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"Vienna 6" by Rian Sanderse

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Nickolas is dead, but Vienna has to go on.
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Vienna 6

Patro looked up at the second whisper. He saw Vienna disappearing in the mist. “Vienna, wait!” He screamed. Inside he was torn to pieces. He had to take care that the Vjenoms wouldn’t eat Nickolas, and he also needed to convince Vienna that she didn’t kill Nickolas.

Patro decided to bring Nickolas to safety first. He knew where Vienna was going. It shouldn’t be too difficult to follow her.

When Nickolas was brought to safety Patro got things ready for his leaving. There were lots of things to handle, since he was the leader of the fighting league. People reacted shocked on Nickolas’ death. They hadn’t expect him ever to come back. When he left the fighting zone he said he wouldn’t ever come back.

They admired him for the courage he had shown. And now, he was dead, just like the flick of one’s finger life had been taken away from him.

Some of the men, those who had known Nickolas very well, cried in silence. Silent tears rolling down their cheeks, but it was too late. Nickolas was gone and nothing could bring him down.

“Bury him, at a safe place. Give him a worthy funeral.” Patro whispered trying not to show his emotions. Trying to keep his pain for himself. He wanted to cry, he wanted to scream. He wanted to yell at everyone that life wasn’t fair.

“Where is the girl?” Someone behind Patro asked.

Patro turned around, one of his most loyal men looked at him.

“The girl, Nickolas brought a girl here, where is she?” He asked

“I don’t know.” Patro said. “I think she is heading north. She thinks it’s her fault that Nickolas got killed. She think she murdered him. Nickolas figured she wanted to go to frains forest. That is why I have to leave now. I can’t let her get killed. Nickolas gave his life to protect her. I have to take over. I owe that to him. Everyone knows what happened to those who dared to go to Frains forest, but she doesn’t. She’s not from here. It’s weird that she shows so much courage. I never thought I would meet a girl like her. Probably Nick thought the same about her. She’s different, we can’t sacrifice her.”

“She must be insane. To me she seemed like a normal girl, not the kind of girl that wanted to get herself killed. She must have known something about the Frains. Everyone grows up with these myth’s.” The guy said.

“I want to go after her” Patro told him.

“Okay, now I am doubting your mind as well. You can’t stop her. You could see the determination in her eyes. She won’t let you stop her. She knows what she wants, and she makes sure she gets it. Besides, she’s a woman. Never argue with a woman, my dad always said, you can never win. He was a wise man, my father.” The man, called Kieran, said.

“You apparently know a lot about woman, don’t you?” Patro said.

“I grew up with six sisters, so it was learning to understand or drown in misunderstanding.” Kieran grinned.

“So you suggest, I stay where I am, and wait until she comes back with an army of Frains and eagles. Or not at all.” Patro frowned.

“For instance, yes. People here need you harder than she does. She has two shots, or they like her and listen, maybe even do what she wants them to do, or they don’t like her and kill her. Either way, there is nothing you can do. You don’t help anyone if you die somewhere on the way.” Kieran answered. “The girl can help herself, she’ll be okay. She is clearly used to being alone.”

“You are probably right. Vienna can handle all of this.I already saw that Vjenom didn’t freak her out as much as they should. It’s a brave girl, a bit too brave as I may say, and a friend of Nick.” Patro sighed.

Vienna wouldn’t have agreed if she had heard these words. Seeing so much dead human bodies almost made her throw up. She couldn’t stop crying. So many faces, so much staring eyes, so much death.

Vienna wanted to put her hands on her ears, close her eyes and scream. She didn’t, of course. She knew that would attract Vjenom, and her only chance, and with hers the only chance of this world, was to make sure she didn’t end up dead.

Vienna stumbled over a dead body. She lost one of her shoes. So she crawled back over the body. Suddenly she realized this wasn’t a human body. With her shoe in her hand Vienna crawled back. Pulling two hands, one with the shoe, in her face to keep herself from screaming, she sat back on the ground.

When the smoke cleared up a bit she found out she turned out to be on some kind of Vjenom killing spot. Many Vjenoms laid dead on the ground, spread in about a hundred square meters. They were not killed by man, or at least most of them weren’t. The Vjenoms were or burnt or completely ripped open. Very few were hit by arrows, which made them look really weird. Many arrows sticking out of them.

“So, they also kill each other.” Vienna whispered, “and I thought human were grows, killing each other. They don’t make such a mess of it like Vjenoms and Tnurik do.” She smiled a bit. “Too bad they quit killing each other at a certain time.”

She put her shoe back on and started to walk north again. The smoke got thinner. Far away Vienna could see the forest. It went all up the hill, as far as Vienna could see the forest was huge.

Vienna had never seen so much different colors of green. She gazed at the forest. Even from that far she could see how special it was.

It took her several hours to get to the forest. The closer she got, the more she got impressed by the wood.

Patro was very concerned about Vienna. Whatever he did, she was never far out of his thoughts. He knew he was obsessed about her, thinking 24 hours a day about some girl you only saw for a few minutes, that’s really sick.

He didn’t mind though, he was pretty okay with it.
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24 Nov 2004:-) Sophie 'Photosoph' Matthews
"Besides, she’s a woman. Never argue with a woman, my dad always said, you can never win. He was a wise man, my father."

-Lol, very cool. ^_^

I feel so great -I get to be the first person to comment on this chapter! *screams with delight, and puts on a party hat. Coloured paper rains down, and a few bright balloons float towards the ceiling*.

All right... now for the dance...
*Switches on disco lights and dances to 'Night fever' like a crazed disco fan.* -Happy first comment Rian!

Anyway... back to actually commenting about the chapter....

This chapter was very cool as well! I liked this just as much as the rest of this story; it's another great chapter for a great story by an excellent author. Well done!

3 Rian Sanderse replies: "*Can't stop blushing* You are very good for my ego girlie! Thank you very much. You are a marvelous artist as well. You really have to inform me when you update, I'll do the same!
Love Rian"
26 Jan 2005:-) Sabine B. Fischer
A lot of dialogue in here, and that is good. Definitely improvement. 2
And I also dig that quote that the other commenter mentioned, it's absolutely lovely, an old topic and nicely said. 1
5 Jun 200545 Anonymous
HEY!!! Great story!... I may have missed this in one of the other chapters, but... what does she look like???
I NEED TO KNOW!!! please comment!
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'Vienna 6':
 • Created by: :-) Rian Sanderse
 • Copyright: ©Rian Sanderse. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Death, Frightening, Traveling
 • Categories: Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters, Warrior, Fighter, Mercenary, Knights, Paladins
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