|25 May 2001|| Krzystof Detemmerman|
Right. Although I didn't finished the story, I must say you could start using some comma's, hard returns, capital letters and .'s, because it's hard to read a good story like that, like that^, if you know what I mean^_
|21 May 2002|| Ludicrous Nutjob (aka Stacey)|
well you know what i think of it anyway so
lol i still wanna write a review to say it's marvellous.
Your writing talents make me insanely jealous mr fletcher but perhaps writers need a kick up the *ahem* to get them motivated, and one of the ways of doing that is by reading other people's literary works. so i shall grin and bear it, take up my sword (or perhaps my fountain pen) and prepare for battle right away! lol.
Lovely job! write more! send me more! grrrr
write about elves and dragons and things other-worldy! i'm sure that would be good too.
Twoddles! keep up the punctuation, man, it's like your best friend.
|18 May 2003|| Aperson|
not bad, it was pretty good. The only thing that I didn't like was the punctuation. That truly drove me carzy. Altogether I wanna read more of your stories and hope you improve upon your language grade
|23 Jul 2003|| Random person|
Hey, your story is really good, but....Next time try some paragraphs!
|24 Jul 2003|| Jester|
its good, though like "random person" said, Paragraghs would be a nice addition