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Jenny L. Morash

"Forest For The Trees" by Jenny L. Morash

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Just a short little thing that I wrote while bored. Just now, in fact.
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←- Julianna | Re-Awakening -→

Julie’s steps slowed, as she reached the crest of the hill, and then stopped completely, leaving only the sound of her slightly ragged breathing to disturb the crisp air of an early autumn night. This was, had always been, her favourite part of the day. When she could leave the stress and tension of a long day spent in the office behind, and slip away into another world. There was something almost spiritual about these evening runs of hers.

The day she’d found this bit of forest, with the winding path that ran through it, shed thought she must have stepped into another world completely. She never ran into anyone else on her daily jaunts along these paths.. just herself, and the trees. There was something almost magical about these woods, as if they were some piece of a world long forgotten, plucked from a story and deposited here, just for her. At times, she even thought she could hear distant voices, calling her name, and the sound of merry music enticing her into the shadows off the path, though once returned to her home, under the bright, modern lights, she discounted such things as the result of spending too much time cooped up in her office.

This night, though, she stopped, looking down the hill into the little glen off the side of the highway, where ‘her’ forest resided. Pausing was something she very rarely did, but something felt.. different, tonight.

** Julie…**

She shivered a bit, then shook her head, ignoring the whisper in the back of her mind. Just another long day, she thought, and turned her attention to the hollow before her. It truly was a beautiful place, pine, maple and oak trees intermingling, the latter only just now starting to turn. The branches dipped, and swayed, and while it seemed almost as if they were beckoning her further in, Julie knew in the back of her mind that it was only the wind moving them about.

** Julie… we’re waiting.. **

“This is nuts,” Julie said aloud. “Snap out of it, girl. Finish up the run, so you can go home and get something solid into you.”

Giving herself a shake, Julie started to jog once more, heading down the now-familiar path, and into the trees, the crunching sound of her footsteps against the gravel and sand path falling in counterpoint to the beating of her heart. The stillness of the forest closed around her, like a comforting blanket drawn about the shoulders of a fretful child.

** Julie… we’re waiting… come dance with us.. **

It’s funny how the mind can change in an instant, choices made that you never would have believed. Sometimes, when a path is offered to us, we just have to take a deep breath, close our eyes, and head off in a completely new direction. The analogy could be made to Julie’s choice that evening.. except that the words are more literally true than in most cases. None know just what layd waiting for Julie in the shadows of the forest that seemed to have existed for only her. All that is known is that, when anxious coworkers and friends reported that Julie had gone missing on one of her evening runs, there was no sign of her along the path she normally ran. The path that lead straight through those old fields on the outskirts of town, that had lain fallow for years now….

←- Julianna | Re-Awakening -→

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24 Jan 200145 Madeline Jane Quirk
Well, I came here through James's suggestion and am impressed. This is a nice little story... I'd have to disagree with him though, the voices would be not sinister if she kept coming back on the runs and wondering off as stated in the last paragraph. It's somewhat cute, I get images of luring little elves and pixies dancing about *chuckles*

Those would be the top suspects, most likely. Whether it's them or not.. I leave to your imagination.
24 Jan 2001:-) James K Bowers
Well written, Jenny... I thought it interesting that this could be a complete story in and of itself, or it could instead be the prelude to some grand and sweeping fantasy novel... Until I realized that I was somewhat disappointed by the brevity... I found it intriguing that you made no point of mentioning whether the 'voices' were benevolent or sinister, leaving that (at this point anyway) to the imagination of your readers... Enjoyable, leaves one with a feeling of being sated yet hungry...

That was actually the effect I wanted. It's meant to leave the reader wondering just what or who they are. -I- know, and of course Julie knows, but neither of us is talking
25 Jan 2001:-) Michelle Krantz
Just spooky enough to be really cool. I, too, was beconned by James. I do have one bit of criticism, though it is constructive. You seem to run wild with commas. Tone it down a bit and this will be perfect!

Thanks for the advice. I'll have to work on that. I am rather fond of the little things.
30 Jan 2001:-) Esther SP. Buhrman
While you were bored...Wish I could write this kind of story when I'm bored...It was utterly delightful, mysterious...I suppose Julie's off dancing with the faeries right now....2

I'm sure she's happy, wherever she is.
2 Feb 2001:-) Tansy A. H. Pye
This is good... it could be great... Its an excellent beginning to a story and it's nice to see that someone else suffers from the same comma problem, while stream of conciiousness writing. If this were me then this would be my first draft... I would now go back and first tidy up the english and the puntuation, then look through and see where I could expand on it, add more description, more mood. It would be creepier, if it lasted longer, we jogged with her a few nights perhaps... I would like to hear her thoughts as well, see her dilemmas... if we knew her a bit better we may then ask the question did she go willingly or was she stolen? I would really love for you to go back and really work on this... I used to belong to a writers circle called Basically Insane and this is exactly the sort of thing we would do as an experiment. We all had very different styles, so for fun, we would each write a piece about this long and then at the meeting we would hand it to the writer on our left who would before the next meeting take it and expand it to a full story of at least 5000 words. It was always interesting to see what came back... eek but I ramble, sorry it's late and I'm tired. But you can see you have inspired me2

There's nothing wrong with a bit of ramble. I likely will go back and work more on it, at some point. I'll definately post another version, when done.
24 Mar 200345 Emerald Mile
First off, it's probably just faeries. Of course, only Julie knows. But the darker parts of my mind will not let me stop at just that. Maybe it's vampires, they're known for that kind of thing. Or maybe she was schizophrenic. Then again, maybe it really was faeries...the mischievious, sly, man hating kind. You know, the ones who disguise poisonous mushrooms as a wonderful feast, and make chickets chirping sound like violin music....just the thing to ensnare an unsuspecting, and probably hungry human. Hee hee hee
28 May 2006:-) Donna s. habinck
Interesting. My 8th grade English teacher had te same broblem, except hers was with semi-colons. I think it is creepy, yet still kind of... um I don't know, but it is good.
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'Forest For The Trees':
 • Created by: :-) Jenny L. Morash
 • Copyright: ©Jenny L. Morash. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Girl, Paranormal, Surreal, Weird
 • Categories: Faery, Fay, Faeries, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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