| 13 Jul 2004 |  Cristina Marsi | Wheee, welcome to the woods, Leowon! Your story about Antharis is just lovely. I do love your style, and knowing the place you are describing so nicely just adds to the reading pleasure.  | |
| 28 Jul 2004 |  Larry N. Morris | What you have here so far is interesting. One suggestion (take it or leave it). Readers can follow a story much easier if you keep the names of people and place simple. Don't throw stumbling blocks in front of them and break the flow of the story. I know, some writers get away with it. Mercedies Lackey is infamous for it (it's the reason I don't like to read her books). Just a thought.   Jonas Wallenius replies: "Hi and thanks for the feedback. I think it's a good suggestion, though in this particular case I'm working within a set of given names. I hope there won't be too much stumbling, though!  " | |
| 4 Dec 2005 |  Laysha | ^-----
You don't like Mercedes Lackey??? GAH!
*gets on her dragon and flies off in a huff* | |
