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Kelsey M. Graham

"Who´s Afraid Of The Big, Bad Wolf?" by Kelsey M. Graham

SF&F Picture 9 out of 9 by Kelsey M. Graham
 
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I actually don't really like this, I couldn't get the dialogue right. Eeevil dialogue. meh. crits welcome, as usual.
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The testimony of Vermillion T Hund was taken on March 13, 1202, at Safe Harbor near Volf Forest by Dr J. Grimm.
Dr. Grimm: Will you stand up and hold up your right hand and take the oath, please?
Do you solemnly swear that in the taking of your deposition in these proceedings, you will tell the truth, the whole truth, and nothing but the truth, so help you God?
Subject: I do.
Dr. Grimm: Would you state your full name, for the record?
Subject: Vermillion Tara Hund.
Dr. Grimm: Miss Hund, would you please tell us what you know about the events that have just transpired? There will be no interruptions.
Subject: I- I’ll try. I don’t know what to say- everything’s happening so fast, I still can’t believe it that- that she’s gone. {subject sobs} I- I just can’t-.
Forgive me. I’m alright now.
We- everyone in our town, I mean, knew about it- you see? It’s a small town, with no secrets. So yes, everyone knew about Grandmother’s little.. nocturnal problem. See, when she was a little girl, she loved animals, all kinds. She wasn’t scared of anything, and the animals loved her. So, when she saw the werewolf, she just thought it was a big doggy and toddled up to pet it.
No, it didn’t bite her, stop jumping to conclusions! You know, that was the kind of thinking that- never mind. I digress. SO anyway, she went up and petted it. And it licked her. Not bit, Licked. And ..Maybe she had a cut or something, I don’t know. It really doesn’t matter. What matters is, she ended up a werewolf, but not the normal sort. She was more like a big, friendly dog than a wolf. She used to let the village children go for rides on her back. But she’s old now, and live-d by herself. Her once impressive array of teeth are gone now, and her fur is streaked with gray. She gets- got lonely sometimes, especially at night.
And yes, I went to visit her a lot, talking to her, sharing snacks my mother packed, and keeping her company. We had a lot in common, you know? She always said I was her favorite. She made me a beautiful red cloak, and I always wear it, see?
I was late this time, so I knew she would already have changed. But this time, when I knocked on the door, I felt that something was somehow, terribly wrong. She didn’t come to the door, so I pushed it open and walked inside. She was lying in her bed, with only her furry ears sticking out of the covers.
‘Granny, what big ears you have,’ I called. It’s a long standing joke between the two of us. You see, the first time I saw her in werewolf shape, that’s what I said (I was only little then, so I didn’t know how to be tactful). We still love to tease each other about it… Well-we did, anyway.
But there was no answer, just silence. I was kind of worried, so I got up and pulled the blankets back and- {subject breaks down, crying} She was dead. Some maniac with an axe had- had {subject blows nose loudly with handkerchief}
Why would someone do something like that- I mean-
{subject starts pacing} look, all I’m asking is that you catch this murderous woodsman, before he kills again.
And I suggest you find and deal with him fast, because we are going to take matters into our own hands. A lot more than big teeth run in our family, take it from me.
Who’s afraid of the big, bad wolf?
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30 Oct 2007:-) Zoe Lorinda Cowen
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22 Kelsey M. Graham replies: "undefined"
18 Dec 2007:-) Jessica "Clemon" Perrie
Wow, that's a really interesting take on the whole Red Riding Hood Story. In most other versions of this story, Vermillion, or Red as she is usually called, is all hard and powerful, and yet here she's acting like any normal person would. 2
22 Dec 2007:-) Kelsey Lynn Reed
I am currently laughing hysterically at this, I love it! I usually hate the story of Little Red Riding Hood or whatever it's called but this is great! -falls out of chair-
14 Jun 2008:-) Meaghan M. Jendrysik
wow kelsey. it seems like all sad and you start crying and stuff untill you realize what it is...then you start laughing hysterically at the cleverness of it all1515151515 heh kitties

:-) Kelsey M. Graham replies: "*blink* people seem to be finding this really amusing. I wonder why? (Maybe you are biased) it is true I don’t like this story, but... (Exactly)"
24 Jun 2008:-) Jacob Bowdin
Okedoke, here it goes...

