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Debra L Kilman

"In the Shadow of Truth" by Debra L Kilman

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A great plague visited the Earth long before recorded history, wiping out many genetic traits. Slowly these genes have been re-awakening with man's evolution. (Maybe our scribbles hold more truth than we know....)
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In the Shadow of Truth

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            The year is 2096. Earth’s human population has carried recessive genes from their ancestors for centuries. As mankind has evolved they have slowly been re-awakening. A plague, long before recorded history, caused many great genetic traits to be buried deep within man. Or, what has always been considered to be “man.” Every now and again, a visionary comes along, writing truths that they only believe to be fiction. Little did they realize the accuracy of their words.

 

            Kat strode confidently through the chaos around her. Small explosions still burst here and there in the compound. Several buildings were on fire. It had been a small price to pay for finally catching up with this bunch of radicals.

            As Kat turned the corner of the last warehouse on the row, she saw her opponent being held between two men. “The crazy bitch was still spouting her propaganda,” Kat thought to herself. The woman continued to struggle, unaware of her approach.

            Kat’s mind flashed to the dark-haired man, so like this woman that she had just placed in the first vehicle heading back to Beck. He would be safe at the base until she could finish up here. He was so different from her. Always had been. She had been shocked to find him here and she was not easily surprised. It had been centuries since they had been in the same time.

            Kat pushed thoughts of him from her mind, his name “John”, echoing through every fiber of her being as she neared the woman and the guards holding her. She could hear the woman’s ranting as she drew closer.

            “They’re here I tell you! They’re among us. Why won’t you believe me?” The dark-haired woman screamed in frustration. She pulled back and forth between the men, trying desperately to gain her freedom. Her eyes were lit with the same fanatical fear that Kat had seen many times before.

            The woman suddenly noticed her approaching, stiffening up, eyes darting, trying not to look at Kat. Her chin quivered as she focused on Kat, speaking between gritted teeth. “You! You know, I know you do.” The woman narrowed her eyes accusingly, searching Kat’s face, trying to seek confirmation from her. Kat knew her face would not reveal any of the wanted information, whether what the woman said was true or not.

            Kat nodded to the young Lieutenant standing a few feet from the woman and her guards. He pulled a hypo from his pocket, uncapped it and slid the needle into the woman’s neck. It was only moments before the sedative took effect and she began to sag limply between her captors.

            “Ms. Tursten,” the Lieutenant addressed her.

            “Yes, Lieutenant Bixby?” Kat looked coolly at the officer. He was obviously a bit nervous, but he deserved an A+ for effort.

            He managed not to stammer as he spoke, handing her the comje he held. “We managed to download most of their files before they realized we were here and started blowing things up.”

            “Very good, Lieutenant. This is your first field mission, is it not?” she asked as she began perusing the information on the comje.

            “Yes, Ma’am.”

            “I thought so.” Kat felt him stand a little straighter since her eyes never left the comje. Years of working in this field kept her from smiling at the young man’s discomfort. Out of the corner of her eye, she noted her men placing the sedated woman into a waiting van. She would be taken to Beck for further interrogation. Kat knew from experience that she would probably learn more from the files in her hand than from the woman.

            “Where are the children, Lieutenant?” Kat still didn’t bother to look up as she questioned him.

            “They are on their way to Beck, Ma’am.”

            “Who are they with?”

            “Cranton and Dozier, Ma’am”

            Kat nodded. “Perfect,” she thought to herself. The children would be comfortable with them and that was important to her. She had sent John with Platt. Platt was the most loyal and trusted of her men. He had never questioned her orders and would not do so now.

            Kat finished her preliminary scan of the files. The information was not really new to her, although this group had managed to get closer than most, to the truth. The proof of that had been them finding the children and realizing that they were somehow significant. Luckily for them, they had not begun the “usual” experiments that most groups always conducted; even more lucky for them, not on these particular children. Kat suppressed a small smile as she thought of them. Her joy of their reunion would have to wait just a little while longer.

            Turning back to the matter at hand, she was pleased to see that the clean-up crew had arrived. They would erase any evidence of this day’s events, just as they always did.

