"Sweet *" by Lyndsay E. Gilbert aka Liadan

Nice moves, Joslyn, 8-P. It seem's I'm following you.

Anyways, I, too, liked the way you started each verse. After the song I just listened to I read it to the beat and the words fit to it. Really, most poems wouldn't do that, but this one is magnificent.

However, I think there is a typo, or perhaps is just my tiredness at the moment, I shall point it out anyhow.

"You don’t know what it feels like, because you simply feel."

Mayhaps it is supposed to be;

"You don’t know what it feels like, because you simply do not feel."

Just asking because it seemed liked it when I read it. Thought it over in my head as well.

But other than that, the poem is stunning, fantastic piece of work. And I do hope you add more.

Lyndsay E. Gilbert aka Liadan replies: "Again thank you so much for your comment. Once again that line can come out as a typo because the Vampyre in the poem is talking to a mortal who Feels. Ironically teh Mortal does not know how the Vampyre feels because the Vampyre cannot feel emotions (so it thinks) and the mortal can. So how can I mortal who feels understand what it feels liek not to feel.Takes a deep gasping breath. That is complicated to explain lol. Anyhow, I'm glad about the meter. Its something that seems to just come naturally, I'm not even thinking about it when I write. I think its because I play teh fiddle and its all about rhythm. And I play it in a Irish fashion (I am Irish) so I use no Music and I play by ear. Or maybe my muse just sits there counting it all out for me. HeheCheers for the comment."

I loved how you started each stanza. What is the silver in the blood? (i don't know much bout vamps cept the "classic" knowledge) I loved the last question. How can their be any emotions w/o a soul? Did his (im assuming its a guy) soul ever really go? Maybe just the morals but not the whole soul? Hmmm.. some new questions for you to ponder. *trys to do a "new" first comment dance but slides on the slippery floor*

Lyndsay E. Gilbert aka Liadan replies: "Silver in the veins- according to some Vampyre legends, silver is poisonous to them. So basically the Vampy in the poem wants to die.Thank you for your comment. I would not agree that the soul ever goes away- it seems to be more denied.A vampyre doesn't need to kill to feed afterall..."

Once again, a classic read. Descriptive, inviting - quite a way with poetry, Lyndsay. My compliments!

Lyndsay E. Gilbert aka Liadan replies: "Inviting is an excellent desciption. I'm well pleased "

Poor Andreya...unless its Raphael. lol. Your gonna have to draw more pictures of your vampyres. lol.

Lyndsay E. Gilbert aka Liadan replies: "Odd...it is indeed Raphael afterall..."

This is excellent as well. I liked the rhyme, except I think it could have been changed in the second-to-last line in the final stanza. That read a little odd, but other than that I loved it!

Lyndsay E. Gilbert aka Liadan replies: "I think maybe there's a different in teh way we are all reading it out. The rhythm goes 14 syllables in line one, 14 syllables in line two. then 13 syllables in line 3 and 4 in each verse. Either way. thank you for your comment "

This poem is sweet, so perfect title. and its good to know the thing about the silver, its kinda sad i didn't know that before. Anyhoo- great poem.

Lyndsay E. Gilbert aka Liadan replies: "Thank you for your comment "

wow.. that was awesome!! I love the ending. questioning whether what she or he really feels is real. Hmm... I think this vampire is a woman for some reason. I dunno. I understood that she wanted to die!! yes yes indeedy.

This is very good!! very poetic and vampirey