You should work more on proper pucuation; sentences without commas and differentsentences not seperated by periods make the reader have to stop and think, which makes the story less appealing.

Anne J. Halsmer replies: "I'm working on it...but thxs for telling me^^"

Your works run smoothly and give the reader an excellant picture of what you want. Please bring more.

Anne J. Halsmer replies: "thxs^^"

Hey,
I'm writing more about Sammi but i really have no way of putting it up on here yet because i have no internet at home. I'll try my best to get it up on here once more of it is finish. lol. i'm actually beating myself up over it while trying to write something that hopefully you will like. I mean i didnt expect it to go far, it was really just a short story assignment that i did in 8th grade and my english teacher didnt even like it. *shrugs* i was wondering if i could have you e-mail so that i could make talking to you easier...cuz i can e-mail using my phone once i get it back. anyway thanks for your support with the story i'm glad that someone likes it.

Hi Anne! ^-^ Glad you’re writing; you do a great job creating atmosphere... Anyways, wherever you are and whatever you’re doing, good luck and best wishes! Love you!

(sorry if I posted this twice)

Anne J. Halsmer replies: "thxs alot^^ *looks thoughtful* I wish I knew who this was...lol"