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Kelsey M. Graham

"Ashes, Ashes..." by Kelsey M. Graham

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What can I say? I was bored. And I have been reading waaay too much Edgar Allen Poe. That, coupled with the pictures of the Doyle Diaries, led to this. As it took me about 45 min. to write, it is in bad need of editing -_-;
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Ring around the rosie, A pocketful of posie…

Bird sat in the blackened remnants of her home, listlessly gathering handfuls of ash, only to let the wind take it from her cupped hands as her eyes stared blankly into the sun. Dust to Dust, Ashes to Ashes… In the distance, she could hear the hash clang of a bell, and the monotonous “Bring out the dead” of the Dead-collectors. When the madness had first begun, the words had been accompanied by loud weeping and wailing. Now it was silent save for the groans of the dying. No one had the energy to care anymore. Bird licked her lips, tasting dust. Their fault. she thought. Their fault. If they had only listened to her…
Bird glanced over her shoulder. “What’s so funny?” she cried, shaking her ash-smeared fist at the skeleton that stood beside her. The skull only grinned mockingly. The cadavers walked through the town, seen only be the dead and dying. At night they danced on the hills to unheard drums and tambourines, laughing silently at an unknown joke as the living groaned. Fear was no longer just in the darkness, it had spread, so that even in the harsh light of the afternoon it stalked, its full terror unveiled for all to see. Bird had first seen them one day, that awful day, when the exhausted, sick stranger had collapsed in the middle of the town square. She had told her parents not to let him stay, not to touch him, to throw him out to die. But her parents had silenced her, and the townsfolk called her a witch, and the skeletons had grinned with glee. And the dance began. Only she saw the flower-bedecked skeletons dancing away the night, to the music of clicking bone and death-rattles. Sometimes she wondered what folly of man they laughed ceaselessly at- what it was about this macabre spectacle that they found so amusing.

She knew that she would learn soon enough. That morning, she had found the tell-tale rash on her arms and legs, felt her gums begin to swell and bleed. She would soon dance up on the hill, with a shroud of stars.

Ashes, Ashes, we all fall down…

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5 Jun 2007:-) Sarah-amy haley
*gasps* Amazing, creepy story. I loved it, so dark and perfectly written. I wouldn't change anything!

SMILE: )

57 Kelsey M. Graham replies: "Thanks! *big smile* *mother walks in and wonders why Kelsey has a huge smile glued onto her face* Mom: okaaay"
31 Jul 200745 AMG
I want to know who the stranger was...and why the townspeople thought she was a witch...but like every good short story, it leaves you wanting more. Good job!

61 Kelsey M. Graham replies: "The stranger was some random person with the black death, and the townsfolk thought she was a witch because she was "seeing things" and such. Hope that cleared things up. Thank you!"
2 Oct 2007:-) Désirée Dippenaar
Ooh, I like it! ^^ You bring across the feeling so well, somehow, in that first paragraph. Great story!! ^^

:-) Kelsey M. Graham replies: "Thank you!"
16 Nov 2007:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed
o_o -shudders- that song is the most creepy song and it has always scared me since I was a little kid! Anyways...I like it, don't change it! It's a very dark tale but the weird/creepy energy of it is wonderful. The "Bring out your dead" reminds me of Monty Python and the Holy Grail, ever seen that movie?

45 Kelsey M. Graham replies: "*shifty eyes* maaaaybeeeee.....*throws a Holy Hand-grenade and makes her escape*"
13 Jun 2008:-) Meaghan M. Jendrysik
heh...Holy Hand Grenade.....
wow kelsey chan, way to be dark and mysterious. you gain 1000000000 mysteriousness for this one my friend

:-) Kelsey M. Graham replies: "*deathglare at being called kelsey-chan agaaaain* heh. now if only those mysterious points could transfer to KoL... *realizes she’s being a nerd* Nee!"
29 Jun 2008:-) Angela Nordahl
Oooh! Perdy... I love it! Yeah, the other Kelsey told me you wrote some nice dark fantasy that I would like so I decided to check out your stuff- so far I say good job! This was very nicely written.

:-) Kelsey M. Graham replies: "thank you. I never thought of myself as a writer of dark fantasy... But I just realized that a large part of my gallery is kinda depressing. o.O Maybe I should talk to my shrink *yells* HEY MOM, AM I DEPRESSED? (Mom: No.) ah, the benefits of having a psychiatrist for a mother..."
2 Aug 2008:-) Natalie RedWolf Diebolt
oooh...creepy. So is she a seer/witch of sorts? Also, is there any significance with her name being Bird? The story was a bit too choppy and a bit confusing for me but the gist of it is clear. I like the mental picture of the dancing skeletons on the hill. Along with it being a historical moment and the association with the children’s song is very appealing to me.

:-) Kelsey M. Graham replies: "I always thought that that song is waaaaay too creepy for small children.
Heh. I don’t dare touch this story. It doesn’t always make sense to me, either.
thank you."
6 Oct 2008:-) Lydia stephanie Barker
Holy Crap!! This is dark but you do a wonderful job in pulling a person in and making them feel as though they are standing right next to the girl. Watching the dancing and even seeing her caughing up the blood.

I have always disliked that song. I was told from a very young age about the origin of that song. I was told in grousom details about it. I hate that song, but you did a wonderful job with the story and think that the song fit in nicely with your story. great job!!

:-) Kelsey M. Graham replies: "Ring-Around-the-Rosie is a thoroughly creepy song. Glad people still like this despite its ridiculous shortness. Thank you!"
24 Mar 2009:-) Patricia M. D´Angelo
Scary little tale. You’ve given life to the origin of that little song.

:-) Kelsey M. Graham replies: "IT-IT’S ALIIIIIIIIIVE!!!!! MWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA-
*ahem* Thank you.
Small children have very morbid imaginations. It really should be no surprise that there would be a song like that..."
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About 'Ashes, Ashes...':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Kelsey M. Graham
 • Copyright: ©Kelsey M. Graham. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Death, Black, Blackdeath, Dead, Sickness, Skeletons, Danceofdeath
 • Categories: Demons, Imps, Devils, Beholders..., Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Mythical Creatures & Assorted Monsters, Vampires, Zombies, Undeads, Dark, Gothic, History-based, Parallel or Alternate Reality/Universe, Afterlife
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