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Emma-Jane C. Smith

"The Saktish" by Emma-Jane C. Smith

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“Next you’ll be saying that slavery is not fair,” laughed Sarifi into Niksa’s face. He was always like that to her. He liked to follow her as she did her chores, gloating of his fortune of acquiring her. She did not exist except to be a possession, she was only another useful pair of hands to do his bidding. He had the power of life and death over her for he held her Saktish, the stone that held her soul.


As Sarifi walked away chuckling to himself, Niksa’s eyes flashed with a dangerous hatred. She went back to raking the leaves off the soft wet grass and imagined in her mind, how to rid herself of him forever. She knew that this would never happen and all her childhood dreams would come to naught. His power over her was a lurid landscape of darkness. He hurt her, he tortured her, and yet she could do nothing but wish to the moon, which rose in the sun’s shadow.


Niksa looked around her at the damp autumn leaves. They made her feel full of life, even though she was shrouded in another’s will. She always liked the autumn; it made her feel at peace, at peace with a hope that the future will aid her in her struggle for freedom. Only Sarifi could make that peace evaporate as he had proved again that afternoon. She dreaded to think of the next torture he would impart upon her. She shivered, the air had turned cold at her thoughts.


Sarifi prided himself on his possessions, the house most of all. It had been Niksa’s father’s house before Sarifi came to own it. Its stone walls were intricately carved into shapes by her father’s chisel. It had taken her father and his friends a lifetime to complete. There still lay however, one area that was uncompleted. Her father and all those who knew the craft of stonemason had passed away many years before. Only Niksa hid her talent, she could mould that last, final piece, but she would not do it whilst the evil Sarifi own it just as he owned her soul.


Niksa let out a sigh. She missed her father more deeply today but she couldn’t understand why. Perhaps remembering the past had caused it, those happy days when her father played hide-and-seek in the garden. She was the only thing her father had prided more than his house. To his mind, not even the great stone staircases rivalled the beauty of his daughter.


“Where have you been?’ Sarifi demanded as she entered the house.


“I had not finished the raking m’lord,” Niksa said respectfully as not to incur his wrath further.


“You will be punished for your tardiness later,” he flashed her a smile of pure malice. “Now go and help the cook with the meal.” Niksa nodded numbly. She was worn out. Something must have bothered him since he went inside. She could not think what, she had often wondered what her Saktish told him as he held it up to his black eyes. She put the question out of he mind, it would do no good to ponder on such things.


When Niksa served Sarifi his meal on the polished and carved wooden ceder table, she saw that he was caressing her Saktish. She watched as his fingers tightened their grip, his nails beginning to rake the stone’s surface. A cold shiver ran down her spine. The world turned into a blur as she braced for the punishment that was to come. Distantly a thought came to her, why was it always just before he ate? What sick thoughts crossed a mind as black as his? She could not even prove that these were her own thoughts as the world collapsed in on her mind. Distantly she heard laughter. Abruptly the laughter stopped.


The pain clawed down her back like four hot pokers, searing her skin. She was on her knees before she realised it. She looked up into the haze where Sarifi stood out clearly, staring into her eyes. A hint of a smile played on his lips. It was all she could do to not scream. She knew that if she let any sound escape her lips, he would feel the thrill of the pain and press harder, deeper into her Saktish.


Tears streamed down her pale face, his eyes were daring her to scream. She could bear it no longer. The scream ripped from her throat in a surge of noise, vibrating off the stone walls. It echoed through the house up and down the stone carved staircases. It lifted the very light from the room, plunging it into darkness.


When Niksa awoke, she lay on the hard stone floor in the darkness. She stifled a moan as he tried to rise unsteadily to her feet. From the corner of the room a dim light appeared. She crept towards it. This darkness had never happened before; she wondered how it had happened.


In the small pool of light in front of her, there stood a figure made of stone. It’s expression of pain and surprise chiselled into its features. There in front of her stood a stone statue of Sarifi. A single dim light emanated from something he clutched to his chest. It was her Saktish.


She moved her hand towards it, her hand shaking slightly as she did so. Her Saktish came away easily in her hand. What happened? She wondered looking disbelievingly at the statue before her. She held her Saktish close to her chest, comforting it with a gentle stroking. She whispered to it though she did not know if it could hear her, but she smiled as the glow brightened in response.


As the winter came to swallow the autumn the house of stone stood completed. In the garden where so many leaves had fallen, stood a figure made of stone. It stood there as a memory or perhaps as a warning to those who oppress. Whatever reason, it remained there throughout the seasons, watched only by the silhouette of someone in an upstairs room. One that cradled and whispered to something clutched lovingly to her chest.

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3 Feb 2005:-) Sharon *Blackstaff* Black
Wow. Intense. Nice characters, and nice ending, though a little cliche- the ghost sticking around and all. I love the idea, though, and the emotion is well wrought. Heh, heh- I said "wrought."

