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"Darkmoon Ridge (Chapter 1)" by James K. Bowers

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'Thunder in the Distance' is the first chapter of the Chronicles of Southgate. This is the reader's first brief look at the sorceress, Alorra, and the Earl of Southgate. (Note: All spell usage in this chapter should be considered untranslatable.)
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--  CHAPTER ONE  --
Thunder in the Distance


    Auzinna bounded down the stairs, shrieking, “She’s dead!  She’s dead!”  T’ralex hit the stairs running, taking two or three steps with each stride.  Alorra’s chamber door stood open.  Light from several candles sent flickering shadows to dance about the walls.  She lay motionless, draped limply over the book she had been studying.  Dread filled T’ralex’s heart as he drew closer, then dissipated as he noted the slow but rhythmic movement of her breathing.  He reached out, gently touching her shoulder with his hand.
    It was impossible to tell who was startled more -- the wizard or the priest.  The mage leaped to her feet, her voice echoing words of power, delving into the void to tap elemental forces best left alone.  “Nuarma partholan num alimathar el garigor avemb--”
    “WAIT! It’s ME!”  blurted the abbot, stumbling backward.
    “...oh...was I sleeping?”
    “Obviously!  What was I to become?  A toad?  A smoldering cinder?  Perhaps a puddle of ooze?  You have to stop this, Alorra!  What if it wasn’t me?  How would I explain to Madam Gordath that you had turned her daughter into a potato?”
    “T’ralex, you know I haven’t the means to turn anything into anything!  That’s not how my spells work.  Besides, I’ve told you before not to disturb my studies.  And if it wasn't for...”  Alorra paused, her mind belatedly comprehending T’ralex’s words.   “And what has Madam Gordath’s daughter to do with anything?”
    “She thought you had died.  Quite thankfully, the poor dear must have decided she shouldn’t touch anything dead.  She’s downstairs and, no doubt, scared witless by now.  We have some unexpected guests and, I suspect, will be hosting the Earl himself in very short order.  Please, give me a moment to calm the child before you join me at the hearth.”   Too much studying.  T’ralex made a mental note to speak to Alorra later about this habit of hers, for there was no time for it now.
    T’ralex hurried down the stairs.  Auzinna was nowhere in sight.  The door was closed; a good sign.  If Auzinna had bolted home, she would have had a great deal of trouble with the heavy door.  In her panicked condition, she certainly wouldn’t have taken the time to close it behind her.
    “Auzinna?  Where are you, child?” he called softly.  “All is well, dear.  Alorra was only sleeping.”  No answer, just the quiet shuffle of her feet as Auzinna appeared from behind a tapestry.  “Ah...there you are.  Alorra will be here in a moment or two.  Maybe we should see if she will warm some milk for both of us?”  The latter served to bring a smile to the girl’s lips.
    No sooner had T’ralex calmed the young girl than Alorra appeared, coming down the staircase.  She stopped in her tracks as she viewed the makeshift hospital surrounding the hearth.  “What is this, T’ralex?  Who are they?”
    “These are our unexpected guests.  And, quite important guests, I might add.  Why don’t you warm some milk for the three of us.  I’ll tell you what I know while you’re doing that.”
    Alorra disappeared into the cellar for a moment, returning with a small jug of milk.  She listened intently to T’ralex as she warmed the milk at the hearth.
    “From what you have seen, our visitors are not in the best of health.  I have done as much as I am able for them, but I fear death is still very close to each of them.  It appears that the most I can do for them now is to clean their wounds and keep them comfortable as they rest.”  T’ralex returned to the task of cleansing their wounds as he spoke.  “Two of them appear to be soldiers, but the woman bears the badge of a Khurda.  They rode into town a short while ago, maybe an hour.  Auzinna and her brother were to help me tend to the three of them, but when I realized just who this woman was, I sent Jeddun to the castle to notify the Earl.”  T’ralex paused, looking over the unconscious travelers.  “I don’t know if they were conscious when they arrived or if their mounts just happened to find Southgate on the way to wherever they were bound.”  Again, the abbot paused as one of the injured men stirred.  “Their horses, as far as I can tell, belong to one of the King’s cavalry brigades.  Cavinan has seen to them... for tonight, they rest in our stable.”
    Alorra, lost in thought, said nothing at first.  She handed a cup of warmed milk to Auzinna, who began sipping it as she sat cross-legged by the fire.  Pouring two more cups, she joined T’ralex by the travelers.  “What do you suppose caused their wounds?”
    “I’m not sure I would care to guess.  These,” he said, pointing to one of the men, “appear to be the result of some clawed animal, but the wounds on his left shoulder and his stomach were certainly made by a blade.  They all bear both types of wounds.  If they don’t recover, we may never know... or we may only find the answer to your question when someone pays the price of another attack.”  T’ralex glanced toward the door, then spoke more to himself than to Alorra.  “I hope Jeddun has gotten my message to the Earl by now.  This whole situation has far too many implications to wait until tomorrow.“
