|22 Mar 2007|| L. Shanra Kuepers| Jon Midget
replies: "I love and adore that opening stanza, and especially the last line in it. I also like the one-lined stanza following it. I'm usually rather adverse to them (I like symmetry), but you use them extremely well."
|31 Mar 2007|| L. Shanra Kuepers|
It does make sense. ^-^ It's just that, never having heard of a mad-faerie before, my mind insists that the hyphen is wrong. Obviously, if it's a type of faerie, it isn't.
I'd say there's a chance I won't be the only person to stumble over it, but short of rephrasing the whole (and losing the pretty half-rhyme!) or changing the whole meaning , I can't think of anything you could do. *shrugs helplessly* So just leave it as it is and write a (short) story about mad-faeries? ^-~
Mhmm... I agree on the question mark, I think. It's not the nicest of endings. For this anyway. I'd suggest finding someone better versed in the rules of sentence fragments and asking them for a second opinion. Second opinions are always good. ^-^
|23 May 2007|| Randall Owen Salau|
I must admit I've always liked this style of prose, for want of a better word.Well, I call it a poem ... but not everyone agrees that non-rhyming drivel like this countsThe strength I found in this one, although it may have been unintended, is that it can be read more than one way - as a lover of the cold as per your intro, or contra, as I read it as a lover of the sun. It also can be read differently depending on whether your dragons are cold or warm blooded. Both ways give different insights and both work well.Well, it's sort of intentional, and sort of accidental. I certainly didn't plan it to work from alternate points of view, but I do choose my words carefully—I really go out of my way to avoid adjectives and adverbs, especially vague categorical ones. This means I describe stuff much more than I give value judgements or opinions. And descriptions can fit into alternate points of view much more than values and opinions. And while the speaker (and myself) certainly prefer the cold to the hot, the poem doesn't really focus on this opinion, it focuses on the experience of cold. Hmmm ... *wondering if what I just wrote makes sense*btw, I've recently posted a very different view of dragons in my library - Gilbert - although perhaps a better title would have been "Young dragons behaving very badly", if you feel in need of a laugh. I like your style and I'll get to reading more of your stuff soon.Ah, a shameless plug. ^_~Yes, I'm always ready for a good laugh, so I'll be sure to step by soon. Thanks for reading, and for your comments.
|30 Sep 2007|| Kelsey Lynn Reed|
What can I say to this??? I love it! ^_^
It's really easy to read and follow and it creates a wonderful image in my mind. I must ask, where did you come up with the setting? Anywhere in particular? It reminds me of the winters where I lived for a while. Freezing cold but more beautiful than anywhere else. So the dragons left the elves behind, poor elves
I hope to read more wonderful works of yours.