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"Dark LordAdoring *" by Lyndsay E. Gilbert aka Liadan

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Poem from a Vampyre courtesan to her necromancer owner.

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Queen of whores upon a throne

Gift of flesh upon the dying bone

Beautiful, deadly courtesan

We drank together the blood that ran

Oh I have had my fill of all your fears

I have wiped away too many of your tears

Dark Lord adoring

The god that smiles upon this whoring

Tell me to be pure, glowing white

The wicked bless and loving smite

Say the word and I am thine

All of yours is what is mine

Hated, deceiving courtesan

A whisper from every man

Oh I have had my fill of all your dark

I have lived too long bearing your mark

Night Lord inside

The god that seeks me out when I try to hide

Give myself to you, willing slave

Betrayal of innocence follows me to my grave

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Date	Name	Comment
13 Sep 2004	Helen 'Fallyn Raine' Falls	Loading... Is this written from Avay's or Andreya's POV? I can't remember. Lol. I love this poem, the imagery is beautiful as always. ^-^ Lyndsay E. Gilbert aka Liadan replies: "This is Andreya. Avay is shocked that you would even consider her a vampyre!lol. Ty for your comment sweetie. "
18 Sep 2004	Artemis Heart	Loading... This poem spins a dark web of enchantment in the beauty of its words and the uniquely intriguing message. Andreya's plea for love and redemption (in my thinking, anyway) has a slightly dark cast mixed with earnestness, and love. This poem goes beyond words, Lyndsay. It is simply beautiful. You've done a great job. Lyndsay E. Gilbert aka Liadan replies: "Thank you very much! Andreya thinks you've summed up what she was trying to achieve she's not sure about redemption though that bloods too damn tasty..."
22 Sep 2004	Joslyn Rubin	Loading... Yes. I agree w/ Artemis. very beautiful. now, if only i understood it all... its ok.. gonna read it a few more times.. some of my favorite poems i never understand.. this is gonna be one of them.. Lyndsay E. Gilbert aka Liadan replies: " You returned...yay. I will be putting up a ticket with a few bits of writing, not poems or weird elsive stuff. So do come back again. Hope you understood this one better after a few readings. Ty for the comment."
23 Sep 2004	E Purington	Loading... That is so..wow. I love the use of language; mine, thine.. And the rhyming was great! Very smooth. Cheers Lyndsay E. Gilbert aka Liadan replies: "Tis my pleasure yeps I'm acting very shakespearian with my thines and mines. hehe. ty for your comment."
14 Oct 2005	Rochelle Leya Watts	Loading... Very interesting imagery. I think one must be more familiar with the character to understand the story its trying to tell, since it is mostly abstract. I can tell it is a courtesan offering herself to a dark lord, which I believe is the point. And I like your style, which for the most part flows really well, with the rhymes and lack of punctuation. The only line in this work that stumbles is this one "Night Lord inside/The god that seeks me out when I try to hide". I'd remove the word out and it might read better. Try reading it out loud to see the change in flow. Otherwise keep up the interesting poetry writing.
15 Nov 2005	Dan Shevock	Loading... Interesting poem. It came off as very soul-rending. You were able to make the subject very real.