:-) Emma-Jane C. Smith replies: "Heh, heh- she said "wrought."!*whcks her head to stop her insane laughing*Thanks a lot for your comment, I'm glad you liked it! Stick around I'm sure there will be lots of other works of mine you like! *wink* *wink*"
26 Apr 2005:-) Jkelley2
Oh, tis hard to think of what to say that hasn't already been put forth here. That said I think I'll have to second (third, fourth, whatever) the imagery and metaphor comments. Very well done.

She certainly did have the power to finish the "stonework" eh? Oh the irony! Love it 12 Althouuuugh, she seems to be developing a Golem complex with the stone at the end there. Treatment might be in order 10

:-) Emma-Jane C. Smith replies: "Therapy???!!! Are you saying one of my characters needs therapy?!!!!!!!!!! How DARE you!!!*cough* Just letting out a little bit of evil myself. I get so stressed when someone says the ...er... 't' word. I get so jumpy and look around for the men in white coats. You know how it is.....*there is movement behind her and she launches herself across her bedroom to hide behind the bed. In walks in her cat.*Oh Tiger!Tiger's dressed up in a white coat!"
17 Jun 200545 Christabel Nolan
Saktish Saktish Saktish!!!!!
it was at the top of the page dammit!
thats what you get for looking at the keyboard when typing.

:-) Emma-Jane C. Smith replies: "Yep!! But don't worry. I wont hold that against you 10"
17 Jun 200545 Christabel Nolan
wow, what an awsome idea! you could definetly take this further, all the way through I was thinking "when is she going to go on a secret mission to steal back her sasquatch?"
sorry, I forgot what it was called. I have many dead brain cells.
but yeah... it was good. the ending was a bit abrupt for me, I would like to read some more about her perhaps stealing HIS sasquatch and getting her own back. anyway... I must go and feed my children. damned elfwood, It' s addictive, you know. beware.

:-) Emma-Jane C. Smith replies: "Glad you liked it!! This is probably the one story I actually wrote making sure I put lots of imagry in it (at the begining at least).I wanted the end abrupt. But who knows, I may change it later on. Have fun feeding your children!!Which reminds me, I haven't fed my critters in over a month. "
25 Jul 200545 Max Hebditch
good description on Niska's feelings towards saktish. youve got some good ideas going in this one

:-) Emma-Jane C. Smith replies: "Thanks... and thanks again... and thanks again!!!! 2"
12 Nov 2005:-) Elizabeth Wilcox
I only noticed one *mistake*--

It was all she could do to not scream.

instead of "to not", it should be "not to".

This is a great story, though I can't help but wonder at the abruptness of her salvation (couldn't think of another word for it . . .). What happened? How?

:-) Emma-Jane C. Smith replies: "It's all part of the mystery... tee hee hee...But on a serious note, I know what you mean. I think this story needs another go through soon. Don't know when I'll get around to it though!Oh and thank's for picking up that error!!! 2"
16 Nov 2005:-) C. 'Liari' Seidel
I like it, I love it, I want some more of it! Heh, your dose of country for the day. Kinda reminds me of my skaytha, but not. *grins wickedly* I love Changed...the first part, at least. I haven't revamped the second part yet. Yet. Yes.

:-) Emma-Jane C. Smith replies: "I will have to go check it out then! And I'm glad you like this story... I think it's one of my favourites because of it's simplicity and vivid description. ^_^"
20 Dec 2005:-) Anne M. Leath
Wow, I love the concept and everything! The best part for me was the imagery of her whispering to the Saktish, almost like a child cradling something even more fragile, it was awesome!

:-) Emma-Jane C. Smith replies: "Thanks! ^_^YAY!! I can do imagry! *does happy dance*"
5 Jul 2006:-) Patricia M. D´Angelo
Wonderful job with this piece. I too like the idea that maybe somehow the house might have helped in her rescue.

Very original idea, with the soul held in a stone.

:-) Emma-Jane C. Smith replies: "Thankyoooou! I'm very proud of this particular story... it's very different from all the others. Glad you liked it!*an enormous cumquat comes up to you and gives you a nice big hug* I think Enormoquat likes you!! *winkwink*"
17 Oct 200645 Anonymous
VERY interesting.
Though it was a good short story, I really think you should put more into it. There is some things in your story that could use some explaining. The one big thing that needs explaining (at least for ME) is how did Sarifi turn into stone? And wasn't he squeezing it (that's the impression I got), so how did the Saktish slip out of his hand so easily??
Other than all that, great S.S. (short story). I hope you write a sequel or something for it.

:-) Emma-Jane C. Smith replies: "Gosh, i wrote this ages ago. Suppose it is time for me to go back and edit it! Thankd for the tips and after I had it posed for a while some people did say that a sequel would be good. I've got part of it written...somewhere.... Maybe I'll get around to finish it one of these days!Don't forget to come back and visit!!"
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'The Saktish':
 • Created by: :-) Emma-Jane C. Smith
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 • Keywords: Girl, Master, Oppression, Soul
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc.
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