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Kimberly A. Bennett (a.k.a Moon_Fox)

"Glass of Red Wine" by Kimberly A. Bennett (a.k.a Moon_Fox)

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I was bored so, I said, ' Maybe I'll write a short story.' So I did and I kinda like the outcome of it.
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Darkness chokes shadows into obliteration. No light of hope illuminates our world, now in devastation and ruins. We promenade slowly, our eyes never blinking. Our hearts hammer, and our souls howl. Never in our most baneful dreams, would any of us imagine what was now set before our eyes. Vile were the beings who betrayed us. Our King was deceived by foul creatures, first appearing admirable.

We are a triad, potent with power. Another mission had distracted us from the problems on this planet. We were away, on an order from the king. We returned to find bloodshed, spilled over the soil. As if a drunken man had spilled red wine all over our grounds.

We are now scavenging through the debris, looking for any signs of mortality. Cayin and Birdera are lurking behind me, and I hear Birdera’s low whispered warning “ Serio.” The villains, an alien race of Kaseya. Their leader grimaces at me, and I smirk back. They look similar to us, but the third arm gives them away, extruding from their bosom.

Their eyes stare into mine, compelling me. I try to control my self, but my saneness is quickly slipping away into their eyes. We the Triangle, are strong warriors. We were born at the same time, but from different wombs. I, a master of the sword, have muscular arms, but am not broad. I, with my dark hair, and my alerting red eyes. Birdera, master of archery, has long ebony hair, and glowing violet eyes. Cayin, strong and well built, has only short swords and mastery of strength to protect him. His raven hair falls to his shoulders, matching his menacing dark eyes.

The enemy shrieks a war cry. We know what we must do. We charge, tearing and spilling the wine from the glass over and over again. The blood is flowing, it’s in the air and water. My sword slices another’s head off, flinging it behind me. I then rip out his heart, making sure he has perished. There are heads and body limbs all around us. We are out numbered. I turn in time to see Birdera’s neck snapped, and the monster rip out her beating heart as I had done to many of his kind. Cayin saw also, and blind with rage, he charges the leader. “No!” I shouted. The spear goes through him despite my wishes. Controlled by my insanity I burst, flames burn from every cell that creates me. I am truly on fire, praying for all those I kill, and those I’ve lost.

Energy bursts from my body and extinguishes every living thing. I am now alone, my worst fear realalized. The beating of my heart brings me back to sanity. When the Triangles die they are reborn. That is all my mind tells me. Maybe it is an omen. My heart beats faster, and faster. My sanity is at the brink. I can not take it anymore! The annoyance! The fact that my heart beats and Birdera’s and Cayin’s do not! I slide my sword from out it’s sheath to let the last of the red wine rain upon the earth.

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31 May 200145 Megan 'Ciri' Larson
Ooh... chilling ending. I like it.. would like to see it fleshed out more but of course it is only a short story hehe. One thing I noticed. In the start of the story it looked like you had some tense problems, using past and present tense at the same time. But it seems you got it worked out by the middle or so. Nice work 2 And good title!
31 May 2001:-) Barry M Closser
*picks jaw up from floor*......*blink*.....Kim that was great *clap clap clap*....*jaw drops back to floor*....*thump*
31 May 2001:-) J. King
A few sentence fragments and mis-used commas, but an altogether good read. I don't think I'll ever master formal speech patterns. My writing is always more familiar.
14 Jun 200145 Georgina Gibson
This is a truly great story! What would be even better would be to see you elaborate on it, cos you could make this into a really powerful piece of work!
14 Jun 200145 Amanda
yay Kim! *gets her jaw off the floor* great story
26 Jun 200145 Dark Wolf of Golgothia
Very good, you have a very good talent... and the story is very good... very, very good... aww heck I loved it!
27 Jul 200145 Tera Mashell
At first, I didn't want to read it... but you said I could sing to you if you let me, so I did. And I loved it! The wording ... the action... oh, heck... it was stupendous! Keep up the good work!!!
30 Jul 200145 Avaz AKA Alex
Heyha Kimmypoo. WOW. this is one of the better story concepts that I've seen thus far.
I do have one small concern.. In the beginning, I kindasorta got the impression that it was a space-type backgrounded theme, but by the middle, it had changed. Just curious which it was in fact.... oh yeah, and if you need help stretching this out into a much larger, chaptered story.. you know who to see.. (awriter) hehehe.. or me, I've been known for killer plots too. *whines* but i ddont have a gallery or shelf to show off! 8
Okies, see ya in #loth. ^_^

:-) Kimberly A. Bennett (a.k.a Moon_Fox) replies: "Yeah, it's in space."
11 Aug 2001:-) Daniel Krax
I needn't add much to what is already written. Just the tiny little bit. There's one thing I would like to note, though. Since the story title kinda deceived me, with such a colourfull title I actually expected it not to be a short story, but rather a poem. That's already what I like to suggest, the story could wield great power in a more poetic form. (Yet I even think that writing a whole novel out of it could be easier 2
8 Oct 200345 Cayin
OMG!!! how did you come up for the name Cayin! i came up with that three years ago and I always use it!!! everyone calls me by it too!
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'Glass of Red Wine':
 • Created by: :-) Kimberly A. Bennett (a.k.a Moon_Fox)
 • Copyright: ©Kimberly A. Bennett (a.k.a Moon_Fox). All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Death, Triangle, Wine
 • Categories: Extrateresstial, Alien Life Forms, Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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