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"To Elude Thanatos" by Charity ´Leiko´ Koone

SF&F Picture 4 out of 5 by Charity ´Leiko´ Koone

A poem of Death and Life, ment to be both entertaining and thought provoking.

To Elude Thanatos

The blood stands cold no longer pumping
Through veins the heart no longer thumping
The chest someone’s blindly bumping
Life has fled the body

Vision seen through sightless eyes
The body moves, begins to rise
This resurrection I despise
The dead shall walk at midnight

Bloated body, belly distended
Your time on earth has never ended
Now destroy what you once defended
The road leads on to morning

A putrid face looks to travel
Filthy tattered cloth, unravel
Undead feet drag through gravel
Horrors stalk the highway

Cadaver pulse with gross infection
Desiring Thanatos upon reflection
Point the Horror in Death’s direction
Eternal Life, a Curse

←- Rebirth | Travel by Moonlight -→

Date	Name	Comment
7 Nov 2003	Yuri Mataev	Loading... Yay! At last, a poem that rhymes and makes sense (neither of which you see very often. I mean, come on, a poem that doesn't rhyme has to make sense, at least...) Anyways... Really good job! Well written with good imagery, good verse and a good point.
7 Nov 2003	Matthew T. Summers	Loading... A very good poem, the imagery is spookily disturbing and brings the right scene to mind. Very nicely done.. And I'm not one to normally like poetry, mind you. Congrats on Mod's Choice. >Matt
7 Nov 2003	Jamie A. Hughes	Loading... Climbs a telephone pole near the highway EEeww! Really, this is unsettling to say the least! For some reason, the rhyme scheme reminded me of "The Raven" by Poe. The rapping, tapping, napping feel of it I guess. The rhyme is great and the meter only deviates slightly in two places--trust me I can't do rhythm this well. I honor anyone who can. Well done! I'm proud to share the Mod's Choice slots with you!!! Can't wait to read the rest of your library!
8 Nov 2003	Alima	Loading... That's excellent!!!!!!!!
10 Nov 2003	Miguel Francis Ettema	Loading... Congrats on the MOd's choice, and some nice rhyming here Very graphic and sensational. Keep Writing!
9 Feb 2004	Anonymous	Loading... Your poems are really lousy....Pathetic rhyme and horrible vocabulary...
18 Oct 2005	K. ´Karahatay´ Fink	Loading... I hate leaving comments about other comments, but the anon. commentor who claims that this piec is lousy is an idiot who doesn't know there's more to poetry than perfect rhymes! Now, to comment on the poem - it's a beautiful poem with amazing imagery and such unusual vocabulary. it's so nice to hear words again that have yet to be worn out. Wonderful job!
2 Oct 2006	Dragonsluver	Loading... I HEART it! Your vocabulary use is so unique! Your verses also keep the same rhythm, but say what you want them to! A daunting feat for a poet! Anyways, great job! Side Note: To anon., poetry DOESN'T have to rhyme! If you research the topic, you will find that it doesn't have to have a set meter or style!
31 Oct 2006	Piper Anne Hurtherly	Loading... Your imagery is really powerful. I'm jealous - I suck at meter. Good job and congrats on mod's choice!
6 Apr 2008	Jake Phoenix Beasley	Loading... I always knew eternal life was a curse. Ask Jack Harkness... Anyway, an interesting view on the afterlife or undeath, which you prefer. I personally prefer the stories to the poems, but this isn’t bad...
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