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Jenessa ´Shadow´ David

"Truly Hell" by Jenessa ´Shadow´ David

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A fine example of what my morbid mind can sometimes produce. It even scared my guidance counselor.
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I felt the sword go through me

My warm blood heating the cold steel

I cry out as I fall forward

No one hears me as I scream in pain

My body hits the floor


My grip on the weapon I hold falters

Blood pours from my mouth

My gurgling screams echo inside my head

Then, the pain ceases

Things get dark


My death comes slow

My soul frees from my body's grasp

It floats towards the heavens

I see the white light

Almost blinding me


Angelic harps play in the distance

And children's laughter fills the air

I feel so happy now

I start to walk towards the light

And I am rejected


The souls of many dead claw at me

I hear the devil's laughter

My sins did not go unnoticed

The many I killed, mercilessly

Their faces haunt me, their screaming gets louder as I go nearer


The tortured souls beckon to me

Oh how I regret my past

I hear a baby's cry to my left

I turn, the child's face is a mass of torn flesh and blood

Screams echo all through my mind, my skull


The fire singes my hair

The heat blisters my skin

The others there pull me deeper

They claw at my face and arms, pulling me

This is truly Hell

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30 Jul 200245 Lilith
Been there, done that.

:-) Jenessa 'Shadow' David replies: "Mwahahaha! Gotta love that 'Oh-wow-this-kid's-crazy' look. "
24 May 2003:-) Keya Keya Paul
*Nods*...yes, hell is a very interesting place this time of year...don't prefer to stay there for very long but I've got some friends down there...*grins*...anyway, nicely written...I can see how it could scare your councilor...*smiles*...I think I'd scare mine if I had one...but as long as I keep acting normal then I won't have to get one...good job, keep up the good work!...
25 Feb 2004:-) James Tsatsaronis
Some very nice poetry there, liked the words you used to describe the persons guilt. Keep up the good work
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'Truly Hell':
 • Created by: :-) Jenessa ´Shadow´ David
 • Copyright: ©Jenessa ´Shadow´ David. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Death, Hell, Pain, Suffering
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