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Cara ´Empress of the Universe´ Jackson

"Into Thin Air" by Cara ´Empress of the Universe´ Jackson

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A short story, very different from my usual bent. *shrugs* kinda melancholy...
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I walk in the woods, listening to the birds sing and the brook bubble its laughing, cheerful way through the trees. I see the squirrels running through the branches and disappearing into the green-gold twilight of the leaves. I feel the wind blowing through me like I'm not even there. Of course, I'm not.

I'm here, and not here. I am a specter, a shade, a poor shadow of what I once was. Not a ghost. To become a ghost you have to die, and I never did. I just faded away to almost nothing, faded away in the city, the choking, close city, where the light never shines, but all too brightly. Faded away in the box which was my home. Faded away...

Sometimes I remember what made me fade, what was so horrible there that it forced me to lose pieces of myself one by one... but even those memories are fading.

I remember... I remember a man. My... my father. How he hated me after Mom died... how he hated the sight of me. I remember the closet, the dark hole, that I was locked away in, fading in the inky darkness, wasting away.

But the darkness was better than the light. Nothing ever happened in the dark. Then the door would open and the stabbing light would pierce through my brain, and...

People at school often asked about the bruises. I couldn't tell them. He would kill me if I did. Eventually they stopped asking. I faded from their lives as completely as I faded from their world, and they didn't notice when I was gone.

And go I did. Eventually there was no substance left to me. I was nothing but a shadow, perhaps even less than that. I slipped through the closet door, and I was free. Nothing, not even a body, held me to that place.

They thought I disappeared into thin air. It wasn't true, not exactly. I am the air now. The air and the trees and especially the shadows. The wind blows through me, and I am the wind. I see the squirrel leaping, and I am the squirrel. I am the birds and the butterflies, the frogs and the snakes, the sky and the earth. I hear the creek, and I am the creek, cheerfully burbling away.

But sometimes I remember.

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14 Sep 200345 RandomCynic
Character** tsk, excuse my typos, it's still early to me!
14 Sep 200345 RandomCynic
Very cute story, very sad too. I like how you portray the chracter and their sad life; its a very original idea to have one just fade away. If you took more time to describe the settings with crisper language, it would benefit the story greatly. I mean if you had the clear happiness of the forest compared to the cramped dark of the closet. Also, you might want ot mention something to the means of the character only going out at night because the light still frightens him/her. You are excellent at an introduction and conclusion; a thing which most beginning writers leave out completely. I wanted to read on after the first sentence. Very good work, Cara, keep it up!
7 Dec 2003:-) Chris A Jackson
Very good, and very sad. I hope this doesn't come from personal experience. You have a knack for provoking emotion with very few words. Hold on to that. Never let go. It took me years to come even close, which is why I never wrote short stories until recently...

Well done!

:-) Cara 'Empress of the Universe' Jackson replies: "Ah... no. No personal expirience. People always seem to think it does, though... *shudders at recolections of time after turning this in as a school asignment* T'anyrate... thanks!"
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'Into Thin Air':
 • Created by: :-) Cara ´Empress of the Universe´ Jackson
 • Copyright: ©Cara ´Empress of the Universe´ Jackson. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Abuse, Fade, Father, Gorl, Shadow, Shadows
 • Categories: Ghosts, Ghouls, Aparitions, Urban Fantasy and/or Cyberpunk, Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic
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