    “Perhaps they are victims of more than one encounter.  That would explain the different types of wounds,” offered Alorra.  “From what you have implied, the only thing that kept them alive to reach Southgate is the fact that they are soldiers.  They must have been in excellent condition before they came upon whatever or whoever did this to them. But why would they have come here instead of seeking aid at one of the outposts?  Surely, one of them would have been closer.”  Alorra’s eyes begged an answer, but T’ralex only shrugged.  He, too, would only be guessing.
    Alorra fell silent as she studied the travelers, inspecting and comparing their wounds.  They could have been corpses if judged only by the color of their skin.  “Did you think to send for Sylnia?  You know her mastery of herbal cures would help.”
    “Alorra, this is the Khurda of Penzand,” T’ralex said, motioning toward the unconscious woman.  “I don’t think anyone else is yet aware of that.  Sylnia’s skill with herbs is rivaled only by her skill at spreading gossip and rumor.  As much as we need her help, I couldn’t bring myself to ask her for fear of her wagging tongue.  It simply wouldn’t do for the whole town to be stirred into a frenzy over this before the Earl has had a chance to take what action he may. I shall send for Sylnia yet tonight once we are better able to fathom this situation. . . or if their foothold on this world worsens.”
    “Yes, I suppose you are right, but I would still . . . T’ralex?  Where is her sword?
    Alorra’s words loomed in his consciousness like a gathering storm.  The sword of a Khurda. . . only six were ever forged.  Their worth could never be measured in gold or silver.  Their value could only be gauged by the blood and sacrifice of the long line of Khurdas who, for over two centuries, had passed down both their swords and their honor.  “I haven’t seen it,” whispered T’ralex as their eyes met.
    “Did Cavinan mention it?  Perhaps it was slung on her horse,”  offered Alorra.
    “He didn’t say,” said the abbot.  Remembering details of the early evening, he added, “But I doubt greatly that it was.  All three horses had the trappings of the King’s cavalry. . . none were caparisoned in the emerald of Penzand.  I am led to believe she has lost both sword and mount to whatever force they engaged.  Still, I should check the stable.  Luck does come in two varieties, after all.”
     As if the discussion of her sword was her cue, the Khurda groaned softly, but remained unconscious.  Perhaps she dreamt of the events that had brought her to Southgate.  Perhaps she did not dream but felt, instead, an emptiness of purpose spawned by the loss the sword.  She no longer rested peacefully.  Nor would she find peace until her sword was reclaimed.
    The door swung open ushering in a swirl of powdery snow.  The herald proclaimed, “His Most Righteous Lordship, Gaylord Ulthrond, Earl of Southgate, Lord Marshall of Stonedown Reach, Guardian of ElvenOak and Protector of...”
    “ENOUGH!” roared the Earl.  “Save that pompous drivel for those who may need to be impressed.  The abbot knows who I am.  Better than most I would think.  See to the boy.”  The Earl brushed past his herald and crossed the room with purposeful strides.  Though now draped in the fineries of his station, his fluid, catlike grace revealed the Earl’s years as a warrior.  The Earl was followed by two knights, Agravar and Rothmore.  Jeddun, whose tale of adventure was growing longer by the minute, evaded the herald and strutted in with the knights.  The herald merely shook his head as he pushed the door closed.
    The Earl looked down at the prone figures.  A look of curiosity washed over the Earl’s features only to be replaced with one of expectancy as he looked to the priest.  “These are the wounded travelers of whom the boy spoke?  The King’s troops?  Soldiers die every day, T’ralex.  What makes these so special that you would send for me at this late hour?”
    “My apologies, milord, but this should explain my actions, if not the situation,” said T’ralex as he brushed aside the Khurda’s hair and raised her necklace for the Earl to see.  “She’s Penzand.  We don’t know why she’s here.  We don’t know who or what attacked them.  We aren’t even certain that they will live.”  T’ralex let out a defeated sigh.  “All we do know is that you needed to be told of this immediately.”
    T’ralex turned to Alorra and gave her a slight but meaningful nod.  There was little more that T’ralex could do for the travelers without Sylnia’s aid.  Alorra would need to fetch her, though T’ralex dreaded the very thought of it.  Sylnia’s greatest love was “current history”, her polite term for gossip.  This fascination with everything she had no business knowing was, in itself, not so terrible; but, when coupled with the current situation, Sylnia’s ability to drag a coherent story out of anything with more wits than a turnip could have disastrous consequences.  No, T’ralex decided, he was not looking forward to being courteously cross-examined by Sylnia.


