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L. ´Dave´ Mitchell

"Woman And The Wall (Religious/Abstract)" by L. ´Dave´ Mitchell

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This was just something weird I finished at around 4 in the morning.
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Stacey noticed a few things wrong with the wall. The first problem she found was the color. Secondly, it was too short. She already knew those things, she came to expect those aspects of the wall. They seemed more noticeable; something about a short, green wall seemed colder than it had been in the past. It may have had something to do with the fact that the wall stopped responding.

"Please, talk to me, Wall," Stacey pleaded. She sat down. "I’m not leaving until you respond!" Her arms folded, Stacey prepared for the answer.

Nothing happened. The wall remained silent.

"Why haven’t you answered my question?" Stacey whined to the wall. She straightened up and looked over it, straining her ears; maybe the other side was responding. The other side said nothing, of course. Stacey knew that the side of the wall she sat on was the talking side. Hitting the ground impatiently with her palms, Stacey started to beg a response from the wall. "Pleeeeeassssee!"

Nothing again. The wall never remained so quiet before. Stacey stood up and, without dusting off her plaid skirt, walked once around the entire wall to make sure no one was around. As she suspected, no one was near the wall. The situation confused her more as the wall was silent only around other people.

The ground shook. The wall prepared to talk.

"Woman," the wall said in a low bass, shaking the nearby tree, "you must not ask these questions of a mere wall." The wall ended its sentence; the ground still rumbled as it was not done speaking but waiting for more questions.

Stacey was taken aback. "Why must I not? You always answered my questions before, Wall."

The wall paused, then responded. "I am not the Lord. Do not make me out to be He that is the Lord."

"I don’t understand."

"Do not make me your deity. A Savior has already been given to you by God, the Lord." The rumbling stopped, the wall said its peace.

Stacey knew that when the ground stopped shaking, the wall would not respond for another twenty-four hours. She stood up, this time making sure to wipe off any dirt from her plaid skirt, and headed back to the town. "Who is this God? A Savior? Why did Wall direct me to this God, this Lord?"

Stopping, Stacey looked around her. "God? Wall said that You exist. Please speak with me."

God responded right away, and Stacey began to talk with Him.

 

 

 

Acts 28:28—"Be it known therefore unto you, that the salvation of God is sent unto the Gentiles, and [that] they will hear it."

 

 

 

 

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11 May 200345 Anonymous
Is this supposed to be from the bible? How exactly does it fit into elfwood? Personally i am not a believer of your god another yes but that shouldn't lesser my opinion. I would epresiate a reply, i will check later. 2 Sorry this reply is so late, I sort of forgot about my story gallery. And I'm not sure why you didn't just leave an email address. They are free, you know 12Anyway, how does it fit into Elfwood? Elfwood regards religious things as fantasy, especially where deities and icons are concerned. That's why you can put pictures of Gaia, Anubis, or angels in fantasy galleries up here. I really wish you would have left a comment about my writing style instead of getting hung up on it being about "my" God and how the story fits into Elfwood.
3 Sep 2003:-) José Manuel López Vega
Actaully i don't really get it either though i don't question it. i've got enough gods in my story so as to not be concerned by that. It is really good. Uh, should i interpret it metaphorically or literally. i'm feeling slightly confused. Great bit anyway It's a fictional story but I actually want people to interpret it literally. I'm not bothered that people don't get it, I just want to know what you all think about it 1
20 Oct 200345 Enigmatic
I'm sure more people would comprehend your point if you didn't leave so much up to their imagination. Leaving some of the work up to the reader is fine, but too much gets them utterly lost and therefore displeased with the work. Perhaps if you had mentioned the questions the woman was asking instead of leaving that up to imagination. Those readers not familiar with the bible or the contents thereof would not immediately understand what the implied queries were, let alone why then the wall would refer the woman to God for answers. I know you said you don't care whether the readers like it or not, but if one day you find you do, perhaps you should try a different approach to your writing. Try to anticipate the audience and write accordingly. Figure the readers don't have the insight or information you have and explain the things that you think are basic and obvious. People like to have things explained anyway, just in case something somehow got lost in the translation. Otherwise, do what you do. Well, thank you for your suggestions. In all honesty, the stories in my fanquarter were written late at night with no real thought as to character development put into them (more stream-of-consciouness writing, basically). The reason the questions she asks the wall aren't mentioned is not because there's really some underlying meaning that I expect the readers to know; there just aren't questions. The reason she looks to a wall as God has no symbolic meaning; it has no meaning. I used to be in two fiction writing classes, and I actually put some thought into what I wrote. Most of the people in the class liked the stories, and there were those that simply didn't like my style of writing. I like to leave a lot to the reader (except for description and other observable things) becaue I like it when writers leave me to think about what they wrote. Most of my stories involve regular people, doing regular things, and the main focus is on their impressions, experiences, and feelings. I write the occasional abstract story, and those can be quite odd, as seen here.

As for Biblical background, there's none needed.
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About 'Woman And The Wall (Religious/Abstract)':
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 • Created by: :-) L. ´Dave´ Mitchell
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 • Keywords: Wall, God, Woman, Talk, Weird
 • Categories: Angels, Religious, Spiritual, Holy
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