|28 Aug 2001|| Erin M. Schmidt|
The villainous wolf, the quirky dialogue . . . this piece reminds me very strongly of the Jean de la Fontaine fables (which I dearly adore). A few ways to improve this poem might be to work out the formatting errors, obviously, but also to clear up some of the imagery ("hear" a spark inside? "cuddle" a tree?) This isn't a complex poem; it simply tells a story, and it seems to me that the language should be as straightforward as possible. Just a suggestion, mind you. I really enjoyed reading this, and my criticism is meant to be constructive, not malicious.