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Jasmine Pang

"Window to the Soul" by Jasmine Pang

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I didn't plan to write this poem, I started off writing the last verse, then the rest...just came? Blame it on the exams...
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Enclosed within
The steely bars
Crafted by my
Master hand
Except that I forgot
To make a key and
Release myself
From unlocked doors

Shut within
The box that held
The cage of darker
Darkness where I
Could feel the sun
Amidst the golden clouds
Sifting through the
Papered cracks

Look at me
Seek to find what
You cannot see
Into my eyes as the
Caustic rain falls
Down
Tell me
When the frost comes

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6 Dec 2001:-) Lenore L. Towne
Hmmm...very good. I like this one too.
29 Dec 2001:-) Erica G. Wilson
I like the imagry, I know this is the stove calling the kettle black, but try not to go too overboard! Good luck!!
7 Feb 2002:-) Elizabeth Fitzgerald
I can really, REALLY identify with this poem. I think it is well thought out. Sucinct without being too brief and a fantastic use of imagery. I honestly don't think there is too much of it at all.
11 Sep 200245 Wendy
Jasmine!!!! You poot. A talented one at that 2
15 Jan 200545 Stephanie M. Sargent
I know exactly where you're comming from. I actually tried to write a poem like this a couple days ago, but I never got past the frist verse, which itself needed work. Damn my inablitiy to write poetry, damn it all to Hell(lol). Good job!
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'Window to the Soul':
 • Created by: :-) Jasmine Pang
 • Copyright: ©Jasmine Pang. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Caged, Eyes, Soul, Window
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
 • Views: 348

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