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James Webster

"The Cursed Blade" by James Webster

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A story about one of the magical items I created in my D&D campaign.
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←- The Journey Home: Chapter One | The Faerie of Death -→

alone again forever
upon this dark black night
yet even in this darkness
there is quite a light
it glimers in the air
it glimers in my hand
but this light is evil
it comes not from mortal land
it comes from elven blade
a thing no mortal needs
with a simple word of warning
that no mortal ever heeds
so I own this cursed blade
that turns upon my brain
it makes me go crazy
all I lose it shall gain
I lose my mind and heart
and all the things I love
I lose my clothes and sword
even my leather glove
then the blade takes my soul
as it delves deep inside
and I fall forever
into a place to hide...

←- The Journey Home: Chapter One | The Faerie of Death -→

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28 Jul 1999:-) Jessica M. Jordan
Oo! Neato.. You're much better with poems than I am! I fear putting up any of my own in my section of the Library for fear of being laughed at! *L*
11 Aug 199945 ßattle Çobra
very bland. you need to put more emotion into it.
15 Nov 199945 Mark
In the dark night of ignorance shines the light of knowledge. Yet what be the price of knowledge? (Okay, that was a bit cliche. Sorry!)
23 Jul 200045 Siobhan
I thought this poem was great not bland at all!
28 Oct 200045 Cynthya Lynn Hawes
This was a cool poem with a great concept. I can occasionally generate decent poetry... once in a blue moon. This made some really cool images pop into my head. The only thing you need to work on is the rhythm, which I know is hard and evil to get it right. It's a very nice poem, good job! =)
1 Oct 200345 Bryn Elizabeth Lepley
This sounds like it should be in Lord of the Rings series... written about the magical elven blades! Beautiful... i love your style!
27 Jun 200545 Anonymous
It was great. Its hard to put anything to words. It was great.
18 Jul 200645 Anne
This is beautiful. I love the theme and the words you've chosen. My only advice, to make it perfect, would be to either pay heed to the rhythm and don't try to make it rhyme, or craft and craft and craft until both rhythm and rhyme work. The reason for this is that, when read outloud, poetry that has rhyme and no consistant rhythm, just sounds sloppy. This is a goregous piece, so don't let inconsistant timing harm it!
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'The Cursed Blade':
 • Created by: :-) James Webster
 • Copyright: ©James Webster. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Blade, For, Immortals, Only
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
 • Views: 436

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