| 7 Oct 2002 |  Alyssa Sloan Ullmeyer | I enjoyed everything you've posted here. I have one little critique: sometimes you skip around in time and/or place and you assume that your readers know quite a lot. Maybe I'm just slow tonight, but I was confused every so often. On the whole, great work though!   Herb 'Noiz' Piercy IV replies: "Thanks much, I agree, I need to work on a few things towards the end of this story. I must confess that these writing are an assignment for my regularly scheduled 3rd ed. D&D game, so I wrote them mostly with that group in mind. I guess I need to try and remember that not everyone here plays with us > " | |
| 31 Oct 2002 |  Squib | I also enjoyed the selections above (except the one about the winged elf, elves need to stick to making cookies and shoes). The stories are a great way to add background and personality to your characters. Keep up the good work! | |
