|11 Nov 2003|| Edana|
just beautiful... really, I love it
It's so full of emotion, it 's just really...
ow, I just can't say what I feel, but somehow I'm quite sure you know what I mean... don't you?
|13 Nov 2003|| Frida M. Bergkvist|
I love it! So full of emotions! I don't know how to describe it... just wonderful!
|9 Jul 2004|| John Smith|
On a quest for Avalon!!!! no wait.. Tanelorn. Nice but tough story. Joeri 'Jos' verheyden
replies: "quest for tanelorn...then i would steal the name of a already great song of blind guardian(anyone who dares to defy the power of blind guardian will deal with me)"
|17 Jul 2005|| Rochelle Leya Watts|
The sentiment is certainly clear. The flow of the piece is a little clunky, but I can see how that might add to it as it might an imitation of a man struggling along. The rhymes are nice, especially the way they are at the ends of lines but not overly stressed.
Just a few typos you might want to fix in an update:
"was to great" = too great
"theyr" = their
"strongest steal"= steel
"with wich"= Which
"elven girls love"= elven girl's love
"hor her"= for her
so hard and cold.."= a steel