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"Wrongs" by Jonathan D. Ciupek-Reed

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This is a little more depressing than the others.

"Wrongs"

It’s never wrong to have feelings for someone,

Never wrong to wish you could love someone,

But if it’s turned back to you,

Giving up you should never do.

It’s hopeless to love someone,

Unless you truly know someone,

They may turn their back to you,

But never believe it’s true.

And if you think you love someone,

Look closely at your life,

Can you live it without someone,

Or would it end without her light?

Date	Name	Comment
26 Jan 2002	Rogue	Loading... This describes my life so perfectly eheh keep it up
10 Apr 2002	Ely	Loading... very good....but one thing. Isn't it supposed to be fantasy in some way shape or form??
10 Apr 2002	Natalia <sis_of_skywalke	Loading... Wow! Being a poet myself I know good stuff when I see it. You are really talented and I think you should continue to write. Don't give up on it and don't listen if people say your poems are bad.
10 Apr 2002	Matthew Hart Akers	Loading... Well... this is not the place for personal commentary, so I'll keep that to myself. Your rhymes flow better, but your rhythm is still strained in a few places. Changing sentance structure was fine a hundred years ago, but for modern writing (As yours is, save for this aspect) should stick more to speaking grammer. It flows better in the mind and off the tongue, in my opinion.
12 Oct 2002	Siobhan 'cyber elf' Ball	Loading... I empathise with this poem, and ignore Ely, all self expression is fantasy.
18 Jun 2003	Anonymous	Loading... A very good poem. I hope you will put more up in the future.Best of luck to you.
12 Sep 2004	Kaushik 'Kazarelth' Narasimhan	Loading... Superb poem. I liked it. <Nothing more>

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