 

            Kat looked out the window of the vehicle, not really seeing the pleasant scenery around her. Normally the view would calm her after a difficult mission. She had traveled this road many times, but this trip was so different.

            Her mind raced ahead in anticipation. She wondered if the young Lieutenant next to her could hear her heart beating in her chest. Soon, she would be reunited with her family. Her true family. She could only hope that they had some inkling of their pasts and who they really were.

            Kat had always had total recollection of her pasts. She was the only one that she knew of who had evolved that far. It had taken many lives for her knowledge to manifest itself.

            She fought against her body’s betrayal. It wanted to fidget and display other signs of impatience. Kat was too well trained for that. This young man beside her had no idea who she really was and she was too close to completing the first part of her objective to mess up now.

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28 Oct 200445 Stephan Calloway
::looks up at Becca's comment:: HOW DOES SHE DO THAT??? She manages to beat me time and time again ... ah well, I must be getting old.
I agree, this is an incredible glimpse into a new world. The possibilities are now endless ... what is man if not "man"?
If you don't write more on this soon - please promise you will keep it for a later time. This is TOO GOOD to let it slip away!
PS - thanx for letting me know it was up!

12 Debra L Kilman replies: "LOL - actually Becca is about 8 hours ahead of you, so she's awake earlier and checking out what's new in the Woods... (THAT'S how she does it! hehehehe)
Thank you for your support of this. I'm definitely keep it on a burner, although it might be a back one for now. I just had to get this bit down on paper so I wouldn't lose the initial composition. I do have plans for this, though.
Thanx for making your way over here so fast. I really wanted to know what everyone thought of this, since it is so different from what I normally write. Thanx!"
28 Oct 2004:-) Becca Lusher
Oh I like this. The tone is beautifully modulated, feeding out the smallest pieces of information at a time. I didn't see the reincarnation bit coming - i've been working with immortals for too long 12 - but it was a refreshing change. And now I am terribly curious!
It's a curse I tell you.
But I like this as a beginning and I'd love to know where it goes next - if you can take the time away from Deljin, which I don't blame you if you can't.
She's certainly interesting, this Kat, but even more intriguing is just what sort of things these rebels are spouting. Now *that* I really want to know.
*first comment dance to the more-please fairy*
Great beginning ^_^

1 Debra L Kilman replies: "Yay! I'm so glad that you like this! I realize its just a short little snippet, but this was just screaming to get out.
It does have somewhere to go - but, like Deljin - I just have to find time to take it there!
This is actually inspired by a dream that I had that just wouldn't go away. Very odd - and a bit surprising for me. Deljin usually occupies so much of my alternate reality time!
I'll definitely let you know if I can wrangle a bit more of this together. *smile* Thanx for the feedback."
29 Oct 2004:-) Sarah Colley
Oh! I love the attitude of Kat! She is great. I am, of course, a big sci-fi fan and anything in this genere is normally facinating to me. I like the idea of genes that are coming active again- a very interesting approach to take. Even in these few short pages I am curious about what is coming and already warming up to the main character (well, I guess I am assuming Kat is..). I would love to see more! Of course, not at the expense of Deljin though LOL I *need* to read the end of that one!

I think Che got all the nitpicks, so I won't bring them up again. I know it will become more polished when you go back and actually work on it for a length of time.

Oh, and I am working on a new one (well, actually, I took Wind, destroyed it, and am starting over, but same world..) that I will definately appreciate feedback on once it goes up.

:-) Debra L Kilman replies: "Thanks, Sarah, I appreciate your support of this. I really like Kat, but I don't have any plans to let her supercede Deljin! I never realized how deeply ingrained this storyline is within me until I started writing it.
Definitely have plans for this, oh, yes I do!
I'll wander over that way as time and net access permits. Right now my net is down and I'm having to borrow time elsewhere. I'll let you know when I get something else done, either on this or Deljin. *smile* c'ya soon."
29 Oct 2004:-) Frances Monro
Interesting voice, bit of a change from Deljin. I see the same fascination with genetics and evolution, rather like Frank Herbert, that.