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3 Mar 200345 Maddie <IrisFire2007@ya
This is very well written, and u are managing quite well to keep me hooked! The beginning to this chapter, tho, i have to say, started far too abrubtly. also, i was very confused by what happend to Tralex' wife....I don't mean to crtique so much, but this is just the 1st chapter, and it was a bit premature to have any mention of someone "dying", expecially right at the beginning. Other than that, I have to say that you have a very good writing style. I was hooked the whole time, and still am, so I'll move on now and read the rest!
18 Jun 2003:-) Camilla 'Motone' Whitney
She lost her sword!?!?!!!! NOOOOOO!!!!! THE HORROR!!!!!!!! SAY IT AIN'T SO!!!!!!

*sniff* Poor swordy... all lost and alone...

heh heh... *calms down*

Well, naturally, I liked it. I really liked the beginning, how it starts out ominous, then gets a bit comical as the abbott and his wife argue. The earl struck me as a pretty cool character too. On to the next chapter.
23 Dec 2003:-) Nicholas G. DeBruno
Me like, like a lot. Your skill is quite obvious to anyone that can read. Are you published? If not, try because this is great!!!!
4 Jan 200445 D Joelle Duran
Nice, nice. I can retract the concern I raised in my comment on your prologue, since you addressed it here--good! I liked the introduction of the earl. And that boy's having the time of his life!
The only quibble I could find is that your pov seems to wobble here and there. You've got a section that tells of Alorra's thoughts, and one later of the Khurda's reaction that appears inconsistent with the Abbott's point of view.
Still, great work. I'm apprehensively eager to meet this herb-woman and gossip, and I'm anxious for the awakening of the Khurda. I'll be back for more soon!
4 Dec 2005:-) Patricia M. D´Angelo
I see by the comments, our characters are now brother and sister. Either way, I'm hooked. Hope to find out more about the Khurda, the beast/sword attack, and your noxious gossip.
15 Feb 2006:-) Ramona C. Bogott
Again, thoroughly enjoyed this. Only nit-pick I can find is there were only 6 swords made, does that mean there are only 6 Khurda, was not very clear. Of course this might be explained later in the story (ignore this if it is). It would certainly make the attack on her of a more serious nature. Can't wait to find out.

1 James K. Bowers replies: "It may be in here elsewhere, but let me clear this up, anyway: Six swords, six Khurda - one serving each of the five Dukes Palatine (Beldar, Penzand, Naminor, Miroan, & Dalhorn) and one in direct service of the King of Khurudahl."
26 Feb 2006:-) Rachel A Pears
Hi James. Couldn't help myself - had to read on. I thought this was a nice continuation from the prologue. At first I was rather confused by some of the comments people had made. It was only later that I realised that you must have re-drafted and re-posted this story, changing some details. It might be worth responding to some of the comments to reflect this or putting a brief description in the intro? Just a thought. It is always nice to correspond with other role-players, we seem to be a dying breed. I actually really like the idea of a human and sword being bonded, in a good way. If the sword is part of her and she is seperated from it, then I could quite understand her need to retrieve it. The only similar thing I can compare this to is a sentient sword which dominated it's wielder. If the wielder lost the sword then they were single-minded in their determination to re-gain it or driven mad trying! Nice work. Regards - Rachel
19 Mar 2007:-) K. Anne Snell
The intrigue grows! Like someone else commented though, my one nitpick is that this chapter does start out a bit abruptly. It took me a minute to figure out who was speaking and who was thought dead. I'd maybe just add in a paragraph at the beginning about T'ralex's thoughts or something like that, just to help with the flow.
Reading back on other comments I see you switched T'ralex and Alorra from spouses to siblings. I suppose it's a moot point now, but I agree with you and Debra that there's no problem with a mage and abbot being married. Just because our Catholic Abbots can't marry doesn't mean an abbot in a different world can't. After all, Protestant clergy can marry.
I like how things are shaping up!
8 Nov 2007:-) Elizabeth Fitzgerald
Very dynamic. I think this had a much better flow than the Prologue. I suspect some of that was due to the increase in dialogue. I very much liked the interaction between T'ralex and his (now) sister. It brought a very human element to the story, along with Jeddun's 'adventure'.

I'm afraid I, too, found the beginning of this a bit abrupt. I think some of that was because this followed on very directly from the Prologue, where usually the Prologue is an event separated from the rest of the story by time (or sometimes perspective). So I didn't quite grasp immediately that we were in the same place and time.

And the chapter was entirely too short! You have an interesting group of characters collecting. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.
3 Apr 200945 Jo MBW
Love it, can’t wait for more. Um, my Pagan is showing - why can’t a priest be married? Wouldn’t bother me in the least.

Thanks again for inviting me to your group 2
--Jo from MySpace
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