Elfwood is the worlds largest SciFi & Fantasy community.
  - 119886 members, 0 online now.
  - 24925 site visitors the last 24 hours.

 

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
Kimberly A. Bennett (a.k.a Moon_Fox)

"Eyes" by Kimberly A. Bennett (a.k.a Moon_Fox)

SciFi/Fantasy text 17 out of 39 by Kimberly A. Bennett (a.k.a Moon_Fox).      ←Previous - Next→
 
Tag As Favorite
 
This story was based on a picture of an eye done by a friend mine named Jonathan. I just made a small comment about it and it took off from there. Thanks for the inspiration. ;)
Add Bookmark
Tag As FavoriteComment
←- Expired | Fear it' -→
In the utter darkness, the fire blazed, lonely in the shadowed night. Behind the fire were eyes that held an anger, hard to control. Queues of twisted light sparked in the mirrors of sight. They were watching, waiting for the time to slay. Some time before, they were a river, streams ran from each. The rushing rapids were agony formed by deception.

There was a time when the eyes lit up the world, a sun for those who orbited around them. Glistening rays of ecstasy filled meadows of optimism. The shadows were not an eclipse, they were only a shade in which to lay on the cool grass underneath. Bright and free, free to do what ever they pleased.

Clouds began to engulf the sky, the sovereignty was trapped in a barrier of fog. They were no longer independent, but shifted, watching everything. They had been ill-treated, and the torment was apparent. The shade which had once been a sanctuary, was now a place to be watched carefully, closely.

The eyes were lifeless now, there was no emotion. They barely opened to see the beauties of the storm, they only saw the sinister. Dusk blocked all waves of illumination, a black hole taking rapture. Slowly, the dark consumed all that was once remaining.

The rage now took over, the fire. The look that makes children hasten in fear. The blood that inhabits you in vile nightmares. The suffering of your heart, when you are deceived. The insanity that harbors your mind, against vitality and determination. The gaze that embraces your soul, picking it apart with nothing but pure curiosity.

No one helps the pain, no one makes it go away. It gets worse, the wind prowls up, swallowing everything in its path. Nothing is safe anymore. It is all lost, the sanity, the light, the tranquillity, all departed. Lost in the bleakness of it all, lost to vengeance that was meaningless, only to cause rupturing pain.

The eyes are gone and the sun burnt out, long since after those who orbited were destroyed. The last flicker of flame was blown out by a cool metal and thrown across an impressible flower, falling limply to the soil of the expired land. The eyes were left open, staring unabashedly into the starry night, now grieving for its mistake.

←- Expired | Fear it' -→

DateNameComment 
8 Nov 2001:-) Lindsey Crawford
-=does the first comment dance, if she still has the first comment spot=- IIIII loved it! Very impressed. Brilliantly executed. Nice job. Fragmented sentences. Huw-ee.
8 Dec 200145 Jay
Great work KIMMEY!!! lol... Im not a stickler for Stories and Writing, but the Eyes story was excellent, I couldnt keep my eyes off of it! EXCELLENT WORK!!! Keep it up Kim, youre going to be a good one. Maybe even better then Stephen King! Girl, your gonna make movies, write books, and become very sucessfull, and very famous, if you keep up the good work! And the site itself is GREAT!!!!!!! Keep up the good work!!!! Sincerely, Youre friend... Jay!
15 Jan 200245 Josiah 'Jos' Petroff
This is very creative, the whole concept of getting the idea for this over a picture of eyes is just amazing. I don't know if I could do that, but I'm sure I could be inspired by something other people wouldn't be inspired by.
oh well
8 Aug 200445 Raven's Wing
WOW, just WOW. I'm awestruck.
Not signed in, Add an anonymous comment to this guestbook...    

Your Name:
Your Mail:
   Private message? (Info)



'Eyes':
 • Created by: :-) Kimberly A. Bennett (a.k.a Moon_Fox)
 • Copyright: ©Kimberly A. Bennett (a.k.a Moon_Fox). All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Eye, Sparks, Visions
 • Views: 446

Bookmark and Share



More by 'Kimberly A. Bennett (a.k.a Moon_Fox)':
A homicide of Liberation'
Blood Moon
I should have said 'die'.
Ever Wondering
Image
Dark Lashes; Death in the Stars

Related Tutorials:
  • 'Building Stronger Story Themes' by :-)Timothy Pontious
  • 'Character Creation Form' by :-)Crissy Gottberg
  • 'Writing Lycanthropy' by :-)Jeff Burke
  • Art Education Finder...
  •  
     

    Elfwood™ is a site for Fantasy and Science Fiction art and stories created by Thomas Abrahamsson and helpful assistants and moderators, owned by the Elfwood corporation.

    [More...]