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Jess Hyslop

"Dreamer´s Cottage" by Jess Hyslop

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A study of a location and a character in a story that I am planning on writing. If I ever get round to it... This piece is in quite a strange style, but it just seemed to happen so I went on with the flow...

Updated 20/07/05, taking into account Samuel V. R. Joseph's helpful comments.

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Come with me. Let me show you the way to Dreamer’s cottage.

 

First, you must go to sleep. Yes, that’s right, you must be asleep, for Dreamer’s cottage can only be found in Dreamer’s dream. Dreamer’s dream, which he wove himself - it’s a beautiful place. Don’t you want to see it? I thought so. Then stop complaining and trust me! All right then. Go to sleep. But first, you must take this. It’s one of the wooden charms from my bracelet. No, it’s all right, you can take it – I want you to see this. Hold it in your hand when you sleep – it must be touching your skin for you to enter. Enter where? Dreamer’s dream, of course! You can only get there by invitation, and that’s what these charms are - invitations. Are you ready? Lie back, relax. Now sleep.

 

Good! We’re here! I can tell you’re a bit disorientated, but never mind – everyone is, in dreams. Not me? No, I suppose not. But then, I’ve been here many, many times, to visit Dreamer. I come almost every night.

 

Let me help you up. There we go. Steady now, don’t fall into the lake! You see the lake? It’s beautiful, isn’t it? All those coloured lights, bobbing and drifting below the surface… You know, I’m not actually sure what they are – you’ll have to ask Dreamer. It is his dream, after all.

 

But look up, look up from the lake and look at the hillside. It’s covered in plants, all sorts of large, thick plants of luscious and glorious colours. They’re gorgeous – you agree with me, don’t you? No, I suppose you can’t see all the colours, but it’s always twilight here, with the last colours of the sunset just fading away over the hilltop. Why? Ask Dreamer – I told you, it’s his dream. But it makes it all the more beautiful, don’t you think? You can see the fireflies, hovering amongst the trees, and the stars are so bright, they’re like shards of diamond in the blue-black sky.

 

Now follow me, round the edge of the lake. It’s soft earth under our feet, soft and silky. I like to take my shoes off here, and wriggle my toes deep into the soil. MmmmmSo nice… Anyway, let’s get on; Dreamer wants to meet you. How do I know? He told me, silly! Now come on, stop being stupid.

 

The path is just along here… It leads up the hillside from the edge of the lake, winding in and out of the plants and trees. Ah, here we are. Come along. The path is fairly narrow, so you’ll have to stick close to me. Up we go. Oops! Yes, sorry, forgot to warn you about all the plants and trees hanging down over us. If you duck and weave a bit you’ll be fine. Just do what I do. The leaves are huge, aren’t they? And so glossy… Feel this one, it’s so smooth and shiny; if it was light you could probably see your face in it. But the trunk – it’s like a palm tree, all bristly and whiskery. No, it’s not any type of tree you’d know – Dreamer made it up. As I keep telling you, it’s his dream. He can do whatever he likes here.

 

Oh, watch out! There’s a little stream running across the path here. Be careful not to step in it; it’s so clean and crystal clear, it would be a pity if it were disturbed. See there, where it came from, higher up the hill a little? A tiny waterfall, gurgling over the rocks, running into that silken pool. The water reflects the stars from this angle, and all the colours of the rainbow seem to shimmer in it…

 

It’s not much further now. I’m sorry if you’re getting tired – it’s really quite steep. But here we go; you see, the plants are getting denser, that’s how I know we’re almost there. Just push them aside as you go past, and crouch a little, so as not to damage any. They’re all so wonderful I would feel awfully guilty if I were to break a stem or even a leaf.

 

And as I move this final leaf out of the way… Ta da! What do you think? Isn’t it lovely? Dreamer’s cottage. There’re some smooth stepping stones leading up to it, in amongst the soft grass. Come along them. I make it a game – you can’t touch the grass! Dreamer put some more in for me when he saw me doing this, so that I can hop around on them. Don’t raise your eyebrow at me! I find it fun… Oh, fine, I’ll stop then.

 

What d’you mean, the cottage looks lop-sided? Well, that’s how Dreamer wanted it. I think it makes it look magical, with one end of the thatched roof drooping down like that. And the tiny round window peeping out the other side! You think it looks odd? Well, keep your opinions to yourself when you meet Dreamer – you might upset him if you tell him that. After all, he worked long and hard to weave this cottage; it took a long, long time.

