| 20 Sep 2002 |  Anonymous |  Loading...I literally yawned my way through most of your work and I am sorry to say it wasn't fatigue that caused the reaction. You and your little circle of friends here are pathetic excuses for writers.  Erik Jensen replies: "Everyone seen it? Good... I'll leave it hanging here." | |
| 20 Sep 2002 |  C. Michael Martin | Loading... *slaps forehead* That's right! Your from Denmark. Well then I have to give kuddos to you for how well you have been doing. I had forgotten you didn't speak english normally. So apparently you must be doing something right. And also that will help on my critiques...(not going to soften them up or anything, but I'll understand better if you write something confusing.) By the way... what is the language of Denmark? (I know I'll sound stupid for this.) Is it Germanic? Erik Jensen replies: "Although German was used wide spread in Denmark in several periods during our old history, now we speak our own language: Danish. And no, that's not something ye eat.  Anyway, it's a mix of a lot of different languages, making it sound more than a little weird to outsiders (a lot like Dutch)." | |
| 30 Sep 2002 |  Aimee ' Igorina ' Duncan | Loading... Ah well, in regards to the above remarks, welcome to the wonderful world of creative writing...there's always somebody you can't please... For some reason I am put in mind of the ancient Spartans and Athenians of Greece as I read this creed. It had that same feel, that devotion to country, that love of the glory of battle. This is a great way to give your readers more of a insight to the mindset of the people that inhabit this world you have created Erik Jensen replies: "I've always been very inspired by ancient Greece. If there's a hint of that in here, I'm glad. I didn't mean for the Valorians to sound like they love battle, just that they accept hardship and death in defence of their country and principles." | |
| 18 Oct 2002 |  Segun Williams | Loading... I would not want to fight a Valorian, especially if he is defending his country. Their dedication reminds me of that of the Aiel (a race in Robert Jordan's Wheel of Time book series). I haven't read any of the other stories yet, but this is very good. I like it much. Their fire burns hot. (Oh, I think you should sick a Valorian or two on Anonymous, he'd do more than yawn...) Erik Jensen replies: " If only Anonymous would have taken the time to actually read anything, I'm sure he would have shown a little more respect, even if he did yawn. Thank you for the comment." | |
| 9 Mar 2003 |  Debra Lynn Turpin | Loading... I read this the other day, but didn't get all the way through the comments. Again, impressive! This is a very stirring Creed, as I'm sure, it's meant to be. Erik Jensen replies: "Thanks." | |
| 2 Apr 2003 |  Kelsie Hahn | Loading... This poem does have a unique feeling to it...like it's reminiscent of something I can't quite put my finger on...Ah well. It's probably archetypal or some such large word  And I really like the religion tie-in at the end. Nifty poem, and I will continue to enjoy your work. And I suppose I'll leave my 2 cents about Anonymous...At least have the guts to put a name with your insults, or better yet, don't post them at all. Constructive Criticism all the way Erik Jensen replies: "I'm glad you do and I'm glad you did. Anyway, the creed is probably built more or less consciously around other creeds, so it may be where the feeling is coming from." | |
| 31 Aug 2005 |  Kay Tabin | Loading... This creed definately does have a religious feel about it, but also sometime more powerful (if that's possible.) And this has definately sparked my interest in reading more about your word. The fact that someone else commented that you don't speak English as your first language makes me very impressed. You do have quite some skill with the english language. Very very nice. Definately sounds more like a professional writer's work than the average Elfwood inhabitant.  Erik Jensen replies: "Thank you kindly." | |
| 16 Jan 2006 |  D. 'Yolaron' Hendrikson | Loading... I guess I'll have to mimic everyone else in saying it was good, stirring. Makes you want to learn more about the people who say it. The last line didn't fit in my mind, for some reason. But I still liked it. Erik Jensen replies: "The last line puts the rest into its place. It's meant to be different and noteworthy. The first part talks of patriotism. The last line talks of religion.Thanks for the comment." | |
| 1 Oct 2006 | Lindsey M. Butler | Loading... I'm not sure why I never commented on this... I like it. It has a nice flow and the last line resonnates. Are you still writing about the Valorians at all? | |
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