|10 Aug 2001|| Brian 'Dulcet' Bergstrom|
What a lovely poem. It tells the tale of a classic love story. At first ya think it's about her from her point of view, but then it changes to his. Very well done.
|24 Aug 2001|| C. M. Pontrella|
Some interesting rhymes here, and I like the story. Somehow, and I can't be sure how, the rhyme has not a whole lot of rhythm? Oddness. Anyroad, I've not seen a lot of rhyme lacking rhythm, so this was interesting to read. Thanks.Ah, the reason why the poem doesn't have a heck of lot of rhythm is because I wrote it that way. I wanted it to capture the reader and keep them, even if the rhythm is non-existent. That's what I get for being a weird/tortured poet. ^__^