 

What are what? Oh, you mean those, on the front lawn? There are some in amongst the trees too, if you just look round there… And more round the back. They’re Dreamer’s wooden carvings, or sculptures if you like. Quite strange to look at. He carves anything – animals, plants, made-up things, people… He carved me once… They look almost real, don’t they? That one’s quite scary, like a totem pole of frowning faces. He doesn’t actually need them any more, but I think he likes to remind himself how much effort this cottage took to make. You can go and touch them if you like, but you might get a little dream out of them. Yes, a dream. How about that one, there, with the ropes leading between each one? Yes, that’s what I said, a dream. Stop asking questions – just go and look!

 

Told you. When you touched it, did you feel a tingling? Then you got a dream, right? A snippet anyway. What did you get? Fine, don’t tell me then. Shall we go inside? What? You’re nervous? Don’t be – Dreamer is the nicest person you’ll ever meet. Stop being so silly! Come on!

 

It’s quite dark in here. You can light another lamp if you want, I’m sure Dreamer won’t mind. The matches are in that drawer, and the lamp’s there, hanging by the door. On your right. On your right, I said! Honestly… Now turn around… Hah! I knew you’d be surprised. Sure you can touch it – it’s just a table. It is amazing though. He carves the pictures into it when he’s bored, or eating dinner, or… whenever, really. I’ve watched him do it, many times. Sometimes he uses a pin, to get the tiniest details just right… Here, I’ll show you. If you look round the edge, you can see a story – his story. Of how he came to be in our world and how he met me and how he… we… made the cottage. And in the middle he just carves anything he likes. Here, look, a little shoal of fish swimming around, and here, a ladder leading up through the clouds, and a man placing the stars in the sky.

 

But where is Dreamer? He should be here somewhere… Dreamer? Dreamer! I’ll go and get him – he’s probably in the next room. Wait here a minute…

 

Here he is.

 

Here’s Dreamer.

 

     

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10 Jul 2005:-) Elijah Marquez
NO COMMENTS?! how can this be? maybe lost in the crash? must have been cause this is great! i loved it, made me crack up the way it was written. cute, really cute.

:-) Jess Hyslop replies: "Yeah, this one did vanish in the crash. Glad you liked it... Maybe I'll actually get round to writing the story sometime... *sigh* So many stories on the go! So many characters in my head demanding to be written!"
11 Jul 2005:-) Samuel V. R. Joseph
Whoops, sorry... just realised something else, in the third para, you use "disorientated" -- to the best of my knowledge, there's no such word... I think you meant "disoriented"?

:-) Jess Hyslop replies: "Is too! Is too a word! *points at dictionary* *reads* 'Confuse (person) as to his bearing or sense of what is correct.' It's just under 'disorient', if that soothes you any. "
11 Jul 2005:-) Samuel V. R. Joseph
Hey there, wow, this was interesting... a very unique style, I must say. Though I suppose you wouldn't want to write the entire story this way! I have a feeling it would be very hard to keep such a story afloat, once the novelty of the style wears off. But for an intro this is just great!

So the style's wonderful, and there's nothing much to say about the plot or anything, since this is not supposed to be a complete story in and of itself... but I did want to point out some grammatical and other (aesthetic?) stuff.

First of all, in the second paragraph (counting the initial one-liner as a paragraph), there's this line: "It’s one of my wooden charms, one of the ones from my bracelet". "One of the ones" sounds really strange... I think it would do better as "It's one of my wooden charms, from my bracelet."

Next, in the third para, "I can tell you’re a bit disorientated, but never mind -- everyone is in dreams"; I think the meaning would be clearer with an additional comma: "never mind -- everyone is, in dreams". I think you get what I mean =)

Then, upon their arrival at the cottage, "There’re some smooth rocky stepping stones leading up to it, in amongst the soft grass". This part really got me scratching my head... "smooth rocky stones"? Not sure what you meant by this, but my feeling is that the sentence with sound better without the word "rocky".

Finally, "He doesn’t actually need them any more, but I think he likes to remind himself of how much effort this cottage took to make" -- In my opinion, this would sound better without the "of"; in other words, "...likes to remind himself how much effort...". And may I suggest: "...likes to remind himself how much effort it took to make this cottage", or perhaps "how much effort he put into making this cottage".

