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M. B. Savchovska

"Hail unto holy charge!" by M. B. Savchovska

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Once upon a time there was an elf called Elantine who led the elves into a hopeless war.... but it's a long story. Well, most people say this rhyme is one of their favourite ones, so I hope you'll enjoy it.
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I could stay alone
There, on the lonely cliff
While the others would atone
The sins of those who live beyond the reef.
But my heart can’t bear
That blame means nothing for the men,
And that they’ll never care,
Because I knew that they are vain.

 

And now the battlefield I walk again
To deny that we are all insane.
Fight!” I called
In heat and cold,
As we are all together now
United by a sacred vow
We shall win
And their sin
Humans finally shall pay
For their flesh upon the ground shall lay!

 

I watch my people,
Only dreams still keep their faith,
Under songs of seagull
To their victory or their death.
I know – upon me
The blame of their death will be,
But if I don’t go
Another blame will drag me low.
So, sadly all them I will lead
Of the evil in the very seat,
of humanity to end the foul taint,
That is why we’ll fall into the sand.

 

Hope, my brethren, even if
The hope is only lie,
But today we should be stiff,
And proudly there we should die.
Let all the comint children
Remember us and our deed,
Let mighty time their tear drain,
Let history again, and once again they read.
So our sacrifice won’t be forgotten,
And from us our kin shall learn,
’Cause only memories cannot be stolen
Let our legacy to memories be turned.

 

So, charge, my friends, let’s kill ‘em all!
A war we wage,
We’ll break the cage,
Let our enemies forever fall
For our blood and our pledge!
No more our future they will steal
’Cause we now see,
And we’re all free,
And not in vain I’ll die by steel.
Farewell, my brothers, I hail thee!....

←- Tears of the Black Rose | To the kin (Epilogue to WoR) -→

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9 Mar 2004:-) Nicole Poweleit
Hmmm... another spiffy poem. I have just one suggestion to you here. In the first verse where you say reef, I would change it to rift. It doesn't change the meaning any and although it doesn't actually rythm, it still kinda makes it flow better... at least I think so, you may not.

:-) M. B. Savchovska replies: "10x for the suggestion, I'll think of this...."
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About 'Hail unto holy charge!':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) M. B. Savchovska
 • Copyright: ©M. B. Savchovska. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Elven, Lost, War, Vs, Human
 • Categories: Elf / Elves, Fights, Duels, Battles, Warrior, Fighter, Mercenary, Knights, Paladins
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