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Erik Jensen

"Gorbag part 2" by Erik Jensen

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Gorbag had noticed the elven woman some time ago. The birds had informed him while he was making his second round of the day that a 'good biggie' had entered the forest. He had changed his course and picked up her scent. He had expected it to be one of the villagers, but instead he found the unmistakable scent of an elf. Feeling much more at ease at that, he had dropped the subject and returned to his chores.

When he returned to the clearing, he went through a few combat routines. He made it a point to take five routines a day at the least. Once done, he walked to the barrel of water and filled his iron canteen. He poured some of the water over his head and he drank the rest. Then he put his bow and arrows down by the target and went to sit down at his favourite spot in the middle of the clearing. Bumping to the ground he pulled his legs up until they were crossed. Then he let his head drop and seemed to fall asleep.

Actually, he was wondering. He had recently noticed two shadow elves poking about his little forest. They had left without finding his clearing, which had put him back at ease. But yesterday evening they had returned, this time searching more thoroughly. They must have found some of his tracks by now, he reasoned with himself. He shook his head slowly. Where there was one, there was bound to be more he lectured himself, and shadow elves had never liked orcs. Nor any other race or species for that matter. He tried to remember what kind of language shadow elves spoke, but it had slipped his mind. Well, he would try and talk with them if they came back. He had to be sure they were mean before he killed them. Yes. He patted his red piece of cloth reassuringly. He would be nice to them.

At this point the elven woman re-entered his thoughts. A few of the small birds landed on his head and shoulders and began chirping about the good biggie watching him. He mumbled his thanks to them with his rumbling voice and started thinking about what he should do about her.

Darenya had never seen anything like this. The birds landed on the orc with no fear at all, and unless she was mistaken, they were communicating! She had seen elves who could speak with plants and animals before, but never an orc. She gathered he must be some sort of shaman, and he had used his black magic to bind the birds to his will. She suddenly became anxious. If he controlled the birds, he might already know she was there. And if that was the case, maybe that peculiar way he was sitting was part of his preparations to cast a spell on her… She frowned, and prepared to move without giving away her position. She had to find somewhere to shoot from.

Gorbag's thoughts revolved around the elf. He knew most elves were not mean, but he also knew that most elves would consider him a foe, since he was an orc. He was afraid he couldn't really talk to her and explain that he was not mean himself, since he only spoke Orcish well, and only a smidgen of the common tongue. Most elves, he gathered, spoke Elvish. He considered that for a moment, and ended up reassuring himself that elves would speak Elvish. Whatever the case, he would have to find her before he could find out if she spoke Elvish. Yes. Or was that common? Well, no matter. To speak with her, he would have to be near her. Otherwise he'd have to shout. He considered shouting for her, but realized he didn't know what to shout. If she didn't know Orcish, how would she know what he shouted? All that thinking made his head spin. He decided to go look for her and let things happen however the may. He opened his eyes and got on his feet by lifting himself up effortlessly with his arms, placing his boots solidly on the ground and getting up. He always enjoyed doing that, it demonstrated that all four limbs were still working. He took a wild guess at where to find the elf and lumbered off to find her.

Darenya was a little relieved when the orc ran off without his bow and arrows. She decided to get a better look at it while she had the opportunity. She sneaked closer and examined the bow. It was apparently two bows attached by a single hilt. One bow was made of strong ash, a typical orcish bow. The other bow was made of steel and had a steel string. She wondered what kind of arrows the orc fired from that. The hilt was large enough to accommodate both bows, which would make the bow impractical to use for people with shorter fingers than orcs. She also noticed that the strings for the normal bow had steel reinforcements at the middle. She reasoned that this was to keep the claws from cutting the string on release. She crept back into the safety of the woods and started looking for a good spot to shoot from when the orc came back. If he sat the same way again, he would be exposing his neck. If she was lucky, the chain mail would be low enough in the back of the neck for her to shoot at something else than the thickly muscled and highly damage-resistant neck. Time would tell, and patience was a virtue she possessed. She had to make sure she did not make haste, since this orc would probably prove to be too much for her in an open fight.

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6 Dec 200245 Stephan P. Calloway
Hey guy - another great write. "...and it's dark in there" - it took me a while to stop laughing and actually get to the story, but sure glad I did. Progressing nicely, I can't wait to see what happens next!

:-) Erik Jensen replies: "  Gorbag is, of course, meant to be somewhat comical. I'm glad you enjoyed it."
8 Dec 2002:-) Emilie Aurora Finn
Oh I like this one! It's well-written and extremely interesting, Erik! Your descriptions are as vivid as ever, and your narrative flows very smoothly in this story. Hope there's another chapter coming soon!

:-) Erik Jensen replies: "Well, at the time you wrote this, there was no chapter coming. But now I think I should have the next one in the queue in a day or so. I don't know how the situation with the queue is, though. I haven't been around for the better part of a month."
9 Dec 200245 Lindsey Butler
I hope this is rather new because I haven't noticed it until today. It's great. I hope she doesn't kill him! I like Gorbag, he's interesting. His thought process reminds me of a child's but obviously a tad darker!

:-) Erik Jensen replies: "Yes, much darker. Let's just say, not very much about Gorbag is very bright."
15 Dec 2002:-) Segun Williams
I like this a lot. The best thing in my opinon, and the thing I must commend you for, is the expression of Gorbag's thoughts. You've entered his mind and allowed us to see what's going on in there in real time. It's almost like it's written in first person (because of the quality of the information we receive from his thoughts). I look forward to reading more about this atypical black orc.

:-) Erik Jensen replies: "And more there will be. Thank you for taking the time. "
3 Mar 2003:-) Louise Boucher
Gorbag is so cute! 1
You have done a very good job of integrating his thought process into the story - we can tell that he is thinking these things without you having to put a large sign above it saying 'Gorbag's thoughts', it is also easy to tell the difference between his voice and yours/the narrators, and Darenya's too.
To me Gorbag's thoughts seem very rational, one idea follows the other in a logical order. This makes me see him as methodical and ordered, if a little slow. Darenya seems much more irrational when compared to him, she jumps to wild conclusions about him and what he is doing where as he is concentrating on ways to make contact with her and find out what she is doing.
It's interesting that he is thinking about what languges elves speak since language is one of the ways that humans distinguish themselves from animals. By acknowledging that elves can speak he is saying that they are intelligent beings who he believes he can reason with and understand. Although Darenya seems to admire his fighting skill she is not prepared to think of him as an intelligent creature - she wants to know about him but so far it has not crossed her mind that she could just ask.
I'm intrigued by the significance of the red cloth, you just drop it into the story really well for the reader to pick up on (seems like a little detail to us but is obviously important to him) and it makes me want to read on and find out what it means to him. Hopefully we will find out.
Don't really have anything to criticise in this part (just letting you know how I interpret things), there are a couple of language errors but these are the same as in the first chapter (repeated sentence openings) so I don't really need to mention those.

:-) Erik Jensen replies: "... But you did anyway, and I thank you for that. At any rate, telling me what comes to mind as you read is also quite useful, since it helps me understand how I can provoke this or that thought. Thanks!"
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About 'Gorbag part 2':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Erik Jensen
 • Copyright: ©Erik Jensen. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Gorbag, Go, Look, Elf, Shadowelf, Think, Prepare, Shoot
 • Categories: Elf / Elves, Orc, Goblins, Trolls, Trollocs..., Warrior, Fighter, Mercenary, Knights, Paladins
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