Well, hope that helps... do let me know if you ever get 'round to writing this story!

:-) Jess Hyslop replies: "Thanks very much. I agree with all those points. Pretty soon I will do an update ticket, and sort out this and also Sol. And no, I certainly wouldn't want to do the whole story in this style! The trauma of trying to make it work! Can you imagine? *shudder* "
12 Jul 2005:-) Samuel V. R. Joseph
Heh... you're probably right. I was probably using an American dictionary or something... sorry about that =P

:-) Jess Hyslop replies: "No problem! It's interesting to find out stuff like that."
6 Aug 2005:-) Richard Aaron Bruns
I like the conversational style of the guide. You also did a very good job of describing the world. This is an excellent introduction, although part of me thinks that this story should be left unfinished, to preserve the mystery of Dreamer.

:-) Jess Hyslop replies: "If I ever do write the story, I shall try my best to keep Dreamer mysterious anyway... But that may never happen. I am glad that you enjoyed this - describing the world was surprisingly easy, since I dreamed it myself!"
23 Aug 2005:-) Becca Lusher
This is cute, very sweet, I loved the conversational style, I really have a soft spot for it. The feeling of being led is really nice too. Have to admit I was waiting for some sudden twist, so it was a lovely surprise to have the ending so open.

Really liked this one ^_^ (Sorry for the useless comments, my brain is far from working today.)

:-) Jess Hyslop replies: "No, that doesn't matter - its enough to know you liked it! Thanks for the comment!"
15 Sep 2005:-) Regina Wong
Who's the Dreamer? I wanna know! Maybe I can dream and find him/her....Oh, nevermind. Nice story....got stuck on it from beginning to end. Wish there was more, thought that would spoil the mystery...

:-) Jess Hyslop replies: "Wow, I'm glad you liked it so much! There is a whole story surrounding Dreamer - I just haven't got round to writing it yet. I'll tell you when (and if) I do!"
8 Dec 200645 Just another comment
Why are people saying that this is cute? I mean, I like the style and the way that while you're reading it, you feel like you're really in a dream, but the whole time I was reading it I expected it to end as someone getting eaten or something. I don't mean that in a bad way though. I guess I'm just trying to say that the tone of the dream sounded a bit sneaky to me.

:-) Jess Hyslop replies: "That's interesting... And I suppose that is a good thing, because if something is too cute it can be more than a little sickly, if you get what I mean... So I think I'm glad that you detected a slightly more sinister side to it..."
26 Jul 200745 L. Shanra Kuepers
Somehow, I had it in my mind that I'd read this and commented on it before. Now I'm not so sure anymore, but anyway...

Now come on, stop being stupid. <- That seems a little harsh and bully-ish compared to the overall almost hyper, cheerful tone of the guide. But that could be just me. I do like this, though. It's very hard to write a narrative with such a direct aim at the reader and have it work, but yours does. It's a beautiful, dreamy little piece.

They’re all so wonderful[?] I would feel awfully guilty if I were to break a stem or even a leaf. <- Need a punctuation mark or a 'that' where that question mark is I do think.

I find it fun… <- Kiddie, kiddie guide. Bless. That's such a lovely little touch. I really like how much you're showing people by telling them. It's a wonderful exercise for the imagination, this.

Oooh. That's a lovely ending with it being so open. Very, very cute and really quite lovely even if you don't think it's not exactly finished.

Apologies for my lack of ability to comment at the moment. I just really enjoyed this. ^-^

:-) Jess Hyslop replies: "Thanks for the comment! ^_^ Yes, your guide is very innocent... it's part of Dreamer's influence. Good point about the 'stop being stupid', and the punctuation - I agree totally. Thanks again!"
11 Jul 2009:-) Suzanne Collins
This piece is so original, and works really well! I agree with other people that it would be best to have this just as an intro, it’s a description of how the person came to be in the dream itself and has been guided there by... someone... Lol the guide is very funny, I love the descriptions of the land and his cheeky comments. Nice mysterious quality too 2

:-) Jess Hyslop replies: "I also agree - this was never really meant as a complete ’short story’ in its own right, just more of an exploration of a concept and character I had in mind. I like the way it turned out though - pleased you did too 2"
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'Dreamer's Cottage':
 • Created by: :-) Jess Hyslop
 • Copyright: ©Jess Hyslop. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Carvings, Cottage, Dreams, Lake
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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