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"Wrongs" by Jonathan D. Ciupek-Reed

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This is a little more depressing than the others.
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"Wrongs"

It’s never wrong to have feelings for someone,

Never wrong to wish you could love someone,

But if it’s turned back to you,

Giving up you should never do.

It’s hopeless to love someone,

Unless you truly know someone,

They may turn their back to you,

But never believe it’s true.

And if you think you love someone,

Look closely at your life,

Can you live it without someone,

Or would it end without her light?

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26 Jan 200245 Rogue
This describes my life so perfectly eheh keep it up
10 Apr 200245 Ely
very good....but one thing. Isn't it supposed to be fantasy in some way shape or form??
10 Apr 200245 Natalia <sis_of_skywalke
Wow! Being a poet myself I know good stuff when I see it. You are really talented and I think you should continue to write. Don't give up on it and don't listen if people say your poems are bad.
10 Apr 2002:-) Matthew Hart Akers
Well... this is not the place for personal commentary, so I'll keep that to myself. Your rhymes flow better, but your rhythm is still strained in a few places. Changing sentance structure was fine a hundred years ago, but for modern writing (As yours is, save for this aspect) should stick more to speaking grammer. It flows better in the mind and off the tongue, in my opinion.
12 Oct 200245 Siobhan 'cyber elf' Ball
I empathise with this poem, and ignore Ely, all self expression is fantasy.
18 Jun 200345 Anonymous
A very good poem. I hope you will put more up in the future.Best of luck to you.
12 Sep 2004:-) Kaushik 'Kazarelth' Narasimhan
Superb poem. I liked it.
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