:-) Debra L Kilman replies: "Definitely different from Deljin. I was a bit surprised by this. I guess I always have been fascinated by genetics and evolution, although I never realized how much until I saw your comment. *smile*
As always, I appreciate you taking time to drop by. You always give me great feedback and I have been excited to see the response on this. C'ya later!"
29 Oct 2004:-) Frances Monro
Nitpick #3:

A collection of awkward sentences forms a very awkward paragraph. Try reading your work out loud.

Suggestion:

Kat finished her preliminary scan of the files. The information was not really new to her, although this group had managed to get closer to the truth than most. That they had found the children and realized that they were somehow significant was proof of that. Luckily for them they had not begun the “usual” experiments that most groups conducted, not on these particular children. Kat suppressed a small smile, thinking of the children. The joy of their reunion would have to wait just a little while longer.

:-) Debra L Kilman replies: "I was in a hurry, so I didn't read it out loud. I knew there was something off about this, but couldn't put my finger on it and honestly didn't take the time too. Thanx bunches, Che. I'll fix it. *smile*"
29 Oct 2004:-) Frances Monro
Nitpick #2:

Kat finished her preliminary scan of the files. The information was not really new to her, although this group had managed to get closer than most, to the truth.

Poor commerization. Try:

Kat finished her preliminary scan of the files. The information was not really new to her, although this group had managed to get closer to the truth than most.

:-) Debra L Kilman replies: "*smile* Yep, right again!"
29 Oct 2004:-) Frances Monro
Nitpick #1:

Kat’s mind flashed to the dark-haired man, so like this woman that she had just placed in the first vehicle heading back to Beck.

Subject confusion - Is Kat referring to the man or the woman?

:-) Debra L Kilman replies: "hi there! You know how horrid I am at proofing my own stuff... It IS confusing - thanx for pointing this out. *smile*"
21 Jul 2005:-) Ray Arquette
I can see you haven't had any comments in a while, so I figured I'd add one. I always like getting comments on a neglected story, (I have a few of those,) so, here goes.

Meet Nitty. *points at fuzzy Nitpick, looking folorn* Usually I leave a bunch of these guys around, but it seems that most of what I had to say has already been said. So, Nitty here is gonna be lonely today, 'cause I only noticed one thing that isn't listed above.

"It had been centuries since they had been in the same time."

What exactly does this mean? It's not real clear. I think more explanation is definitely needed at this point... Keeping the mystery alive is good, but this sentence is just confusing.

That said, I think it's a great concept. Of course, since I'm studying paleoprimatology, the whole genetics and evolution gig is right down my alley, but it's still good. More?

:-) Debra L Kilman replies: "Hello to you and Nitty! I appreciate ANY comments... *smile*
I'll take another look at that line, as I tend to throw things in knowing what they mean, but forget that others probably do not.
This is actually on the back burner for a while, do to being busy with major re-editing on Deljin. Deljin is my first love and major work, so it tends to take precedence over every thing else. Thanx for the comment on this though, I really like the concept, so I will be working on it eventually."
4 Aug 200645 Sliver Dragon Tiger
wow! Great start i love this story by the way. i think you need to continue it though. i know people who loves to read stories alot. i think i should tell them about Elfwood. i also write stories and draw but i am only 15. people says my stories are not good enough for them but i try ignore them. you really should continue this story. i have a story called deadly ghost camper but i am to afraid to let people read my stories now a days.

:-) Debra L Kilman replies: "Thank you so much! I was very hesitant to allow others to read what I write. Elfwood has done quite a bit to help me become a better writer.
Honestly - this is on a "back burner" right now, though I won't completely give up on it. I'm currently working on a project for a writer's group that I'm in (the Herscher Project), as well as doing a final edit for book 1 of my Deljin series.
I would gladly look at anything you would care to send me that you have written. Writing grows as you grow, if you love it - don't give up on it."
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'In the Shadow of Truth':
 • Created by: :-) Debra L Kilman
 • Copyright: ©Debra L Kilman. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Evolution, Genes, Genetic, Reawakening
 • Categories: Extrateresstial, Alien Life Forms, Romance, Emotion, Love, Techno, Cyber, Technological
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