1. I am uncertain of the font... half the time I liked it, and the other time my eyes tried to file for abuse claims...

2. Perhaps spaces between dialouge changes or paragraphs, it is ok as is, but this would ease the reading a bit.

3. "Grandmother’s little.. nocturnal problem"
- Oh dear... this should be interesting...

4. "So, when she saw the werewolf, she just thought it was a big doggy and toddled up to pet it."
- Hello Mr. wolf, oh, please release my arm?
- Oops, I jumped to a conclusion, crap...

5. "live-d"
- Typo? Sorry, I am picky sometimes...

6. Excellent! I know you said you didn’t like this one, but honestly, that was a neat story, a uniquely dark take on Little Red Riding Hood. Very enjoyable =)

:-) Kelsey M. Graham replies: "*snickers* the font was because I was trying to make it look like a typed official interview at a police station...bugs my eyes too.
#4: one of the many reasons I don’t like this. That bit was waaaay too weakly written. "
12 Jul 2008:-) Mandy Burnham
Heya Kelsey... I’m not here to pick, so nothing about font or style or anything like that. ^_^ I feel that style and ’getting dialogue right’ is important, but realistically, a side issue. It’s the nuts an bots--technicalities easily fixed with a good editing session or an editor-friend. What is really important, you have. Creativity. Taking an old idea and making it new. Intriguing ideas. I enjoyed this. it was short and sweet and to the point (forgive the cliche!) Cheers!
17 Oct 2008:-) Nicoline Badenhorst
I like. Red is rather sober though, seeing as she just lost her grandmother to an axe-wilding monster. Maybe you could rephrase the "So, when she saw the werewolf, she just thought it was a big doggy and toddled up to pet it" to make it... more dramatic. Let people jump to conclusions, maybe keep the werewolf secret a bit longer. What I’d do is the following: "She loved all animals, but especially dogs- the bigger, the better, and she’d often snuggle down into their fur and fall asleep. One day, there was a dog even bigger than most dogs, all sleek fur and fangs. A wolf. I know this because she’s often told me this story- we get, sorry, got, along very well. But to come back to my story- the werewolf licked her, no, not bit, just licked. But she must have had some small cut or something- and that’s it. She’s turned into a werewolf, but she’s never hurt anyone, if that’s what you were thinking. No, not her. She used to let us ride on her back through the village. We all loved her, with our little hands entwined in her warm fur." Of course, that would be my interpretation, and terribly soppy too, I know. I like it, though! I always hated this story because it was so clunky, and that is a great idea!

I like the impression of a typed report the font gives, but most of all I like the hidden threat/hint in the second-last sentence, it gives me the feeling Red is much more like her grandmother than she actually says.

:-) Kelsey M. Graham replies: "*evil laughter* ’...Yes our teeth and ambitions are bared/Be prepared!’
...
...What, don’t you randomly burst into disney songs?

Anyways, I’m glad someone likes the font, and that it achieved what it was meant to do."
19 Apr 2009:-) Patricia M. D´Angelo
Delightful take on a classic fairy tale. Dr. Grim18

:-) Kelsey M. Graham replies: "heehee. thanks! I’d forgotten about this one."
15 Jun 2009:-) Natalie RedWolf Diebolt
*GOOSEBUMPS!!!*

As always taking a different perspective on things and pulling it off in a spectacular style.

*Applause*

Bloody murderous woodsmen... *shakes fist*

:-) Kelsey M. Graham replies: "Seriously, you’ve got this big guy walking through the woods alone with an axe. Not to mention, in the original story, what was he doing walking into some old lady’s house anyway? creeeeepy.
Also- ever seen the movie ’Hoodwinked’?"
21 Aug 2009:-) Anna Zebrastar Rose
Yes, I do sometimes randomly burst into Disney songs. Yes, I saw the movie Hoodwinked, and loved it! I like this, puts a nice spin on a pretty gory tale.
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About 'Who's Afraid Of The Big, Bad Wolf?':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Kelsey M. Graham
 • Copyright: ©Kelsey M. Graham. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Red, Riding, Hood, Redridinghood, Wolf, Werewolf, Fairytale, Fairy, Tale, Twisted, Bigbadwolf
 • Categories: Lycanthrope, Were-folk, etc, European Traditions, Mythology, Parody
 • Views: 671


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