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"The Loss of Magic" by Kortnee Bryant

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This is the story of the reason the goddess of magic took her 'blessing' away from the people of Ccchansy.
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The Loss of Magic

 

I sing a song of jealousy that makes the blood run cold.

I sing a song of hate that is centuries old.

The gods are petty and full of greed and punish when they can

And the god of magic worst of all punishes the race of man

 

How does a good god reward for hate

And punish one for the sins of another

Such a shrew should be punished too

For sending her man to another

 

I sing a song of danger for all who worship one.

I sing a song anger for a love that has long gone

For all who love a goddess, magic never works

Because the goddess of magic has a heart that hurts

 

How does a good god reward for hate

And punish one for the sins of another

Such a shrew should be punished too

For sending her man to another

 

I sing a song of jealousy and a song of anger too

I sing the song of hate of one woman by a shrew

I sing a song of love of a woman for a man

I sing a song of pain with consequences without end

 

How does a good god reward for hate

And punish one for the sins of another

Such a shrew should be punished too

For sending her man to another

 

 

Nightingale

 

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23 Sep 200345 Burgion
I love it! That's the work of a real bard. I only wish my work to be that captivating some day.
-Burgion
27 Nov 200545 Maddie
Nice poem! It's quite hard to come up with things like this because you always need to make things rhyme; but you also have to make the tone graceful and ballerina like... There are so many things you have to take notice of. * makes a face and sighs * But you've done it perfectly, though I think the chorus is repeated too many times. I know it is supposed to be like that but it makes a little bit boring. Maybe you could make all the verses longer, or put the chorus every two or three verses. The poem was really, really, really, really, really, really good, and you've also got very good ideas. I liked it a lot!!!!! <^.^>
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'The Loss of Magic':
 • Created by: :-) Kortnee Bryant
 • Copyright: ©Kortnee Bryant. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Bitch, Magic, Nightingale
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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