| Date | Name | Comment | | | 15 May 2004 | Becca Lusher | Loading...*looks up* I swear Joelle's psychic or something, plus she definitely gives Ol'Father Time some serious backhanders, not that i'm complaining ^_^ Right well i can't give too great a comment on this as someone was distracting me while i was reading *beady eyes* But i love the feel of it, definitely a minstral tale, and the fact that the hero was a women did not go unnoticed. You're really starting to build up the history to this world, which is just great, the more the merrier i say. The only problem with epic poetry (and why i never write it) is it takes so long! Why sweat and slave over poetry when you can scribble down prose, i say, but then that's because i'm secretly green eyed monster over those who pull it off ... Nice one ^_~ Adrian H. Wood replies: "I know, Joelle's beginning to scare me actually...I've got this sneaky suspiscion that she's got connections to the MOD underground - or perhaps she really is psychic!
Oh yeah um, I didn't mean to distract you from reading but I just had to whinge to someone about my stupid work and exams 
You're quite right with your comments about epic poetry, it's such a pain in the ass and I think I'm fed up with poetry as such for the time being. Back to Winter's Fate and a few other nifty tales I'm working on then... Hehe, be afraid, very afraid.
Thanks for reading, youze a darling!" | |
| 15 May 2004 | D Joelle Duran | Loading...Bravo! *applauds* A delightful telling with a catchy and enjoyable meter. Nice work--though I can see how doing a poem that long could be quite tough. Just one typo: "Who’s gallantry and steely nerve" Who's should be Whose. Again--good work. It really has the feel of a epic a minstrel would sing. =) Adrian H. Wood replies: "Wow I'm in awe, it's the speedy one again lol! Ooh damn those little spelling mistakes that always creep in...re-reading it now I think there's also quite a few problems with the meter but overall I guess it works 
Thanks a lot for your kind words again, I'm glad you liked this because it took bloody ages, hehe. You must be the most reliable commenter in the world (TM)! Thanks again" | |
| 16 May 2004 | Jeff Burke | Loading...(Sigh) Adrian, Adrian, Adrian... I never thought that YOU, of all people, would be a feminist. I had such high hopes... No, just kidding. The whole "power to the Double X" thing is really neat. Oh, by the way: You completely gave away a certain little fact about the boy in WFSB...(cough, cough) Also, there are elves in Ysis? DANGER: do not, I repeat, do NOT stick to the "fab four." Elves, Men, Dwarves, Dragons. I already see Elves, Men, and Dragons... It was cool when Tolkien did it, not so much now, fifty years and millions of books later. Throw in something new, like talking insect people, or...OH! How 'bout an actual race of semi-good werewolves? Think of the emotional damage one of those characters could have! Just think of it! Um... I think, emphasis on think, that "boney" is spelled "bony." Yeah, definitely "bony" Nicely done, though I have to say that sometimes the rhythm was a bit weird. J. Atlas Burke P.S. The movies topic is officially dropped. Adrian H. Wood replies: "Thanks for the thumbs up and the crits, I'll sort the 'bony' out right away and yeah, I know some of the meter doesn't work. Ah well, poetry is so hard! I can't be bothered with it any more.
What did I give away about Darien though? You mean the thing about the 'source'? That's already in my overview of Ysis... But no worries about the races, right now what I have lined up is: lots of different human races, high elves, dark elves, a race of half human underwater creatures, dwarves, no dragons (only drakes exist which are the much smaller descendants), plus an abundance of critters, monsters and such goodies as enchanted animals, wereanimals etc. Hope that's a bit better for you? I just didn't want to go too crazy and stay true to traditional fantasy rather than mutate to science fiction having man-high talking insects or something, haha.
Alright well, thanks a lot for reading mate!" | |
| 8 Jun 2004 | Wolf | Loading...*Puts down story, takes 10 deep breaths, reaches below the table and pulls out large dwarven battle axe and walks to the door hmming an old dwarven drinking song. closes door behind her. hear a high pitched scream (ad) mad laugh (wolf) a swish (battle axe) and a thump (ad's head).* "that will teach you for being so damn good!" Adrian H. Wood replies: "*Aaaaaaarrrrrrrrr* Like the guy in Austin Powers said: "That really, really hurt!". Oh well, no worries, at least now my stupid brain will stop torturing me. Hold on, I still need it for my last uni exam tomorrow though! D'oh!! Ah never mind.. who needs a brain for a psychology paper anyways...
Holy cow, I just realized this is my 250th anniversary comment! Wow, that means I better go write something for you as thanks... any preferences? How ironic - you killed me and now I'm even rewarding you for it, lol." | |
| 9 Jun 2004 | Wolf | Loading...Just something where the dragon isnt evil but basically just write like you always do coz thats great!!! i love you poems but i love winters fate summers bane to so no worries i love it all!!!  Adrian H. Wood replies: " Alright, I'll see what I can cook up *Walks into the kitchen*"Hey Mogrem, where have you hidden the sugar?"
Oh, any preference as to whethere it should rhyme or something?" | |
| 10 Jun 2004 | Wolf | Loading...If poem defiantly rhyme if not well no worries but i love your poems coz they got rhyme and rhythm!!! Adrian H. Wood replies: "Ok *abides obediently* *runs of to write poem* "Hurry thee my muse, duty calls upon us!"" | |
| 26 Jun 2004 | The Doctor doktor@die...de> | Loading...Hey Adrian, just read this little poem on www.drachental.de and thought: Wow, this is freakin' awesome! It's more exciting than half of the normal fantasy stories you can read on the net and it keeps its rhymes and its meter throughout the whole ballad - respect! And I thought most of the writers in the net didn't know what a proper meter and content-matching rhymes were... I say it is by far one of the best fantasy poems I've read in the Internet till now. Great work, keep it up! Adrian H. Wood replies: "Wow thanks for the flattery! I didn't think anyone from Drachental would bother reading my stuff.. turns out I thought wrong There's lots of great poets over here on Elfwood though, you should give them a try! Some really fantastic poetry, if that's what you're in to. Do you have any stories up on Drachental yourself? I'd love to check them out.
Oh, and by the way: Eigentlich können wir uns ja auch auf Deutsch unterhalten wenn dir das lieber ist " | |
| 15 Dec 2004 | JM Larsson | Loading...Absolutely magnificent. A female protagonist, without an overly feminist air...very fresh. Excellent rhyming and meter, although I agree their are a few bugs. None are especially annoying, and poetry IS hard. I have never succeeded in writing a truly disciplined meter and been completely happy with it. *ich* But this...deserves more praise than I can think of right now. *leaves a keg of th' good stuff for some fine work* Adrian H. Wood replies: "Yeah meter is one of those things the world could do without if you ask me! But thanks ever so much for reading the whole thing *Sips on keg of good stuff... cringes* Not what I need after a week of partying lol! I'll store this one for later " | |
| 24 Apr 2007 | Kii | Loading...Woah. That was the awesomest poem ever | |
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