|28 Jul 1999|| Jessica M. Jordan|
Oo! Neato.. You're much better with poems than I am! I fear putting up any of my own in my section of the Library for fear of being laughed at! *L*
|11 Aug 1999|| ßattle Çobra|
very bland. you need to put more emotion into it.
|15 Nov 1999|| Mark|
In the dark night of ignorance shines the light of knowledge. Yet what be the price of knowledge?
(Okay, that was a bit cliche. Sorry!)
|23 Jul 2000|| Siobhan|
I thought this poem was great not bland at all!
|28 Oct 2000|| Cynthya Lynn Hawes|
This was a cool poem with a great concept. I can occasionally
generate decent poetry... once in a blue moon. This made some
really cool images pop into my head. The only thing you need to
work on is the rhythm, which I know is hard and evil to get it
right. It's a very nice poem, good job! =)
|1 Oct 2003|| Bryn Elizabeth Lepley|
This sounds like it should be in Lord of the Rings series... written about the magical elven blades! Beautiful... i love your style!
|27 Jun 2005|| Anonymous|
It was great. Its hard to put anything to words. It was great.
|18 Jul 2006|| Anne|
This is beautiful. I love the theme and the words you've chosen. My only advice, to make it perfect, would be to either pay heed to the rhythm and don't try to make it rhyme, or craft and craft and craft until both rhythm and rhyme work. The reason for this is that, when read outloud, poetry that has rhyme and no consistant rhythm, just sounds sloppy. This is a goregous piece, so don't let inconsistant timing harm it!