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"Shadow- Part 2" by Jess Hanna

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*Shrugs* what good book is without it's dream parts?. Dreams are importentt later, but can't say too much about them now.
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←- Shadow of a Past life-First section | Shadow-Part Three -→

Roan woke up late that night. Where was Kayligh? And at that, where am I? She thought. She was standing on a path through the woods. The path was muddy and rutted, the woods were thick, and the air felt heavy around her. Roan vaguely remembered this place; though, no names came to mind. A lone rider soon arrived on a black stallion. Roan felt she remembered him too but again, she could recall no names. He dismounted his horse a few yards away from her. Roan couldn't see much of his face in the dark but she could tell the pride of this man from his walk. He began talking to her and, to Roan's amazement, she was talking back. The words seemed so familiar and yet so distant she could barely hear them. This is crazy, her mind screamed, where am I? Roan's mind raced with a thousand questions and no answers. She tried to run but her feet felt as if they had become one with the ground. The man pressed something into her hand. She looked down and upon closer look it was a golden brooch. It was shiny and polished as if it had just been made. There was a small dagger engraved onto it with "ED" below it. The man leaned close and whispered in her ear, "You know what that is for." With that said he rode off, never looking back.

Kayligh woke to Roan's thrashing in her sleep across the room. "Roan? Roan, wake up. Roan!" said Kayligh with a worried edge to her voice. "Wh-, What?" Roan replied drowsily. "You looked like you were having a nightmare." Kayligh said, her concern still apparent. "Huh? A dream, yeah, of course just a dream." Roan responded, still a shaken from the nightmare. What she remembered was fading fast but one thing still was clear. Roan got up and pulled out the brooch. It was the same one from the dream. What is this about? Nah, I must be working to hard. Just need to get some time to relax that's all, she thought.

When the light came it seemed to bring on a whole new perspective. The dream didn't matter. They needed supplies. Whatever the dream was about took care of itself until now and it can keep on by itself. Other then a curious glance from Kayligh every once and a while to make sure she was okay, the rest of the day seemed normal. Kayligh was nervous though, she had never seen Roan as confused and distant as the night before. Kayligh liked traveling with Roan, even if she was very somber it was good to have company and you couldn't ask for someone as trustworthy or as fearless. She didn't want to think about what could bother her that much.

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5 Nov 2003:-) Elizabeth Wilcox
this is really good--though it does seem a bit abrupt. Some expansion of the story certainly wouldn't hurt. Also, watch your tense to make sure it matches--if her thoughts are in present tense and the rest is past it would be helpful to use quotations or italics. (or both, if you'd like) ^_^

:-) Jess Hanna replies: "It is kind of abrupt, isnt it? *sighs* will have to go fix that sometime. Thanks for pointing it out, good to know what needs work 2"
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'Shadow- Part 2':
 • Created by: :-) Jess Hanna
 • Copyright: ©Jess Hanna. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Brooch, Dream, Elf, Mystery, Rogue
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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