| 16 Oct 2000 |  Michelle Krantz | Hey, you've got a great beginning her. You've succeeded where I have failed in anpther place too; Your chapters have titles! ^_^ I'll be bac kto read more! | |
| 16 Oct 2000 |  Kirsten Cleigh | oops, i forgot to say Welcome to the Woods! {it's a tradition!} | |
| 16 Oct 2000 |  Kirsten Cleigh | Very nice start! I like the names, I was never good with names. You should watch your tense though, like past and present tense. I found a few places where is slipped from past to present. don't worry though, we all do that some times! put more of the story up! | |
| 28 Oct 2000 |  Megan Larson | Hi there! Nice start to your story. I like how you are having our world and the fantasy world both present, I am doing that in my own story. I am a bit bothered by the way Regeth speaks though, I don't think he would use the word "mom" for his mother. Also, maybe add a bit about the ceremony where he takes his father's position. I think it might give more insight to why Regeth thinks no one misses his father. Hope to see more soon! | |
| 4 Nov 2000 |  Sonnyroa | A most interesting site. I keep a picture of a buterfly fairy from a german painter seer. You remind me of her.
Keep it up.
Soyy | |
