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Kirstin Linnenkoper

"Black Heart" by Kirstin Linnenkoper

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It's about a warrior that, even after vanquishing all his enemies, still feels unsatisfied. He only lives when his sword is charging...
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An angry heart is paved with rage

Refusing to give in

Staring back through the mirror of revenge

No more battles left to win

A shadow has covered the lonely path

The warrior has to stroll

Fighting the demons of his dark past

Only alive when blood will flow

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30 Jun 200745 Dagger
That was deep. I loved it a lot! I like how you told how the warrior felt when he killed people.
26 Sep 200745 CharlesLawrence
You know i have to say that i may not be a warrior so to say but i often feel the same way this guys dose. This poem has really stuck with me beacuse i understand what thats al about if this is a representation of you then i have to say im sorry for that it sucks but on a brighter side that was a great poem =)
16 Jan 200845 Rin
Me likey! very impressive, and creative!
13 Apr 2008:-) Michael Angelos Lusis
Really nice poem. Actually, it kinda gave me an idea for a story, which I will hopefully start writing soon. 1
15 Apr 2008:-) Parker Lee Davidson
Bravo, very well written, short but to the point. It is also quite remarkable how in such a short time one can get to know the character so well. Because somewhere in all of us there is a soul that craves for the blood he did, we all want revenge. But only few of us receive it!
15 Apr 2008:-) Laura zilla sarson
and there is such a thin line between the fight for good and evil. what moment did he become a bad guy?
created by the forces of nature to deal with grusome monsters in the past, he has become one of them. and someone will have to become a murderer by killing him, perhaps the cycle will never end.
23 Apr 200845 Anon.
cool
29 Apr 2008:-) Joseph CoffinJoe Gilbert
Cliche, nothing special.

Id like to see you develop this character and make him your own.
Perhaps in a short story? 2

I CHALLANGE YOU!
17 Oct 200845 Acadia
I am writing to, and your work inspires me. That was probably one of the best poem I have ever wrote!1
17 Oct 200845 Acadia
Sorry about writing "wrote". I meant "read". I do that a lot
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'Black Heart':
 • Created by: :-) Kirstin Linnenkoper
 • Copyright: ©Kirstin Linnenkoper. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Battles, Warfare, Warrior
 • Categories: Fights, Duels, Battles, Warrior, Fighter, Mercenary, Knights, Paladins
 • Views: 1609

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