to avoid the repetition of "salve" Thanks for pointing out."Her dress — short, light brown, and sleeveless -- rustled with the breeze..." another one of those emdash glitches 2 This was indeed a wonderful read, and I'm looking forward to diving into the rest of your shelf!Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed. It's a story that I care rather deeply about. Thanks for reading.Okay, that's really annoying. After I replied to this comment, the comment system automatically created the emdashes even with the semicolons left off the formatting, but nothing automatically fixed the problem in the story itself. Completely Bogus! And I can 't fix the problem without doing a ticket *growls at Elfwood*
11 Jul 2007:-) Becca Lusher
Hello! Sorry, it's taken me a while to get back to returning comments, but I am here now.

No worries. I'm excited to see you here, though.Okay, so, this is interesting. Not a lot happens, true, but it has a nice, smooth feel to it. A little bit dreamy, a little bit hazy, as if we're only seeing a very small bit of the picture (which, naturally, we are).

Actually, you made me rather happy to hear that the place seemed dreamy—because to me it is kind of a dream-world.You drop in a few hints about this world and culture, which are always nice to see. Obviously, I want to know more. Not just about how this relationship between the two of them has come about, but also about what they look like, and so many more questions about their culture and society.

Actually, I think I should warn you to not expect too much more than a few hints about ... well, anything. I tend to be superficial (by that I mean focusing on surface things—i.e. actions, objects, facial expressions, etc. I don't narrate my characters' thoughts and feelings very much—nor do I have many explanations about culture, religion, etc.), and a detail will get put into the story only when a character notices it. Ch. 2 of this story does this to the absolute extreme.Paladin develops quite nicely here, seeing the practical advantages to his way of life, even if it isn't the most popular way to make a living. Shame on you for the 'I once had a family, but they're now gone' moment. Especially followed by the 'I don't want to think about it' thought ^__^ *Bows head in shame* I know it's not so clear in this draft, but the hope is that Paladin's reason for not wanting to think about it is unique enough that we can stand reading the moment: he believes that Fauna wouldn't visit if his family was still alive, and he's uncomfortably uncertain about whether he would rather have his family still alive or have his relationship with Fauna (since he believe's that they're mutually exclusive). That's what he actually doesn't want to think about—not the simple fact that his family is all dead.It'll be interesting to see what happened to them. Other than that, he had piqued my interest, so I want to know much more about him and where you're taking this.

As for Fauna, I reserve judgement until I see more of her. At the moment I feel nothing either way. I'm hoping you'll soon be changing that.

And on that note, I'm reading on. (Sorry, I'm a bad commenter today.)This is definitely Paladin's chapter. Though it's possible he comes across so strongly that none of Fauna's personality stand out. That's a question I'm grappling with right now as I'm working through revisions.Thanks for stopping by, and for the comments (they were hardly useless—what a silly thing to suggest ^_^)
8 Feb 2009:-) Nicoline Badenhorst
I found the way Fauna and Paladin talked to each other a bit incongruent with their current relationship; it’s a rather messed up relationship at that, seeing as they don’t know what to say to each other or how to treat each other. What I actually mean to say is that I did get a whiff of intimacy through how they talked with each other, but I was a bit surprised that Paladin would (even mildly) criticise her for not knowing "about the real world", because the way he thought about her said to me that he’s afraid of making a move that could drive her away. Also, she seemes to have visited quite often- wouldn’t she have noticed/known before?
I’d like to know some more about the physical givens (e.g. maps etc.)- you say Fauna just turns up whenever she wants? Where is her city then? How far is "a day’s flight"? And why can she visit the Dryad’s realm and return, but nobody else does for fear of falling in love with it? What’s so special about it? You did say that Paladin wondered how it looked, but he never hinted at anything like magic that compels the fae to stay or the overwhelming mythical beauty of the place, so why isn’t it like any other (excuse the mundane word) tourist attraction? And, are there any humans in this world and do the fae have dealings with them? By the way, how do these people look anyhow? Like humans with wings stuck on? I know, with the style you have adopted, it’s going to be torture to include a physical description, since you only tend to notice things where you know they are different- in a world where everyone is green, nobody thinks about it unless they find someone is blue.
I do like your story very much, in particular your style and use of words and I’ll definitely go on reading.

1 Jon Midget replies: "Thanks so much for reading. It seems that you’ve kind of gone through my library at whirlwind’s pace recently. ^_^ I’ll respond as quickly as possible.

Thanks for your comments on this first chapter. It’s actually been one of the most difficult in the whole story, because I have to get the relationship and personalities of Fauna and Paladin just right. And not just their personalities, but how their personalities change when they’re together, which is kind of the key to why they like each other in the first place.

As for your other questions: well, why the Dryads’ world is so dangerous, why Fauna is immune, etc., hopefully you can have patience ... the answers are coming.

As for how they look ... well, that IS a problem. You are very perceptive about my style - I only describe something when a character notices it. So that makes things difficult when there are some major physiological differences that happen to be commonplace for the characters themselves. I think the only way out of this, without obliterating my writing style, is to incorporate illustrations. Alas, there are none for it yet.

But just for your info, they are basically human with wings, but all hair is replaced with feathers. So they have plumes on their heads, downy feathers on forearms and calves, etc. They are also slender and have partially hollow bones.

Anyway, thanks again for reading. I’m glad you enjoyed."
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