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K. Anne Snell

"The Quilt of Night" by K. Anne Snell

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A poem inspired by an experience I once had, though it wasn't nearly as dramatic or emotional in real life as it is here, and I've quite gotten over it.
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I loved you once beneath a moon

That never shone so bright

As at the hour I saw you first

Beneath the quilt of night

 

I saw you wandering ‘neath the trees

Along a path alone

You sang a song raised to the sky

And all the stars they, they shone

 

And in your eyes I saw a flame

Like sun-rays on the sea

I gazed into your eyes of gold

And glimpsed eternity

 

You walked along the riverbed

Washed in the moon’s clear light

While I above stood watching you

Beneath the quilt of night

 

I loved you then in halls of stone

In halls of gold and green

Beside the river’s ancient shore

Before the mountain’s sheen

 

Your laughing eyes and gentle soul

Were all my heart’s delight

Yet you were but a dream for me

Beneath the quilt of night

 

You never looked into my eyes

Or saw what dwelt therein

And everything we had was done

Before it could begin

 

We never danced ‘til morning came

Or wandered in the wood

You never held me in your arms

Because you never could

 

She loved you more than life itself

And you could not withhold

The loving passion and the joy

Of all that your heart told

 

I cried for you, you heard me not

And how could you have known

For she was all the world to you

And I was left alone

 

You wed her on a day of gold

To both your hearts’ delight

And I took to the winding road

Beneath the quilt of night

 

I loved you still beneath a moon

That cast long shadows dark

I crossed the hills and valleys on

Some journey to embark

 

The years and miles stretch behind

My path, it still goes on

Away from you and all I knew

When I first heard your song

 

Until love comes again my way

And all things are made right

Until that time my heart still rests

Beneath the quilt of night

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22 Feb 200445 C. Penny
I loved it! I like the way you caught the love and loss, and tied them together, to create a somewhat wistful poem.
22 Feb 200445 D Joelle Duran
What a wonderful, stirring poem! The 'halls of stone' and nature imagery gives it a Tolkienesque feel, but this is no copy. Deliciously melancholy and wistful, wonderful rhyme and rhythm--a real delight. You convey the grief of the 'outsider' very well.

:-) K. Anne Snell replies: "I'm glad you think it sounds Tolkienesque; it's actually inspired by the life of a character I used in a Tolkien-based roleplay (whose life was inspired by my own...), so that's kinda what I was going for. "
27 Jul 2004:-) James K Bowers
Wonderful emotion and imagery... The rhyme & rhythm are wonderful, fading behind the story itself until one harly notices that this is a poem... A couple breaks in meter, but that is a minor flaw that pales in comparison to the overall effect... What an appropriate way to end your poem... After all, what is sadness without a glimmer of hope? Very impressive, very well done...

:-) K. Anne Snell replies: "Why thank you. I think that's one of the most eloquent comments I've ever received. I've never considered myself to be very good at poetry, but I'm glad you liked it. -- /K."
5 Aug 200445 Jamie A. Hughes
Ah, James Bowers has graced your shelf. You lucky girl! He's a real peach. I adore him. And I adore this poem. What a way to take something that every young person goes through and change it into absolute art! The few snags in rhythm are minor...very minor in fact. If you read it with a certain beat, they even vanish. I loved this...one of the best rhyming poems I've read in a long time. Huzzah to you baby girl!

:-) K. Anne Snell replies: "Why thank you! Maybe I should start writing more poetry. 2 Also, which lines break the meter? They all seem fine to me, but I'm sure that's just author's bias..."
5 Aug 2004:-) James K Bowers
Ahhh, well... You'd think a truly eloquent comment would have the word "hardly" spelled correctly, though, wouldn't you????
29 Sep 2004:-) Karolien V Burms
That's very nice! I loved it! And the rhyming was very good!
Very nice poem!
12 Dec 2004:-) Deborah Cullins Smith
Emotionally stirring, with just the right touch of melancholy, and yet still hopeful.... Oh what a beautiful poem! I love the visual effect of nightfall equated with a quilt. Makes me think of my Grandma's old wool-and-flannel quilt (which graces my own bed now)-- warm, heavy, dark... Every night I feel like Grandma's arms are holding me, rocking me to sleep. I get that embracing feeling from your poem. Loving and losing are major components in life -- though we all wish we could engage in the loving without loss. Once again, WELL DONE!

:-) K. Anne Snell replies: "I don't know if all writers have this problem, but I often hate my writing; it's so *common* to me. It's so nice and encouraging to know that other people enjoy it and get something from it. I've always considered this poem to be a tragic piece, but the images you brought up really helped me see the hope and warmth in it as well (isn't it grand when you see things in your own writing you didn't even know were there?). Thank you for commenting and for your appreciation!"
3 Nov 2005:-) Dan Shevock
Well, very emotional. My definition of a good poem is one that conveys emotion. You've succeeded there with this one. My favorite line is "Before the mountain’s sheen" probably because "sheen" is also a textile based word, like "quilt," and I love little connections in poetry. I see many other people have enjoyed, and commented on this poem, quite good.
25 Feb 2006:-) Larry N. Morris
Well, you have certaily been graced with some highly qualified commentors.

At last, another poet who who uses rhyming form and tells a story therein. Sadly, mine all end up being tragic ballads. Heh...
15 Oct 2006:-) Ester Peters
Wow, I feel so out of place, being the only artist who commented... -tear-

This is such a wonderful poem. I love the way you can have the meter perfect and the rhyming perfect and have the words perfect as well. My poems are screwish and I have to invent my own grammar to make them work.

Awesome work! Keep it up.
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'The Quilt of Night':
 • Created by: :-) K. Anne Snell
 • Copyright: ©K. Anne Snell. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Lost, Love, Romance, Sorrow
 • Categories: Romance, Emotion, Love
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